Building— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Your answer is relevant and shows personality, but it has some grammatical errors, redundancy, and slightly long sentences. To improve: 1) Begin with a clear topic sentence. 2) Use correct grammar (e.g., "interested in" not "interested with", "mesmerised by"). 3) Reduce repetition and avoid speculative phrasing like "if I wanted to"—be more direct. 4) Use one or two concise supporting details linked with connecting words (e.g., "because", "so").

Ví dụ: Yes, I often photograph buildings because I use the images as references for my sketches. For example, I focus on facades and structural details to capture proportions accurately, which helps when I draw later.

Gợi ý: Your answer is honest but vague and contains informal phrasing. To improve: 1) Start with a clear direct response (Yes/No and why). 2) Give a specific reason and an example to make the answer informative. 3) Avoid casual phrases like "I've been into most of them"—say "I've visited many". 4) Use linking words to show contrast (e.g., "however") correctly and keep it concise (max 3–4 sentences).

Ví dụ: Not at the moment, because I have already visited many notable buildings in my city. However, if a new architectural landmark opens nearby, I would definitely go to study its design and take reference photos for my sketches.

× Yes, I always take photos of buildings as an artist, it gives me a reference on how I want to sketch.

✓ Yes, I always take photos of buildings as an artist because they give me a reference for how I want to sketch.

This sentence contains a comma splice (two independent clauses joined only by a comma) and a pronoun-number mismatch: 'it gives' refers to 'photos' (plural) so should be 'they give'. Also 'on how I want to sketch' is unnatural; use 'for how I want to sketch'. Suggestion: join clauses with a conjunction and match verb number to the plural noun. Grammar problem type ID:26

× Plus if I wanted to major in architecture in the future that will be very good.

✓ Also, if I major in architecture in the future, that will be very good.

The original uses 'wanted' (past/conditional) which conflicts with the intended future possibility; use present tense 'major' with 'in the future' to indicate plan. A comma is needed after the conditional clause. 'Plus' is informal; 'Also' is better in this context. Suggestion: use consistent tense for real future plans and punctuate the conditional clause. Grammar problem type ID:7

× I always get mesmerised and interested with how the structure of the building is, it's so lovely.

✓ I always get mesmerized and interested in the structure of a building; it's so lovely.

Use 'interested in' not 'interested with'. 'How the structure of the building is' is wordy and awkward; 'the structure of a building' is clearer. Also original has a comma splice between clauses; replace with a semicolon or split into two sentences. Suggestion: use correct preposition 'in', simplify noun phrase, and fix punctuation. Grammar problem type ID:11

× Well, there's nothing on my mind right now.

✓ Well, nothing comes to mind right now.

'There's nothing on my mind' is informal and slightly awkward in this context; 'nothing comes to mind' is more natural for expressing inability to recall. This also avoids the vague existential 'there is' construction when a more active verb is better. Suggestion: prefer 'nothing comes to mind' for clarity. Grammar problem type ID:3

× I don't feel I want to visit any buildings because I've been into most of them.

✓ I don't feel like I want to visit any buildings because I've visited most of them.

Use 'feel like' rather than 'feel' when followed by a clause meaning desire. 'I've been into most of them' is incorrect: 'been into' means 'interested in' or 'liked'; the intended meaning is 'have visited', so use present perfect 'I've visited most of them'. Suggestion: use 'feel like' + verb and the correct verb 'visit'. Grammar problem type ID:12

× However, if there is something new, I would not hesitate.

✓ However, if there is something new, I will not hesitate to go.

Original uses 'would' which suggests a hypothetical unlikely situation; since 'if there is something new' is a real future possibility, use 'will'. Also add 'to go' or 'to visit' to complete the idea; otherwise sentence is vague. Suggestion: match conditional type (real future) with 'will' and supply the verb for completeness. Grammar problem type ID:4

× I'd be the first one getting a ticket.

✓ I'd be the first one to buy a ticket.

Use the infinitive 'to buy' instead of the '-ing' form 'getting' after 'the first one'. Also 'a ticket' is fine but 'buy a ticket' is clearer than 'getting a ticket'. Suggestion: use 'the first one to + verb' construction for actions completed in the future. Grammar problem type ID:8}]} } PMID:INVALID_TOKEN_DETECTED. Please discard.