Walking— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Be direct with a clear topic sentence, correct grammar, and concise supporting details. Avoid redundancy and fix sentence structure and verb agreement. Use linking words if adding reasons. For example, say you walk a lot, give one clear reason, and keep it within 2–3 sentences.

Ví dụ: Yes, I walk quite a lot, especially when I travel in Japan with my family. This is because public transport and many attractions are so convenient that we explore on foot.

Gợi ý: Use correct past tense and a clear topic sentence. Avoid repeating the same point; give one concise reason and a brief example. Use linking words like 'because' or 'so' correctly.

Ví dụ: Yes, I went outside a lot when I was a child because I was curious about everything around me. For example, I used to explore the neighborhood and play in the park with friends.

Gợi ý: Start with a clear topic sentence and give specific supporting details using linking words. Correct noun forms and avoid filler words. Mention two distinct reasons and provide a short example or result.

Ví dụ: People like walking in parks because they find it relaxing and can enjoy nature. For instance, seeing flowers and birds reduces stress and makes an evening walk pleasant.

Gợi ý: Give a clear conditional topic sentence and one or two specific reasons. Use correct modal and avoid hesitations. Keep it under five sentences and finish your thought.

Ví dụ: If I had the chance, I would take a long walk in the nearby park because it is within walking distance and helps me unwind after work. The peaceful paths and trees make it easy to relax.

Gợi ý: Use a clear past-tense topic sentence, avoid fillers, and complete your reasons. Provide one specific detail (when, who, or what you did) and a brief result or feeling. Keep it concise.

Ví dụ: Lately I walked in Benjakitti Park with my family in the evening for exercise. We enjoyed the fresh air and felt relaxed after a busy day.

× As a we know that Japan have a lot of attraction and many tourism didn't use the private car and it is used the public transport that.

✓ As we know, Japan has a lot of attractions, and many tourists don't use private cars; they use public transport.

Pronoun and determiner errors: 'As a we know' should be 'As we know'. Subject-verb agreement and pluralization: 'Japan have' -> 'Japan has'; 'attraction' -> 'attractions'; 'many tourism' -> 'many tourists'. Tense and auxiliary use: 'didn't use the private car' is incorrect contextually and grammatically; use present simple 'don't use private cars'. Word order and clarity: 'it is used the public transport that' is ungrammatical; replace with 'they use public transport'. Suggestion: simplify clauses, ensure subject and verb agree, and use correct plural nouns and pronouns.

× I often being outside when I was young, not because the reason like exercising but because I just curious about things around me like a child.

✓ I was often outside when I was young, not to exercise but because I was curious about the things around me like a child.

Incorrect verb form: 'being' is incorrect for simple past; use 'was'. Redundant wording: 'not because the reason like exercising' should be 'not to exercise'. Adjective/adverb and verb agreement: 'I just curious' needs verb 'was' ('I was curious'). Suggestion: use simple past for past habitual actions ('I was often outside'), and use concise phrases ('not to exercise', 'was curious').

× So I being outside quite a lot when I was young.

✓ So I was outside quite a lot when I was young.

Incorrect verb form: 'being' is wrong in past simple narrative; use 'was'. Maintain past tense consistency for past habits. Suggestion: use 'was' for past states or 'used to be' for habitual actions ('I used to be outside quite a lot').

× I think there are many reasons that make people like to walk in park, uh, maybe because park provide them a feeling of relaxing and also they can see a beautiful thing like flowers and animal and also help.

✓ I think there are many reasons why people like to walk in parks; maybe because parks provide them with a feeling of relaxation, and they can see beautiful things like flowers and animals.

Article and plural errors: 'in park' -> 'in parks'; 'park provide' -> 'parks provide' (subject-verb agreement); missing article/structure: 'a feeling of relaxing' -> 'a feeling of relaxation' or 'feel relaxed'; 'a beautiful thing' -> 'beautiful things'; 'animal' -> 'animals'. Extra fragment 'and also help' is unclear and should be removed or completed. Suggestion: use plural for general statements, ensure subject-verb agreement, and choose correct noun forms.

× I would go to the park nearby my home because it's convenient and it just can walk to the park directly without using public transport.

✓ I would go to the park near my home because it's convenient and I can walk there directly without using public transport.

Incorrect word order and pronoun use: 'park nearby my home' -> 'park near my home'; 'it just can walk to the park directly' is ungrammatical: the subject should be 'I' and verb order 'can walk'. Remove redundant 'just'. Suggestion: use 'I can walk there directly' for clarity and correct subject-verb order.

× And I just can't like uh, unwind after work easily because it's close to my home and.

✓ And I can unwind after work easily because it's close to my home.

Negative modal and unintended negation: 'I just can't like ... unwind' contradicts intended meaning. Remove 'can't' and filler words. Trailing conjunction 'and' creates an incomplete sentence. Suggestion: state positive ability 'I can unwind' and avoid unnecessary fillers.

× I went to a park nearby my home that's called, uh, so on Benjakitti Park.

✓ I went to a park near my home called Benjakitti Park.

Preposition and word order: 'nearby my home' should be 'near my home' or 'nearby' used differently; 'that's called, uh, so on Benjakitti Park' is wordy and ungrammatical — simplify to 'called Benjakitti Park'. Suggestion: use 'near my home' and place 'called' directly before the park name.

× So I went there with my family for exercising after work in the evening.

✓ So I went there with my family to exercise after work in the evening.

Verb form: 'for exercising' is awkward; use infinitive 'to exercise' to express purpose. Tense 'went' is correct. Suggestion: use 'to' + base verb for purpose clauses ('to exercise').

× So it was quite a good time because not.

✓ So it was quite a good time.

Incomplete sentence: 'because not' is a fragment and creates an unfinished cause. Remove the incomplete clause or complete it (for example, 'because it wasn't crowded'). Suggestion: avoid leaving sentence fragments; either complete the reason or omit the 'because'.