Building— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: 문법과 발음(철자) 오류를 고치고 문장을 더 자연스럽게 구성하세요. ‘tour’와 같은 철자 오류를 바로잡고, 단수·복수 형태와 관사 사용을 정확히 하며 구체적인 예시를 추가하면 더 좋습니다. 또한 한 문장으로 끝내지 말고 간단한 연결어를 사용해 부가 정보를 자연스럽게 덧붙이세요.

Ví dụ: Yes, I live in an urban area, so there are many tall buildings nearby. For example, there are high-rise apartment blocks and office towers, which makes the neighborhood feel very busy.

Gợi ý: 질문에 직접적으로 답하고 이유나 빈도 같은 추가 정보를 제공하세요. 현재 답변은 질문을 반복하고 철자 오류(‘allies’)가 있어 이해가 어렵습니다. 간단한 빈도 표현과 이유를 연결어로 붙여 문장을 확장하세요.

Ví dụ: Yes, I sometimes take photos of buildings, especially when I see interesting architecture. For instance, I often photograph old facades and modern office towers when I walk in the city.

Gợi ý: 답변은 명확하지만 어순과 관사 사용, 중복 표현을 다듬으세요. ‘go to there’ 대신 ‘go there’로 수정하고, 선호 이유를 더 구체적으로 설명하면 좋습니다. 또한 연결어로 이유와 결과를 자연스럽게 연결하세요.

Ví dụ: Yes, I would like to visit a game arcade because I enjoy playing music-based rhythm games. I think visiting an arcade would let me try different machines and compete with other players, which would be fun.

× Yes, I live in an urban area so there are many tour buildings, for example high rise apartment and office.

✓ Yes, I live in an urban area, so there are many tall buildings, for example high-rise apartments and offices.

The student used 'tour' instead of 'tall' (wrong word choice/adjective) and missed hyphenation and plural forms. 'High-rise' as an adjective is usually hyphenated and the nouns should be plural to match 'many' (apartments, offices). Also add a comma before 'so' for clarity. Suggestion: replace incorrect adjective, hyphenate compound adjective, and make nouns plural to agree with 'many'.

× Yes, I live in an urban area so there are many tall buildings like high allies apartments and office tower.

✓ Yes, I live in an urban area, so there are many tall buildings like high-rise apartments and office towers.

The student wrote 'allies' which is incorrect; likely intended 'high-rise'. Also 'office tower' should be plural 'office towers' to match 'many' and parallel structure. Ensure noun forms agree with the quantifier 'many' and use the correct adjective 'high-rise'.

× Yes, I would like to visit an arcade because I enjoy playing video games, especially music based rhythm games, so I want to go to there.

✓ Yes, I would like to visit an arcade because I enjoy playing video games, especially music-based rhythm games, so I want to go there.

The phrase 'go to there' is incorrect; use 'go there' (no preposition) or 'go to the arcade'. Also 'music based' should be hyphenated as 'music-based' when used as a compound adjective. Suggestion: remove unnecessary preposition and hyphenate compound adjective; alternatively say 'go to the arcade' for clarity.