Hobby— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Be more fluent and concise: remove filler words (uh), correct grammar and unclear phrases, and add one or two specific details about the types of games or activities. Use a clear topic sentence followed by a linked reason and example. Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

Ví dụ: Yes, I enjoy playing video games in my free time because they help me relax after a busy day. For example, I often play cooperative puzzle games with friends online, which reduces my stress and lets me chat with them while we solve challenges.

Gợi ý: Start with a clear topic sentence and avoid fillers. Use past tense consistently and give a specific example of what you made with Lego. Use linking words like 'for example' to clarify what you mean.

Ví dụ: Yes, I loved building with Lego when I was a child. For example, I often made small houses and cars because I enjoyed inventing new shapes and figuring out how the pieces fit together.

Gợi ý: Use correct tenses and clearer time expressions. Begin with a topic sentence stating the hobby, then contrast past frequency with present using linking words like 'but' or 'now'. Be specific about frequency and who you play with.

Ví dụ: Yes, I have played football since I was a child. When I was younger I played every afternoon with my friends, but now I am busier so I play three times a week with the same group.

Gợi ý: Clarify meaning and correct grammar. Start with a clear statement about shared hobbies, then add a specific detail about your father's role as a teacher. Use linking words such as 'because' or 'so' to make the relationship clear.

Ví dụ: Yes, my father and I share the same hobby — football. He taught me how to play when I was young, so I learned most of my skills from him and we often practice together on weekends.

× I usually play games in my free time because I think that I can uh, decrease my stress when I play a game, not only the quick dress and I also can uh, talk with my friend and feel comfortable.

✓ I usually play games in my free time because I think that I can decrease my stress when I play games; not only do I relax quickly, but I can also talk with my friends and feel comfortable.

Multiple issues: parallel structure and correct gerund use. 'Play a game' is okay but 'play games' matches habitual action. 'Quick dress' is incorrect phrase; likely meant 'relax quickly' so use infinitive 'to relax' or rephrase with 'do I relax quickly'. Also use 'friends' plural and include auxiliary 'do' for inversion in the 'not only' construction. Improve by keeping parallel forms and correct verb patterns.

× When it was time, I, uh, usually played toy uh, and I remember that I really play Lego.

✓ When I was a child, I usually played with toys, and I remember that I really played with Lego.

Tense and verb patterns: 'When it was time' is vague; use 'When I was a child'. For past habitual actions use past tense 'played'. Add preposition 'with' for 'played with toys/Lego'. 'I really play Lego' mixes present with past context; change to past 'I really played with Lego'.

× I want to, I want to make thing up, uh, from Lego like how.

✓ I wanted to make things with Lego, to create models and imagine how they worked.

Tense inconsistency and noun forms: In context of childhood use past 'wanted'. 'Thing' should be plural 'things' and use preposition 'with Lego'. 'Make thing up' is informal and unclear; replace with 'create models' and infinitive phrases for clarity. Use '-ing' only where appropriate.

× When it was dry or when I grow up, I usually play football with my friend and when it was dry I play football every day, every afternoon.

✓ When I was younger or while I was growing up, I usually played football with my friends, and during that time I played football every afternoon.

Tense inconsistency: 'grow up' should be past 'was growing up' or 'grew up' if referring to childhood. Habitual past activities require past tense 'played'. 'Friend' should be plural 'friends' if playing with more than one, and 'every afternoon' fits with past 'played'. Replace 'when it was dry' (nonsense) with 'when I was younger'.

× But right now I do not have a lot of time, so I just play football with friends three times a week.

✓ But right now I do not have a lot of time, so I only play football with friends three times a week.

Minor word choice: 'just' is acceptable but 'only' is more natural here. Present tense is correct for current habits; no tense change needed. Ensure subject-verb agreement: 'play' matches plural subject 'I'.

× I have the same happy with my dad, he also play football like me and he would first teacher who teach me to play football and I like to play like playing football from him.

✓ I have the same hobby as my dad; he also plays football like me, and he was the first teacher who taught me to play football. I like playing football because of him.

Multiple pronoun and agreement errors: 'same happy' should be 'same hobby as'. 'He also play' needs third person singular 'plays'. 'He would first teacher' is ungrammatical; use 'he was the first teacher'. 'Who teach me' requires past 'taught me'. Final clause rephrased to natural English: 'I like playing football because of him.' Also fixed article and preposition usage.