Walking— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Be concise, correct word choice, and organize into 2–3 clear sentences. Avoid unclear words (e.g., 'Vulcan') and hesitations. Start with a direct topic sentence, then give one specific supporting detail and a brief reason.

Ví dụ: Yes, I walk a lot; it has become my daily hobby and a form of therapy. I try to walk two hours every day because it boosts my energy, and walking is a family ritual that helps us spend time together.

Gợi ý: Answer directly, use past tense consistently, and reduce hesitations. Provide one clear detail about activities you did as a child and link it to why you enjoyed walking.

Ví dụ: Yes, I often went out as a child because I was very outgoing. I played outdoors with many friends, went on small adventures like climbing trees and exploring nearby fields, and walking was my favorite way to have fun.

Gợi ý: Use clearer vocabulary and grammar, avoid vague phrases like 'I presume' and repetition. Give specific reasons and one concrete example of park activities, using linking words for coherence.

Ví dụ: Many people enjoy walking in parks because it energizes them and helps them relax. For example, they can sit on a bench to listen to birds or music while enjoying fresh air, which reduces stress and boosts mood.

Gợi ý: Use conditional grammar correctly and be specific about the location and activities. Remove filler words and combine ideas into 2–3 cohesive sentences with linking words.

Ví dụ: If I had the chance, I'd take a long walk in the mountains near a waterfall because I find the sound of birds and rushing water very calming. I would also take photographs of the scenery and enjoy the fresh air among the trees.

Gợi ý: Use past tense consistently and choose natural adjectives ('stress-relieving' rather than 'unstressful'). Start with a direct past-time sentence and give a concise reason with a personal detail.

Ví dụ: I went for a walk by the sea about two hours ago, and it felt very peaceful. The sound of the waves helps me forget my problems, so walking on the beach is my favorite way to relieve stress.

× Yes, I'm obsessed with Vulcan and it's my therapy and hobby now, so I'm trying to go for a walk every day for two hours because it gives me a lot of energy and I tend to, umm, walk in a lot because it's like it's a ritual for my family and we like doing it.

✓ Yes, I'm obsessed with walking and it's my therapy and hobby now, so I'm trying to go for a walk every day for two hours because it gives me a lot of energy and I tend to walk a lot because it's like a ritual for my family and we enjoy doing it.

The student used 'Vulcan' incorrectly; likely intended 'walking' (word choice, which falls under adjective/adverb or word use). 'Walk in a lot' is ungrammatical; correct phrase is 'walk a lot'. 'It's like it's a ritual' is redundant; use 'it's like a ritual'. 'We like doing it' is awkward; 'we enjoy doing it' is more natural. Suggestion: use precise nouns/verbs and avoid redundancy.

× Uh, yes, I'm an extrovert person. So when I was a kid I had a lot of friends as possible and I have a lot of it's not, it wasn't problem for me to go out with my friends and have fun. And also we have we had a lot of adventuries and it was my favorite hobby.

✓ Uh, yes, I'm an extrovert. When I was a kid I had as many friends as possible and it wasn't a problem for me to go out with them and have fun. We also had a lot of adventures and it was my favorite hobby.

Errors: 'an extrovert person' should be 'an extrovert' (word choice). 'a lot of friends as possible' needs the idiom 'as many friends as possible' (quantifier and adjective use). 'I have a lot of it's not, it wasn't problem' is ungrammatical; correct is 'it wasn't a problem'. 'We have we had' is redundant; choose past 'we had'. 'adventuries' is misspelled 'adventures'. Suggestion: use correct collocations and tense consistency, and check spelling.

× I presume that plenty of people like going for a walk in the party because it gives them energy and also help them relax.

✓ I presume that many people like going for a walk in the park because it gives them energy and also helps them relax.

Mistakes: 'in the party' is wrong preposition/noun; intended 'in the park'. 'Plenty of people' is acceptable but 'many people' is more natural here. 'help' lacks third-person singular agreement; should be 'helps'. Suggestion: choose correct location nouns and ensure subject-verb agreement.

× And also it's really cool that they can just, they can just sitting at the bench and listen to music to melody in the parks and it's really amusing.

✓ They can just sit on a bench and listen to music or melodies in the park, and it's really pleasant.

Errors: 'sitting' should be base form 'sit' after 'can'. Preposition 'at the bench' should be 'on a bench'. 'listen to music to melody' is ungrammatical; use 'listen to music or melodies'. 'parks' should be singular 'park' to match context. 'amusing' is odd for relaxing context; 'pleasant' is better. Suggestion: use correct verb form after modal 'can', correct prepositions, and choose appropriate adjectives.

× If we had a chance, I'd like to take a long walk in the mountains with waterfall because it's really relaxing to listen to a sound of birds and, uh, taking pictures of mountains.

✓ If I had the chance, I'd like to take a long walk in the mountains by a waterfall because it's really relaxing to listen to the sounds of birds and take pictures of the mountains.

Problems: Conditional subject mismatch 'we had a chance' should be 'I had the chance' to match 'I'd like'. 'with waterfall' needs article and preposition: 'by a waterfall'. 'a sound of birds' should be 'the sounds of birds'. 'taking pictures' should be parallel infinitive 'take pictures'. Suggestion: ensure subject consistency in conditionals, use correct articles, and keep parallel verb forms.

× And it's really refreshing when you are outside and, uh, tend to locate, uh, between trees.

✓ And it's really refreshing when you are outside and surrounded by trees.

'tend to locate between trees' is incorrect phrasing. Use 'surrounded by trees' or 'located among trees'. 'Tend to' is unnecessary. Suggestion: use common idiomatic expressions for location and avoid unnecessary verbs.

× Two hours ago I was near the sea and it was really peaceful for me because around the sea I can just forget about my problems.

✓ Two hours ago I was near the sea and it was really peaceful for me because by the sea I could just forget about my problems.

Tense inconsistency: speaker starts past 'Two hours ago I was' then uses present 'I can'. Change to past 'I could' to match. 'around the sea' is less natural than 'by the sea'. Suggestion: keep tense consistent when describing past events.

× And it's really unstressful to be around the ocean because it's the only way to forget about stressful things for me.

✓ And it's really relaxing to be by the ocean because it's the only way for me to forget about stressful things.

'Unstressful' is not a common adjective; use 'relaxing'. 'Around the ocean' -> 'by the ocean'. Word order 'for me' should come earlier: 'for me to forget'. Suggestion: use natural adjectives and place 'for me' correctly in infinitive phrases.