Walking— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Be concise and directly answer the question first (Yes/No). Use clear sentences, correct tense and grammar, avoid irrelevant or unclear phrases (e.g. “Bessie work”, “rest my food”). Limit to 2–4 coherent sentences and include one brief reason or habit with a linking word (e.g. because/so).

Ví dụ: Yes, I walk sometimes but not a lot. I work long shifts in a healthcare facility, so I prefer to rest at home after work. Therefore I usually only walk short distances like to the grocery store.

Gợi ý: Start with a clear topic sentence stating frequency (Yes, I often did). Use correct phrasing (e.g. “when I was a child”) and avoid contradictory or vague timing. Give specific details (how often, who you walked with, what you enjoyed) and link ideas with words like “also” or “and” to keep it coherent. Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

Ví dụ: Yes, I often walked when I was a child. I walked about 10 minutes to school every day and we also walked to church on Sundays. I enjoyed the scenery and talking with my friends and family during those walks.

Gợi ý: Answer directly and use correct verbs (walk, not work). Give 2–3 clear reasons and connect them with linking words (for example, because, and, so). Avoid repetition and awkward phrases like “can able to”. Use specific vocabulary (fresh air, relax, exercise).

Ví dụ: People like walking in parks because they can relax and enjoy the scenery. Also, parks are good places to spend quality time with family and get fresh air and gentle exercise.

Gợi ý: Provide a clear, concise location and a short reason. Fix grammar (e.g. “near an urban area in Sherbrooke”, “a friend invited me”) and use 2–3 sentences. Mention when or with whom and what you expect to enjoy. Avoid irrelevant or confusing details.

Ví dụ: I would like to walk in the mountain hills near Sherbrooke. A friend invited me to go there in the summer, so I hope to join them and enjoy the views and fresh air during a long walk.

Gợi ý: Start with a simple past tense sentence answering directly (I walked...). Use fewer repetitions and correct grammar (e.g. “I walked recently in my neighborhood, about five minutes from my apartment”). Provide a brief reason and one specific detail. Keep it to 2–3 sentences.

Ví dụ: I walked recently in my neighborhood, about five minutes from my apartment. I went to the nearby grocery store because it was a short walk and I needed to buy a few things.

× Honestly I work a lot especially in my current workplace because I'm working in a healthcare facility and we literally sit down because of our Bessie work and lot of things needs to be done in our clients needs.

✓ Honestly, I work a lot, especially at my current workplace, because I work in a healthcare facility and we are often busy with a lot of tasks that need to be done for our clients.

Errors: inconsistent tense and awkward phrasing. 'I'm working' and 'I work' are both present but repetitive; use simple present for habitual actions. 'We literally sit down because of our Bessie work' is unclear; replaced with 'we are often busy' to reflect intended meaning. 'lot of things needs' is subject-verb agreement (plural subject → need). Suggest using clear, simple present forms for routines and ensure subject-verb agreement.

× But when as soon as I get home I prepare to stay at the comfort of my own home and I don't want to work because I wanted to rest my food for the working days.

✓ But as soon as I get home, I prepare to stay in the comfort of my own home and I don't want to work because I want to rest and recover for the working days.

Errors: redundant conjunctions 'when as soon as' — choose one. 'at the comfort' should be 'in the comfort'. 'I wanted' mixes past with present habitual context; use present 'I want'. 'rest my food' is incorrect phrase; likely intended 'rest and recover'. Suggest using a single time connector, correct preposition, and consistent tense.

× I've been a little member in my childhood years.

✓ I was small when I was a child.

Error: awkward and incorrect verb choice 'I've been a little member' and tense/form. Use simple past 'I was' to describe a past state. 'in my childhood years' is redundant with 'as a child'; prefer clear phrase 'when I was a child.'

× I used to walk from my home to the school for 10 minutes as well as going to church every Sunday.

✓ I used to walk from my home to the school for about 10 minutes, and I also walked to church every Sunday.

Error: mixed forms — 'used to' should be followed by base verb for habitual past; 'going' creates a tense mismatch. Use consistent past habitual 'walked' or 'used to walk' for both actions. Add 'about' for time approximation.

× We normally walk for at least 8 minutes and we really enjoyed that beautiful scenery while walking and while with I'm with friends and my family members while walking.

✓ We normally walked for at least eight minutes and really enjoyed the beautiful scenery while walking with friends and family members.

Errors: tense inconsistency — 'normally walk' (present) vs 'enjoyed' (past). Since describing childhood habits, use past 'walked' and 'enjoyed'. Also remove redundant 'while' and fix word order 'with I'm with' to 'with'.

× People like to work in parks so they can enjoy the beauty and the scenery of the environment as well as if they were with their family members, they can able to spend quality time with them and having a a fresh air that they can able to sustain while walking especially in the park.

✓ People like to walk in parks so they can enjoy the scenery and, if they are with family members, spend quality time with them and breathe fresh air while walking, especially in the park.

Multiple errors: 'work in parks' should be 'walk in parks'. Awkward conditional 'as well as if they were' and incorrect modal 'can able' — use 'can' or 'are able to', not both. 'having a a fresh air' incorrect article and form; use 'breathe fresh air'. Simplify and correct verb forms and conjunctions for clarity.

× I think that is the the best choice they were.

✓ I think that is the best choice for them.

Errors: duplicate 'the the', wrong pronoun 'they were' is ungrammatical here. Use 'for them' to indicate the choice belongs to people. Keep simple present 'is' for general opinion.

× If I had a chance, I would like to have a long walk to the mountain hills near an hour urban area in Sherbrooke, because one of my friends giving Guardian made to work with them during especially during summertime and I haven't had a chance but I'm planning to in the future to come.

✓ If I had the chance, I would like to take a long walk in the mountain hills near an urban area in Sherbrooke, because one of my friends invited me to join them, especially during summertime, and I haven't had the chance yet but I plan to go in the future.

Errors: 'have a long walk to the mountain hills' should be 'take a long walk in the mountain hills'. 'near an hour urban area' is garbled — likely 'near an urban area'. 'one of my friends giving Guardian made to work with them' is unclear; replaced with 'invited me to join them'. Tense and modal forms corrected: use conditional 'If I had the chance, I would...'. Use consistent present perfect 'haven't had' and present 'I plan' for future intention.

× I would like to walk with them in that mountain hills and enjoy the beautiful scenery of the environment.

✓ I would like to walk with them in those mountain hills and enjoy the beautiful scenery.

Errors: 'that mountain hills' wrong demonstrative and number — use 'those mountain hills' for plural. 'of the environment' is redundant after 'scenery'. Simplify phrase and match noun number with demonstrative.

× I remembered I walk lately in our neighborhood just only 5 minutes walk from our apartment.

✓ I remember I walked recently in our neighborhood, just a five-minute walk from our apartment.

Errors: 'I remembered' vs 'I remember' — choose present 'I remember' if recalling now or past 'I remembered' with past clause. 'I walk lately' incorrect tense; use 'walked recently'. 'just only 5 minutes walk' awkward — use 'just a five-minute walk'.

× I tried to go to the grocery store to to buy something and I I decided to walk because it's only 5 minutes away from my apartment.

✓ I went to the grocery store to buy something and I decided to walk because it's only five minutes away from my apartment.

Errors: double 'to to' and duplicated 'I I'. 'I tried to go' suggests unsuccessful attempt; if the walk occurred use 'I went'. Use numerals spelled out in text style consistency: 'five minutes'. Remove duplicate words and correct verb to match intended meaning.