Walking— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, correct small grammar errors, and avoid contradicting statements (saying “only” then 10,000 steps is high). Add a linking word and a specific reason or example. Limit to up to 3–4 short sentences.

Ví dụ: I don’t walk much for commuting because I usually travel to work and school by motorbike. I usually manage around 10,000 steps a day from short walks, but I’d like to walk more to reduce stress and improve fitness. For example, I plan to walk 30 minutes each evening to boost my mood and energy.

Gợi ý: Clarify your meaning and correct tenses and vocabulary. Begin with a direct topic sentence, then give a specific supporting detail using a linking word. Avoid vague phrases like “when it was a try.”

Ví dụ: Not really. As a child I usually only went outside when my mother accompanied me because I was quite shy. Therefore I preferred staying at home and playing quietly rather than exploring outside.

Gợi ý: Start with a clear topic sentence, correct word choice (walking in parks, not working), and use linking words to structure reasons. Give two specific reasons and a short example. Keep sentences concise and finish your idea properly.

Ví dụ: Many people enjoy walking in parks because the trees and greenery create a calm atmosphere. In addition, parks offer space to meet others who like walking or jogging, which makes the activity more social. For example, I often see groups doing morning exercises that make the walk feel lively.

Gợi ý: Give a clear location and correct grammar. Explain why specifically (scenery, challenge) with linking words. Avoid repetition and unclear abbreviations like “Hwy.” Keep to 2–3 sentences and be specific about the challenge or goal.

Ví dụ: I would like to take a long walk along a coastal path because it is scenic and peaceful. Also, the long straight stretches would be physically challenging, which would help me train for a fitness goal.

Gợi ý: Use past tense for a past event, be specific about place, and give a clear reason using linking words. Correct grammar and vocabulary (e.g., “risks” not “risk”). Keep answers brief and coherent.

Ví dụ: Recently I walked in my home garden because I prefer not to go far from home at night. I feel safer staying close by, since going out late can be risky and I’m cautious of strangers.

× In a day I go to work and go to school by motorbike, so I only walk about 10,000 steps a day.

✓ In a day I go to work and to school by motorbike, so I only walk about 10,000 steps.

Tense is acceptable but sentence has redundancy and awkward repetition; simplified to remove repeated 'a day' and make the sentence more natural. Keep present simple for habitual actions.

× In the future I want to walk more because it can help me improve my mental and physical.

✓ In the future I want to walk more because it can help improve my mental and physical health.

Missing noun 'health' after 'physical'; keep future desire with 'want to' (present tense expressing future intention) and include the correct noun to complete the idea.

× When it was a try I only went outside if my mom were there and I was introverted so going outside is not my favorite hobby.

✓ When I was little I only went outside if my mom was there because I was introverted, so going outside was not my favorite activity.

Incorrect phrase 'it was a try' corrected to 'I was little'; subject-verb agreement 'mom were' should be 'mom was'; mixing tenses corrected to past tense 'was not' and 'activity' is a more appropriate noun than 'hobby' for habitual behavior.

× People prefer working in parks because there are many trees and people who have the same hobby with them such as walking, talking or running and the green tree can bring a good mood for them so they can.

✓ People prefer walking in parks because there are many trees and other people who share the same hobbies, such as walking, talking, or running, and the green trees can improve their mood.

Incorrect verb 'prefer working' should be 'prefer walking' to match context; 'people who have the same hobby with them' is awkward, replaced with 'other people who share the same hobbies'; 'green tree' pluralized to 'green trees' and 'bring a good mood for them' changed to 'improve their mood' for natural expression. Removed incomplete ending 'so they can'.

× I would like to take a long time on Hwy. because is it a straight way where I can only walk and it it is really cha challenging so I can put myself on it to achieve my goal.

✓ I would like to take a long walk on the highway because it is a straight route where I can walk continuously, and it is really challenging so I can push myself to achieve my goal.

Many structural issues: 'take a long time' should be 'take a long walk'; 'Hwy.' expanded to 'the highway' with article; word order fixed ('because is it a straight way' -> 'because it is a straight route'); duplicate 'it it' removed; 'cha challenging' corrected to 'challenging'; 'put myself on it' replaced with 'push myself' for correct idiom.

× Where did you go for a walk lately?

✓ Where have you gone for a walk lately?

Question uses 'lately', which pairs with present perfect for recent past actions that relate to the present. Change from simple past 'did you go' to present perfect 'have you gone'.

× I would like to go for work lately around my house garden because I don't really like to go far from my house at night.

✓ I have been going for walks recently in my house garden because I don't like to go far from my house at night.

Original mixes modal 'would like' with 'lately' awkwardly. Use present perfect continuous or present perfect 'have been going' or 'have gone' to indicate recent habitual action. 'Go for work' is incorrect; 'go for walks' fits. 'Lately' moved to 'recently' for natural phrasing.

× Besides, there are many risk or stranger who can affect me so I don't like.

✓ Besides, there are many risks and strangers who could threaten me, so I prefer not to go far at night.

'Many risk' should be plural 'many risks'; 'or stranger' should be 'and strangers'; 'who can affect me' is vague and replaced with 'who could threaten me' for clarity; sentence ending 'so I don't like' is incomplete—replaced with 'so I prefer not to go far at night.'