Walking— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Be concise and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence: say whether you walk a lot. Fix grammar (e.g. "I walk a lot"), avoid redundancy ("daily" and "every day" together), and organize details: purpose, benefit, and result. Use linking words (because, so) and correct verb forms. Try to keep to 2–4 sentences.

Ví dụ: Yes, I walk a lot. I walk every day because I want to stay healthy and lose weight, and as a result I have lost about 20 kilograms. Because walking is easy to fit into my routine, I find it a sustainable way to exercise.

Gợi ý: Answer directly with a topic sentence, then give a clear reason and one brief result or example. Avoid repeating phrases ("didn't go outside" and "didn't walk a lot") and use varied vocabulary (e.g. "habit" -> "routine"). Keep sentences concise and use linking words like "because" and "so".

Ví dụ: No, I didn’t. As a child I didn’t have the routine of going outside to exercise because my family preferred indoor activities, so I gained quite a bit of weight.

Gợi ý: Start with a direct opinion, then give specific reasons and an example. Use linking words (for example, because, therefore) and more precise vocabulary ("scenery", "fresh air", "relaxation"). Avoid repetition of "like" and "have fun".

Ví dụ: People enjoy walking in parks because the scenery and fresh air are different from their usual indoor environments. For example, parks offer trees, ponds, and peaceful paths where people can relax and relieve stress.

Gợi ý: Give a clear topic sentence and then 1–2 supporting details: reasons and a personal connection. Correct grammar ("calm feelings" -> "a calming feeling"), avoid repetition ("near the river" twice), and use linking words (because, and) to connect ideas.

Ví dụ: I would like to take a long walk along the river because it has a calming atmosphere. I used to live nearby, so walking there would also bring back fond memories of my childhood.

Gợi ý: Use the past tense consistently and give specific details. Begin with a direct past-tense sentence ("I recently went to...") then describe features with precise vocabulary ("cherry blossoms", "koi pond"). Avoid filler words ("umm") and fix grammar ("taking" -> "took", "having fun" -> "had fun").

Ví dụ: Recently I went to a park called Shinjuku Gyoen and took a walk with my boyfriend. The park is famous for its cherry blossoms and a large koi pond, so we had a lovely time enjoying the scenery.

× Yes I do work a lot because I need exit daily exercise every day.

✓ Yes, I do work a lot because I need to exercise every day.

The sentence uses incorrect words and forms: 'exit daily exercise' is ungrammatical. The verb 'exercise' should be used after 'need to' (base form), not as a noun phrase here. Also add commas and 'to' after 'need'. Suggestion: use 'need to exercise every day' to express necessity.

× Umm it helps me lose my weight and very fat and I lost 20 kilogram since I started taking a walk every day.

✓ Umm, it helps me lose weight and become less fat, and I have lost 20 kilograms since I started walking every day.

Problems: 'lose my weight' should be 'lose weight' (no possessive), 'very fat' needs a verb like 'become' or 'get' to link adjective, 'kilogram' should be plural 'kilograms', and tense for ongoing result requires present perfect 'have lost' since action started in past and continues. Also 'taking a walk every day' is better as 'walking every day'.

× Did you often go outside to have a walk when you were a child?

✓ Did you often go outside to take a walk when you were a child?

The verb collocation is 'take a walk', not 'have a walk' in this context. 'Did you often' already marks past tense; 'take' is base form after 'did'. Use correct collocation for natural English.

× No, I didn't often go outside and have a walk when I was a child because I didn't have any habits to go outside and exercise.

✓ No, I didn't often go outside to take walks when I was a child because I didn't have the habit of going outside to exercise.

'Have any habits to' is incorrect; use 'the habit of' or 'any habit of' + gerund. Also 'have a walk' -> 'take walks' or 'take a walk', and plural 'walks' fits with 'often'. Use gerund 'going' after 'habit of'.

× I was very fat then because I didn't walk a lot.

✓ I was very overweight then because I didn't walk much.

'Very fat' is grammatically acceptable but 'overweight' is a more natural adjective. 'Walk a lot' in negative becomes 'didn't walk much' (use 'much' with negatives).

× I think people like to walk in the park because it gives them a view that they don't get to see in daily life, like at the office or at home.

✓ I think people like to walk in the park because it gives them views they don't get to see in daily life, such as at the office or at home.

'Gives them a view that they don't get to see' is wordy; 'views they don't get to see' is clearer. Use 'such as' for examples instead of 'like' when giving examples formally. Also 'view' plural fits better for general experiences.

× That's why people like to go outside and have fun walking around and see lots of things.

✓ That's why people like to go outside, have fun walking around, and see lots of things.

List of verbs needs parallel structure and proper punctuation: 'go outside, have fun walking around, and see' keeps parallelism. 'Have fun walking around and see' was not parallel.

× If I had a chance I'd like to go walk by the river because it gives me a calm feelings and also I used to live near the river so I would go and take a walk near the river so it brings back so many memories.

✓ If I had the chance, I'd like to walk by the river because it gives me calm feelings, and I used to live near the river, so walking there would bring back many memories.

Use 'the chance' (article), 'walk by the river' or 'go for a walk by the river' (not 'go walk'), 'calm feelings' should be singular or 'a calming feeling' — better 'calm feelings' or 'a calm feeling'. Use consistent verb forms: 'walking there would bring back' matches conditional. Avoid repeating 'so' and make clauses concise.

× Where did you go for a walk lately?

✓ Where did you go for a walk recently?

'Lately' is acceptable but 'recently' is more natural with past simple questions. Both are similar; change improves naturalness. No major grammar error but adjustment suggested.

× Recently I went to a park called Shinjuku Gym and taking a walk with my boyfriend.

✓ Recently, I went to a park called Shinjuku Gyoen and took a walk with my boyfriend.

'Taking a walk' should be past 'took a walk' to match 'went'. Also park name likely 'Shinjuku Gyoen' (common proper noun), and verb tense must be consistent: 'went' and 'took'.

× The park is very famous for umm the good scenery like Trey Blossom and the koi pond.

✓ The park is very famous for its beautiful scenery, like cherry blossoms and the koi pond.

Use 'its' to show possession, 'beautiful scenery' more natural than 'good scenery', 'Trey Blossom' is likely 'cherry blossoms'. Use correct noun forms and articles.

× So I like to go there and having fun, get to see lots of things.

✓ So I like to go there, have fun, and get to see lots of things.

Maintain parallel structure: 'like to go there, have fun, and get to see' uses parallel infinitive/verb forms. Original mixed 'like to go' with 'having fun' (gerund) causing inconsistency.