Walking— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Be concise, use correct grammar, and present a clear topic sentence followed by one or two supporting details. Avoid repetition and filler words. Correct subject-verb agreement and phrasing (e.g., say “as an immigrant student” not “as I and immigrant students”).

Ví dụ: Yes, I walk a lot. As an immigrant student, I combine study and part-time work, so walking is a convenient way for me to commute and clear my head. I usually walk with friends, which makes the journey more enjoyable.

Gợi ý: Answer directly using past tense and keep sentences structured. Remove repeated ideas and correct vocabulary (e.g., “I went” not “I want”). Provide one clear reason or memory with a linking word like “because” or “when.”

Ví dụ: Yes, I went outside to walk often when I was a child. Because we lived near parks and my parents encouraged outdoor play, I would walk to school and play with friends after classes.

Gợi ý: Start with a clear general statement and then give specific reasons linked with connectors (because, for example, and so). Use accurate word choices (“walk” not “work”) and avoid vague phrases like “fit and fine.”

Ví dụ: People like to walk in parks because parks offer fresh air and a peaceful atmosphere. For example, walking among trees helps them relax and reduce stress, and it is also a pleasant way to exercise.

Gợi ý: Give one clear location as your main answer, then add a brief reason using linking words. Use correct names and avoid slang (e.g., “wanna”). Keep it to two or three sentences maximum.

Ví dụ: I would like to take a long walk at Stanley Park because of its scenic seawall and forest trails. For example, walking along the seawall would let me enjoy ocean views and fresh air.

Gợi ý: Use past tense consistently and be specific about details (time, activities). Avoid redundancy and incorrect phrases like “apart from it.” Keep to three sentences: topic sentence plus one or two supporting details with linking words.

Ví dụ: I recently went for a walk in a small park with my boyfriend in the morning. We enjoyed the fresh air, listened to birds singing, and did some light exercises, which made the walk relaxing and refreshing.

× Yes, I do walk a lot because as I and immigrant students so my life is full of hustle and bustle so I have to manage work and or study at same time.

✓ Yes, I walk a lot because I am an immigrant student and my life is full of hustle and bustle, so I have to manage work and study at the same time.

Errors: incorrect conjunctions and sentence structure. 'as I and immigrant students' is ungrammatical; use 'I am an immigrant student'. Remove extra 'do' since simple present 'I walk' is natural with 'a lot'. Combine clauses with 'and' and use 'at the same time' for clarity. Suggestion: form clear subject-verb phrases and connect ideas with appropriate conjunctions like 'and' or 'so'. (Grammar problem type ID: 16)

× So I usually walk walking with my friends uh.

✓ So I usually walk with my friends.

Redundant verb forms: 'walk walking' duplicates the verb. Use either 'walk' or 'go walking'. Suggestion: use 'walk with my friends' or 'go walking with my friends'. (Grammar problem type ID: 8)

× Yes, I want a lot as an immigrant.

✓ Yes, I went a lot as an immigrant.

Wrong verb tense/form: 'want' (present) was used instead of past tense 'went' when answering 'Did you often go outside... when you were a child?'. Suggestion: use past tense verbs when referring to past habitual actions. (Grammar problem type ID: 5)

× As an immigrant student, my life is a prolonged hustle and person, so I have to.

✓ As an immigrant student, my life is a prolonged hustle and bustle, so I have to move around a lot.

Phrase 'hustle and person' is incorrect; correct idiom is 'hustle and bustle'. The clause 'so I have to' is incomplete; add the action 'move around a lot.' Suggestion: use standard idioms and complete clauses. (Grammar problem type ID: 16)

× Here and there for the classes and for the work.

✓ I go here and there for classes and work.

Sentence fragment without a subject and proper verb. Rephrase as a full sentence: 'I go here and there...' Suggestion: ensure each sentence has a subject and verb. (Grammar problem type ID: 26)

× So, uh, so whenever I also get a leisure time, I prefer to walk.

✓ So whenever I get leisure time, I prefer to walk.

Redundant words and slightly awkward phrasing. Use 'get leisure time' or better 'have free time'. Suggestion: simplify to 'Whenever I have free time, I prefer to walk.' (Grammar problem type ID: 6)

× Actually it's really depend upon the people choices and the preferences.

✓ Actually it really depends on people's choices and preferences.

Subject-verb agreement: 'it' requires 'depends' (third person singular). Incorrect preposition and possessive: use 'depends on' and 'people's choices'. Suggestion: ensure verb agrees with subject and use correct prepositions. (Grammar problem type ID: 27)

× I would say people really love to work because walking is a very fruitful way to keep themselves fit and fine and also it helps them relax and unwind from a long day.

✓ I would say people really love to walk because walking is a very effective way to keep fit, and it also helps them relax and unwind after a long day.

Wrong word 'work' should be 'walk'. 'Fruitful' is unnatural here; use 'effective' or 'good'. 'Keep themselves fit and fine' is redundant; simplify to 'keep fit'. 'From a long day' should be 'after a long day.' Suggestion: choose accurate verbs and concise adjectives. (Grammar problem type ID: 13)

× There are so many places I really love to visit and walk in if I get a chance such as White Rock Recent Beach as well as Stanley Park.

✓ There are so many places I would love to visit and walk in if I got the chance, such as White Rock Beach and Stanley Park.

Tense and modality: use conditional 'would ... if I got the chance'. 'Recent' is incorrect in the place name; likely 'White Rock Beach'. Suggestion: use correct place names and conditional forms for hypothetical situations. (Grammar problem type ID: 12)

× These are all are well known places and people love to visit over there and I also wanna be the one.

✓ These are all well-known places that people love to visit, and I would like to visit them too.

Redundant 'are all are', informal 'wanna', and awkward 'be the one.' Use 'well-known' and 'would like to visit them too.' Suggestion: avoid informal contractions in formal speech and clean up redundancies. (Grammar problem type ID: 26)

× I recently went for a walk in the small park with my boyfriend.

✓ I recently went for a walk in a small park with my boyfriend.

Article choice: 'the small park' suggests a specific park known to listener; 'a small park' is more natural unless a specific park was already mentioned. Tense 'went' is correct. Suggestion: use 'a' for nonspecific references. (Grammar problem type ID: 5)

× It was a morning time and it was really amazing and we enjoyed a lot and spent some quality of time.

✓ It was morning and it was really amazing; we enjoyed it a lot and spent some quality time together.

Article error: say 'It was morning' not 'a morning time'. Phrase 'spent some quality of time' is ungrammatical; use 'spent some quality time'. Add 'together' for clarity. Suggestion: use natural collocations like 'spent quality time.' (Grammar problem type ID: 22)

× And we also hear the chirping of the birds and apart from it and we also do some exercise.

✓ We also heard the chirping of the birds, and we did some exercise as well.

Tense inconsistency: earlier sentence used past 'went', so use past 'heard' and 'did'. Remove 'apart from it' which is awkward. Suggestion: maintain consistent past tense and use natural connectors like 'and' or 'as well.' (Grammar problem type ID: 16)