Walking— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: 答えは通じますが、文法（前置詞や比較表現）、語順、冗長さを改善するとより自然になります。例えば「compared with other people」は不必要で不自然なので削除し、時制や冠詞（"every morning" の前の冠詞不要や"go to work"）を正しく使いましょう。具体的には短い主文（トピック文）で始め、その後に理由を分かりやすく接続詞でつなぎます。発音は"lovely dog"の強調より"my dog"で十分です。

Ví dụ: Yes, I walk a lot. I usually walk to work with my dog every morning because it helps me stay healthy.

Gợi ý: 内容は良いですが、文のつながりと文法（時制、一致、冠詞、複数形）を整える必要があります。短いセンテンスをつなぐときは接続詞や時を示す語を使って流れを良くしましょう。"touch ball"や"dodgeball"などスポーツ名の表現を統一し、"my friend"は複数形が自然なら"my friends"にします。より具体的なエピソードを一つ短く示すと好印象です。

Ví dụ: Yes, I often played outside as a child, especially in elementary school. I loved playing dodgeball with my friends because it was exciting and helped me make new friends.

Gợi ý: 回答が繰り返しや冗長表現（"parks are parks are"）を含んでおり、不自然です。理由を2点までに絞り、論理的な接続語（for example, also）を使って具体例を示しましょう。また"communicate with other people"は"meet others"や"socialize"の方が自然です。

Ví dụ: People like walking in parks because they are usually cleaner and safer than wild areas. Also, parks are social places where people can relax and meet others.

Gợi ý: 良い回答ですが、表現の繰り返し（"Mount Fuji"の過剰使用）と語順を改善すると自然になります。不要なフレーズ（"the"の誤用や"high heights"）を直し、理由と感情を簡潔に結びつけてください。例として一文目で希望を述べ、二文目で理由や予想される困難を付け加えます。

Ví dụ: I'd like to climb Mount Fuji with my family because it's an important symbol of Japan. I know the climb would be tough due to the altitude, but it would be a memorable experience.

Gợi ý: 文法や語順の間違いが多く、意味が伝わりにくいです。"went to for work"は誤りで、時系列を整理して一連の出来事を論理的に述べる必要があります。接続詞の使い方（therefore, but）を見直し、不要な繰り返し（"after but after"）を省いてください。具体的にどこで歩いたか（park, streetなど）を明示すると良いでしょう。

Ví dụ: Yesterday I walked to work with my dog in the morning, which helped me feel relaxed. Later, I came home and ended up snacking a lot.

× Yes, I walk around compared with other people.

✓ Yes, I walk more than other people.

The original sentence uses an awkward comparative structure. Use 'more than' to compare frequency. Suggestion: 'I walk more than other people' or 'I walk more often than other people.'

× This is because I tend to go for work with my lovely dog in every morning as it is beneficial for my health.

✓ This is because I tend to go to work with my lovely dog every morning since it is beneficial for my health.

Incorrect preposition and article usage: 'go for work' should be 'go to work' and 'in every morning' should be 'every morning'. Use 'since' or 'because' for reason. Also 'it' refers to walking being beneficial.

× Yes, I was into playing sport on the ground.

✓ Yes, I was into playing sports on the field.

Word choice and count: 'sport' in this context should be plural 'sports' and 'on the ground' is unnatural for playing; use 'on the field.' Tense 'was into' is acceptable for past preference.

× In the elementary school especially.

✓ Especially in elementary school.

Incorrect article use: 'the elementary school' is unnecessary when speaking generally; more natural order is 'Especially in elementary school.' Also sentence fragment fixed by integration.

× I played touch ball a lot with my friend so that it makes me excited and I could make new friends through playing dodgeball.

✓ I played touch ball a lot with my friends, which made me excited, and I could make new friends through playing dodgeball.

Subject-number agreement: 'my friend' should be 'my friends' if playing with multiple peers. Tense consistency: change 'makes' to past 'made' to match 'I played' and use relative clause 'which made me excited.'

× This is because parks are parks are cleaner than wild leafy areas, and people can communicate with other people in the park.

✓ This is because parks are cleaner than wild wooded areas, and people can meet others in the park.

Duplicate phrase 'parks are parks are' is redundant. 'Wild leafy areas' is awkward; use 'wooded areas.' Repetition 'people can communicate with other people' can be simplified to 'people can meet others.'

× Definitely, I'd like to climb Mount Fuji with my family since the Mount Fuji is one of the most significant landmarks in Japan.

✓ Definitely, I'd like to climb Mount Fuji with my family since Mount Fuji is one of the most significant landmarks in Japan.

Article error: Do not use 'the' before proper names like 'Mount Fuji.' 'I'd like' is appropriate modal expression.

× While I know it is challenging to climb Mount Fuji because of the high heights.

✓ I know it is challenging to climb Mount Fuji because of its great height.

Sentence fragment: starting with 'While' creates an incomplete subordinate clause. Replace with a full sentence and correct phrase 'high heights' to 'great height' or 'high altitude.'

× Yesterday I went to for work with my lovely dog in the morning, therefore I could be relaxed and after but after that I ate snacks a lot.

✓ Yesterday I went to work with my lovely dog in the morning, so I could relax, and after that I ate a lot of snacks.

Remove extra preposition 'to' before 'for work' and use 'went to work' or 'went for a walk'; 'could be relaxed' should be 'could relax.' Fix word order 'after but after' to 'and after that.' Use past tense consistency: 'ate a lot of snacks.'