Walking— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Make your answer more concise and correct grammar. Start with a direct topic sentence, use one or two supporting details, and avoid redundancy. Correct verb forms (e.g., "I try" not "I've been trying" paired inconsistently) and articles. Use linking words like "so" or "because" properly.

Ví dụ: No, I don't walk a lot. However, I try to walk during my office lunch break because it helps me refresh and stay active for health reasons.

Gợi ý: Use a clear topic sentence and correct tense consistency. Avoid repeating the same reason; combine clauses to be concise. Replace informal phrasing with more natural expressions and use linking words like "because" and "so" correctly.

Ví dụ: No, I didn't walk outside often as a child because my parents preferred to stay indoors and they wouldn't let me go out alone, so I had few chances to walk by myself.

Gợi ý: Avoid repetition ("in parks in parks"). Start with a direct reason, then give two specific supporting details with linking words such as "for example" or "because". Use varied vocabulary (e.g., "unwind" instead of "relax").

Ví dụ: People often like walking in parks because it helps them relax. For example, the trees and flowers create a peaceful atmosphere, and gentle walking can feel almost like meditation.

Gợi ý: Be direct and natural: name the place, then give one or two specific reasons using linking words. Use correct place name phrasing ("Central Park in New York City") and avoid filler words like "hmm."

Ví dụ: I'd like to take a long walk in Central Park in New York City because I've heard from friends that it's very beautiful, with extensive paths and scenic spots worth exploring.

Gợi ý: Improve grammar, finish your final thought, and be specific. Use a clear topic sentence, correct noun forms ("walk" not "a walk" in phrases), and fix vocabulary errors ("brutalist" not "brutalistic"). Provide a concrete detail about what you enjoyed and use linking words like "because" or "also."

Ví dụ: I recently walked around the Chinese University campus. Because it is built on a hillside, the walk brings you close to nature, and I also enjoyed the striking brutalist architecture and the peaceful views.

× So whenever I've got opportunity, let's say during the lunch break of office hours, I'll go for a walk to just freshen up myself and trying to stay active for all the health benefits it.

✓ So whenever I get the opportunity, let's say during the lunch break at work, I go for a walk to freshen up and try to stay active for all the health benefits.

The original mixes verb forms and tenses incorrectly. 'I've got opportunity' is nonstandard; use 'I get the opportunity' (present simple) for habitual actions. 'I'll go' (future) is inconsistent with habitual meaning; use 'I go'. 'to just freshen up myself and trying to stay active' mixes infinitive 'to freshen up' with gerund 'trying' and includes unnecessary reflexive 'myself'. Use parallel infinitives: 'to freshen up and try to stay active'. Suggestion: Use consistent tense for habitual actions (present simple) and keep parallel verb forms.

× As a child, I didn't get much opportunity to go outside and have a walk.

✓ As a child, I didn't have many opportunities to go outside and take walks.

'Didn’t get much opportunity' is understandable but unnatural; use 'didn't have many opportunities'. 'Have a walk' is acceptable but 'take walks' is more natural. Also pluralize 'opportunities' to match 'many'. Suggestion: Use natural collocations and match singular/plural forms.

× That was because both of my parents prefer to stay indoors and I'm not allowed to go out alone for a walk and that's why I didn't do so that often.

✓ That was because both of my parents preferred to stay indoors, and I wasn't allowed to go out alone for a walk, so I didn't do that very often.

Tense inconsistency: the sentence refers to past circumstances, so use past tense 'preferred' and 'wasn't allowed' instead of present 'prefer' and 'I'm not allowed'. 'didn't do so that often' is awkward; use 'didn't do that very often'. Suggestion: Keep past-tense verbs when describing past situations and use natural adverb phrases.

× I believe people like to walk in parks in parks because it helps them to relax.

✓ I believe people like to walk in parks because it helps them relax.

Redundant phrase 'in parks in parks' is repeated. Also 'helps them to relax' is acceptable but 'helps them relax' is more natural. Remove repetition and simplify structure. Suggestion: Read sentences aloud to catch repetitions and prefer concise phrasing.

× I'd like to take a walk in Central Park of the New York City.

✓ I'd like to take a walk in Central Park in New York City.

'Central Park' already implies the location; use 'in New York City' rather than 'of the New York City'. The definite article before 'New York City' is unnecessary. Use 'in' to indicate location. Suggestion: Use 'in New York City' and avoid 'the' before city names.

× I've heard a lot of good things about the park from my friends who have been there, and they said the park is really beautiful and worth visiting.

✓ I've heard a lot of good things about the park from my friends who have been there; they said the park is really beautiful and worth visiting.

This sentence is mostly correct but has a punctuation/connective issue: mixing present perfect 'I've heard' with simple past 'they said' is acceptable because 'said' refers to the friends' comments. Replace the comma with a semicolon or split into two sentences for clarity. No major grammatical change needed. Suggestion: Use clearer punctuation to separate clauses.

× I went to the Chinese University for a walk recently.

✓ I went to the Chinese University for a walk recently.

This sentence is grammatically correct. It uses past tense appropriately for a recent past event. No change required.

× The campus itself is built on a mountain, so by going a walk there you can really get close to the nature.

✓ The campus itself is built on a mountain, so by going for a walk there you can really get close to nature.

'Going a walk' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'going for a walk'. 'Get close to the nature' is unidiomatic; use 'get close to nature' without 'the'. Suggestion: Learn common verb-preposition collocations like 'go for a walk' and use 'nature' without 'the' in this context.

× Moreover, there are many brutalistic buildings over there and you can enjoy appreciate the.

✓ Moreover, there are many brutalist buildings there, and you can appreciate them.

'Brutalistic' is not the standard adjective; 'brutalist' is correct. The phrase 'enjoy appreciate the' is incomplete and mixes verbs. Use 'appreciate them' or 'enjoy them'. Also 'over there' is informal; 'there' suffices. Suggestion: Use correct adjective forms (brutalist) and complete the verb phrase with the correct object.