Part 1
Giám khảo
Do you take photos of buildings?
Thí sinh
No, there's no much opportunities to take a photos of building because I always prefer to take a photo of the natures rather than the buildings. So and also I'm not interested in like architecture, that's why I don't really take photos of buildings.
Giám khảo
Is there a building that you would like to visit?
Thí sinh
I actually rubbed to see the castle because when I was a child I used to have a book which is showing like the famous castle in the world. That's why when I have an opportunities to visit the castle, I love to go.
Do you take photos of buildings?
Điểm: 62.0Gợi ý: 回答は意味が伝わりますが、文法の誤りや不自然な表現が目立ちます。短めの自然なトピックセンテンス(主張)を置き、その後に1〜2文で具体的な理由をつなげる練習をしてください。接続詞や語順、冠詞(a/the)や可算名詞の複数形の扱い(a photo / photos)、およびより適切な語彙(nature → nature / natural scenery)に注意しましょう。例:最初に「I don't usually take photos of buildings.」と明確に述べ、次に「because...」で具体的な理由を述べ、最後に短い補足を加える。発話は最大5文に抑え、冗長な語(so and also, like)を避けてください。
Ví dụ: I don't usually take photos of buildings. I prefer to photograph natural scenery because I enjoy capturing landscapes and wildlife. Also, I'm not very interested in architecture, so I rarely focus my camera on buildings.
Is there a building that you would like to visit?
Điểm: 58.0Gợi ý: 意図は伝わりますが、多くの文法・語彙ミスと不自然な表現があり、時制や語順の修正が必要です。まず簡潔な主張(Yes, I'd like to visit a castle.)を述べ、その後に一つか二つの具体的な理由をつなげてください。過去の経験を述べる際は正しい時制(I had a book / I used to have)を使い、冠詞(a/the)や複数形に注意を払ってください。また“rubbed”は誤りなので適切な語(really hoped to / longed to)を使いましょう。接続語(because / so / when)を自然に使い、文は3文以内に収めると良いです。
Ví dụ: Yes, I'd love to visit a famous castle. When I was a child I had a book about the world's famous castles, so I've always been fascinated by them. If I get the chance, I'd like to see one in person to admire its history and architecture.
× No, there's no much opportunities to take a photos of building because I always prefer to take a photo of the natures rather than the buildings.
✓ No, there aren't many opportunities to take photos of buildings because I always prefer to take photos of nature rather than buildings.
複数可算名詞には正しい冠詞や数量表現が必要です。'there's no much opportunities'は不自然で、'opportunities'は複数可算名詞なので否定形では 'there aren't many opportunities' が適切です。'a photos' は冠詞と複数形の矛盾なので 'photos' に修正します。'the natures' のように 'nature' は不可算名詞なので冠詞不要で単数扱い、'take photos of nature' が自然です。改善の提案: 可算名詞と不可算名詞を区別し、'many' や 'much' の使い方を確認してください。
× So and also I'm not interested in like architecture, that's why I don't really take photos of buildings.
✓ Also, I'm not interested in architecture, so I don't really take photos of buildings.
'So and also' は冗長で自然な接続詞の使い方ではありません。'like architecture' の 'like' は不要で口語的すぎるため削除します。さらに複合文は接続詞 'so' を使って因果関係をはっきり示すと良いです。改善の提案: 接続詞は一つに絞り、口語的表現を避けて明確に表現してください。
× I actually rubbed to see the castle because when I was a child I used to have a book which is showing like the famous castle in the world.
✓ I actually wanted to see the castle because when I was a child I used to have a book that showed famous castles in the world.
'rubbed to see' は意味不明で 'wanted to see' が適切です。また、過去の習慣を表す 'used to' を使っているので続く節も過去形にする必要があります。'which is showing' は現在形なので不一致で、過去形 'that showed' に修正します。'like the famous castle in the world' は不自然なので 'famous castles in the world' のように複数形で一般化します。改善の提案: 過去の出来事や習慣には一貫して過去形を使い、語句の意味を確認してください。
× That's why when I have an opportunities to visit the castle, I love to go.
✓ That's why when I have an opportunity to visit the castle, I would love to go.
'have an opportunities' は冠詞と複数形が一致していません。単数なら 'an opportunity'、複数なら 'opportunities' を用います。また、現在形 'have' と 'love to go' の組合せだと時制や意図が曖昧なので、条件節で未来の行動の希望を表すために 'would love to go' を使うのが自然です。改善の提案: 冠詞と名詞の数を一致させ、願望や可能性を表す場合は 'would like/would love' を使って丁寧に表現してください。