Walking— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Be concise, correct small errors, use a clear topic sentence and relevant supporting details with linking words. Avoid repetition (e.g., 'my my') and incorrect words ('commute on food' should be 'commute on foot'). Keep it to maximum five sentences and include one or two specific benefits or a brief example.

Ví dụ: Yes, I walk quite often. When I first arrived in Canada four years ago I didn’t have a car, so I often commuted on foot for about two kilometres, which helped keep me physically fit. In addition, walking gave me a chance to breathe fresh air and enjoy the nearby parks, which was a good way to start and end busy days.

Gợi ý: Start with a clear topic sentence, correct grammar (e.g., 'my friends and I'), and use linking words (for example, 'because' or 'so') to connect ideas. Be specific about activities and avoid vague phrases like 'worked with my parents like quite often.' Limit to four sentences for clarity.

Ví dụ: Yes, I walked a lot as a child because we didn’t have computers, so we spent much of our free time outdoors. My friends and I would go for walks almost every day to hang out and enjoy the weather. I also helped my parents with chores, which often involved walking around our neighborhood.

Gợi ý: Give a precise topic sentence, fix grammar (e.g., 'because the air is fresh' and 'closer to nature'), and use linking words to list reasons. Avoid fillers like 'like' repeatedly. Provide one concrete example of park activities to strengthen the answer.

Ví dụ: People like walking in parks because the air is fresh and they feel closer to nature. In addition, parks offer a relaxed atmosphere where you can chat with friends or exercise; for example, many people sit on benches to read or walk along tree-lined paths.

Gợi ý: Keep a clear topic sentence, combine related ideas with linking words (e.g., 'because' or 'so'), and be specific about the park or route. Avoid short disjointed sentences; merge them for fluency and keep within five sentences.

Ví dụ: If I had a free day, I would take a long walk in the nearby botanical park because the fresh air helps me relax and clear my mind. Also, walking there on trails would be a peaceful way to stay fit while enjoying nature.

Gợi ý: Provide a clear topic sentence with a past time reference, reduce hesitation words ('uh'), and combine sentences for coherence. Give one specific detail about where you walked or what you talked about to make the answer more concrete and engaging.

Ví dụ: Recently I went for a long walk with my husband in a riverside park. We had a meaningful conversation about our plans for the year, which helped us bond and made the walk very pleasant.

× When I just came to Canada 4 years ago, I didn't have a car so I had to commute on food and my my walk was about two kilometers and it kept me physically fit and also gave me an opportunity to breathe fresh air and to enjoy the nature around.

✓ When I first came to Canada 4 years ago, I didn't have a car so I had to commute on foot and my walk was about two kilometres; it kept me physically fit and gave me an opportunity to breathe fresh air and enjoy the nature around.

Errors: 'just came' is awkward for narrative, 'commute on food' is a wrong word (food vs foot), repeated 'my', run-on sentence. Use 'first came' or 'when I came', correct noun 'foot' for walking, remove duplicate 'my', and split or punctuate to avoid a run-on. Use past tense consistently ('didn't have', 'had to commute', 'was', 'kept', 'gave'). Suggestions: replace 'just came' with 'first came', 'food' with 'foot', delete duplicate 'my', and use a semicolon or period to separate clauses for clarity.

× So me and my friends, we went for a walk every single day just to spend time together, to hang out and to enjoy the weather.

✓ So my friends and I went for a walk every single day to spend time together, hang out, and enjoy the weather.

Error: informal and ungrammatical subject order 'me and my friends' should be 'my friends and I'. Also redundant 'we' and unnecessary infinitive 'to' repeated. Suggestions: use correct subject pronoun order and streamline verbs in a parallel structure ('to spend..., hang out, and enjoy...').

× We had no computers and laptops so had a lot of free time to spend together.

✓ We had no computers or laptops, so we had a lot of free time to spend together.

Error: missing subject in second clause ('so had a lot' should include 'we had'). Also use 'or' rather than 'and' when listing items to indicate alternatives is preferred but 'and' is acceptable; keeping 'or' sounds natural. Suggestion: include the subject 'we' and add a comma before 'so' for readability.

× Most people like going for a walk to the park 'cause it's a fresh air, closer to the nature and you can spend time like in a relaxed atmosphere with a person you like or you want to spend time with.

✓ Most people like going for a walk in the park because it's fresh air, close to nature, and you can spend time in a relaxed atmosphere with someone you like or want to spend time with.

Errors: colloquial ''cause' should be 'because'; 'it's a fresh air' incorrectly uses article 'a' with uncountable 'air'; 'closer to the nature' is wrong article and comparative form; awkward 'spend time like in' and repetitive phrasing at end. Suggestions: use 'in the park', 'because', remove 'a' before 'fresh air', use 'close to nature', and simplify final clause to 'with someone you like or want to spend time with.'

× If I had a chance to spend the day by myself, I would go for a long walk to the nearby park.

✓ If I had the chance to spend the day by myself, I would go for a long walk in the nearby park.

Error: 'If I had a chance' is acceptable but 'the chance' is more natural when referring to a specific opportunity; 'to the nearby park' is less natural than 'in the nearby park' when talking about walking inside a park. Suggestion: use 'the chance' and 'in the nearby park' for natural collocation.

× So fresh air helps me to relax and to put my thoughts together.

✓ Fresh air helps me relax and collect my thoughts.

Errors: unnecessary 'So' at start and repetitive 'to' before verbs; 'put my thoughts together' is understandable but 'collect my thoughts' is more natural. Suggestions: remove 'So', drop 'to' before the verbs for a smoother structure, and use the idiomatic 'collect my thoughts'.

× Lately, I went for a long walk with my husband.

✓ Recently, I went for a long walk with my husband.

Error: 'Lately' commonly pairs with present perfect ('I have gone') rather than simple past; using 'recently' with simple past is more natural. Suggestion: change 'Lately' to 'Recently' when using past simple, or use present perfect 'lately I have gone'.

× We had a very nice conversation. We, that was, uh, the way for us to, uh, bond and to, uh, talk about what is happening in each other's life and that was a very pleasant walk for us.

✓ We had a very nice conversation; that was a way for us to bond and talk about what was happening in each other's lives, so it was a very pleasant walk for us.

Errors: disfluent fillers 'uh' should be removed in writing; awkward clause 'We, that was' and tense inconsistency ('is happening' should match past 'we had'); 'each other's life' should be plural 'lives'. Suggestions: remove fillers, fix tense to past ('what was happening'), correct 'lives', and combine sentences with proper punctuation for clarity.