Walking— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Be more concise and coherent. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid filler words (uh, yeah), correct grammar (e.g., "I work a lot" seems irrelevant), and give one or two specific supporting details. Use linking words like "so" or "for example."

Ví dụ: Yes, I walk quite often, especially at weekends. For example, I usually go hiking in the mountains near Tokyo because the trails are easy and the views are beautiful.

Gợi ý: Use correct tense and a clear topic sentence. Avoid repetition and fillers, and give a reason or brief example to support your statement. Use linking words like "because" to explain why. Limit to 2–3 sentences.

Ví dụ: No, I rarely went outside as a child because I preferred computers and indoor activities. For instance, I often spent afternoons playing games or learning on my computer instead of going for walks.

Gợi ý: Be more fluent and specific. Remove fillers and use plural/singular correctly ("nature" not "nature's"). Provide linked reasons and an example of benefits. Use linking words like "because" and "for example."

Ví dụ: People like walking in parks because they can get fresh air and relax in a natural setting. For example, hearing birds and seeing green trees and blue skies can improve mood and reduce stress.

Gợi ý: Answer the hypothetical question directly and clearly. State the place you would choose, give a reason, and avoid hesitations. If you can't remember a name, say so succinctly and give another detail instead. Keep it to two sentences.

Ví dụ: I would like to take a long walk in the mountains of Gunma because the trails are peaceful and the scenery is impressive. For example, I once hiked a mountain there and enjoyed the quiet forests and wide views.

Gợi ý: Be more confident and give clear specific details: name the park if possible, use past tense correctly, and organize sentences with linking words like "we" or "then." Describe one or two details (what you saw and did).

Ví dụ: Recently I went to a large park where I saw beautiful cherry blossoms. I had made sandwiches in the morning and we had a picnic under the trees, which was very relaxing.

× I like to go hiking in uh, mountains near Tokyo.

✓ I like to go hiking in the mountains near Tokyo.

Missing definite article before a specific noun phrase. Use 'the' with 'mountains near Tokyo' because it refers to a particular set of mountains; this is classified under third person singular issue (ID 2) as the verb 'like' is correct but the noun phrase needs article correction to be grammatical. Suggestion: use 'the' when referring to specific geographic features.'

× Uh, they are easy to hike mountains, but I, yeah.

✓ They are easy mountains to hike, but I haven't hiked them much.

Original word order is incorrect and the sentence lacks a clear verb phrase. Reordering to 'easy mountains to hike' fixes structure and adding a clause clarifies meaning. This fits sentence structure errors (ID 26). Suggestion: place 'to hike' after the noun and provide a clear main verb.'

× In my childhood, I rarely go outside and I walked, uh, I liked my computers and I was, uh, indoor person.

✓ In my childhood, I rarely went outside; I liked computers and was an indoor person.

Tense consistency error: 'in my childhood' requires past tense ('went', 'liked', 'was'). Also article missing before 'indoor person'. This matches present tense issue (ID 6) because present tense 'go' is incorrectly used instead of past. Suggestion: use past tense throughout when talking about the past and use articles where needed.'

× And yeah, I, I use, I spend a lot of time.

✓ And yeah, I spent a lot of time on them.

Unclear pronoun reference and incorrect tense/verb choice. 'Use' is present and redundant; past tense 'spent' matches context. Adding 'on them' clarifies what time was spent. Classified as sentence structure errors (ID 26). Suggestion: keep tense consistent and include clear objects for verbs.'

× I think it's because, uh, people, uh, need more fresh air and nature's.

✓ I think it's because people need more fresh air and nature.

Incorrect use of possessive apostrophe-s ('nature's') when the noun 'nature' should be uncountable noun without apostrophe. This fits incorrect use of adjectives or nouns (ID 13). Suggestion: remove apostrophe and use 'nature' as an uncountable noun.'

× I also like, uh, sound surrounded by nature's and I want to see, uh, greens and blue skies.

✓ I also like the sounds of being surrounded by nature, and I want to see green trees and blue skies.

Multiple issues: 'sound surrounded by nature's' is ungrammatical; 'greens' should be 'green trees' or 'greenery'. Also remove possessive 'nature's'. Classified under incorrect use of adjectives or adverbs (ID 13). Suggestion: use 'the sounds of being surrounded by nature' and 'green trees' or 'greenery'.'

× Yeah, it is. Feel better.

✓ Yeah, it makes me feel better.

Sentence fragment: 'Feel better' lacks a subject. 'It makes me feel better' is a complete sentence. This is a sentence structure error (ID 26). Suggestion: include subject and appropriate verb.'

× I usually go hiking uh, for example, I went scuba San, which is, uh, which is a mountain placed in Gunma.

✓ I usually go hiking. For example, I went to Mount Scuba-san, which is a mountain located in Gunma.

Run-on sentence and awkward phrasing 'placed in Gunma'. Use 'went to' for places and 'located in' for location. This is a sentence structure error (ID 26). Suggestion: split into two sentences and use 'went to' plus 'located in'.'

× No, it, it was uh, actually Toji. I, I forgot that, but.

✓ No, it was actually Toji; I forgot that.

Redundant fillers and punctuation; 'was' is correct past tense but sentence fragment ends awkwardly. Clean version uses past tense and removes fillers. Classified as past tense issue (ID 5) because past reference should be concise. Suggestion: remove filler words and finish the sentence.'

× I went to, uh, a large park called, uh, you know, consider a park, uh, in there I saw cherry blossoms and I ate sandwiches I made in the morning.

✓ I went to a large park called 'Consider Park'. There I saw cherry blossoms and ate the sandwiches I had made in the morning.

Confusing phrasing 'you know, consider a park' and tense consistency: use past perfect 'had made' for sandwiches made before the outing. Classified as sentence structure errors (ID 26). Suggestion: state the park name clearly and use past perfect for actions completed before another past action.'

× And so we did. We went picnic.

✓ So we had a picnic.

'Went picnic' is incorrect collocation; use 'had a picnic'. This is an article/collocation error (ID 22). Suggestion: use the verb 'have' with 'picnic' and include the indefinite article 'a'.