Walking— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Be careful with grammar and minor word forms, and shorten slightly to avoid redundancy. Use a clear topic sentence, then one or two specific supporting details with linking words. Correct verb forms (e.g., "before the day starts") and prefer concise phrasing.

Ví dụ: Yes, I do. I walk to the market almost every weekend, and on weekdays I walk about 500 metres from the car park to my office. These short walks give me good exercise and help me clear my head before the day starts.

Gợi ý: Improve grammar (past tense consistency and verb forms), correct vocabulary, and reduce unclear phrases. Use linking words and be specific about activities. Fix mistakes like "like to take"→"liked to take", "met"→"meet" (in past: "met"), and clarify "tech" which is unclear—perhaps you meant "tag".

Ví dụ: Yes. When I was a child I often went to the local park because my parents liked to take me there for fresh air. I usually met friends and we played games like tag or climbed on the playground equipment, so those afternoons were really fun.

Gợi ý: Focus on clarity and coherence: use accurate vocabulary and linking words, avoid word repetition and incomplete phrases. Correct mistakes ("working"→"walking", "with naturally make"→"which naturally makes", finish the last idea). Provide two clear reasons with examples.

Ví dụ: I think people like walking in parks because the scenery and fresh air create a calm, relaxing atmosphere which helps reduce everyday stress. Also, parks are convenient for exercise, such as jogging or cycling, and for social activities like meeting friends.

Gợi ý: Organize the answer with a clear topic sentence and supporting details. Correct grammar and word order (e.g., "I enjoy its ancient architecture"). Add linking words and specifics (what features you'd like to see).

Ví dụ: I would love to take a long walk around Bayonne Temple in Zimri because I enjoy its ancient architecture. Walking around the site would let me appreciate the carved details up close and take photos of the reliefs.

Gợi ý: Avoid hesitations and incomplete sentences. Be specific and concise: state when and where, then give one or two clear reasons with linking words. Improve cohesion by removing repetition and fillers.

Ví dụ: I went for a walk at the Independence Monument yesterday because the weather was lovely. I especially like walking there in the evening because the atmosphere is peaceful, and it is a great place to jog and get some exercise.

× 'I enjoy these short walks because they give me some exercise and a chance to clean my head before the day start.'

✓ 'I enjoy these short walks because they give me some exercise and a chance to clear my head before the day starts.'

'day start' is incorrect present-tense third-person form and 'clean my head' is unnatural. Use 'starts' for subject-verb agreement with 'the day' and 'clear my head' as the idiomatic expression. Suggestion: use simple present 'starts' and the fixed phrase 'clear my head.'

× 'When I was a child I often went to the local park to walk and enjoy the scenery because my parents like to take me there for fresh air.'

✓ 'When I was a child I often went to the local park to walk and enjoy the scenery because my parents liked to take me there for fresh air.'

'like' is present tense while the main clause is in the past ('When I was a child...went'). Maintain past tense consistency by changing 'like' to 'liked.'

× 'I would also met friends and we usually play a game of tech and or climb the playground equipment which makes those afternoon really fun.'

✓ 'I would also meet friends and we usually played games of tag or climbed the playground equipment, which made those afternoons really fun.'

'would also met' mixes modal conditional with a past participle; after 'would' use base verb 'meet.' 'play' should be past 'played' to match past context. 'tech' is incorrect word, likely 'tag.' 'and or' is incorrect conjunction use; choose 'or' or restructure. 'makes' should be 'made' to match past. 'afternoon' should be plural 'afternoons.' Also add commas for clarity.

× 'I think people enjoy working in the parks because of the beautiful scenery and fresh air with naturally make the atmosphere calm and relaxing and how to use everyday stress as well.'

✓ 'I think people enjoy walking in parks because of the beautiful scenery and fresh air, which naturally makes the atmosphere calm and relaxing and helps reduce everyday stress.'

'working in the parks' is incorrect meaning; context requires 'walking.' 'with naturally make' is ungrammatical; use relative pronoun 'which' and change verb to 'makes' to agree with singular 'which' referring to 'fresh air' or the whole clause. 'how to use everyday stress' is incorrect; intended meaning is 'helps reduce everyday stress.' Ensure subject-verb agreement and clear phrasing.

× 'Parks are also convenient for exercise, for example jogging or cycling and for social activity like.'

✓ 'Parks are also convenient for exercise, for example jogging or cycling, and for social activities.'

'for social activity like' is incomplete and ungrammatical. Use plural 'activities' and remove trailing 'like' or follow 'like' with examples. Add commas for clarity and parallel structure 'for exercise... and for social activities.'

× 'I would love to take a long walk around Bayonne Temple in Zimri because I enjoy it ancient architecture walking around the site would let me appreciate the detail up close and take a photo of the relief.'

✓ 'I would love to take a long walk around Bayonne Temple in Zimri because I enjoy its ancient architecture; walking around the site would let me appreciate the details up close and take photos of the reliefs.'

'it ancient architecture' is ungrammatical; possessive 'its' is required. Run-on sentence needs separation; insert semicolon or conjunction before 'walking.' 'detail' should be plural 'details' and 'a photo of the relief' may be better as 'photos of the reliefs' depending on context. Maintain tense consistency.

× 'I went for a walk at the independent monument yesterday because the weather was lovely.'

✓ 'I went for a walk at the Independence Monument yesterday because the weather was lovely.'

'independent monument' is likely a proper noun error; 'Independence Monument' is standard naming. Proper nouns should be capitalized and use correct form. Tense is past and correct otherwise.

× 'I especially like walking there in the evening because the atmosphere.'

✓ 'I especially like walking there in the evening because of the pleasant atmosphere.'

'because the atmosphere' is a sentence fragment lacking a verb or complement. Add 'of the pleasant atmosphere' to complete the reason clause and improve clarity.

× 'The atmosphere was, uh, it's a great place to jog and get some exercise.'

✓ 'The atmosphere was great; it's a great place to jog and get some exercise.'

'The atmosphere was, uh, it's a great place...' is a run-on with an interjection and mixed tenses. Separate into two statements: past comment on atmosphere ('was great') and present general statement ('it's a great place'). Remove filler 'uh' for written correction.'