Part 1
Giám khảo
Are there tall buildings near your home?
Thí sinh
Yeah, definitely. I live in a very busy area where hundreds apartments and office gas wipers are all around. I exposed to a lot of noise because of that and it's hard to get any fresh air or natural sunlight so.
Giám khảo
Do you take photos of buildings?
Thí sinh
Yes, sometimes because I like to take photos of unusual things like strange houses, but mostly the building does not make me take photo.
Giám khảo
Is there a building that you would like to visit?
Thí sinh
Oh this question admire me of my childhood where was little. I always imagine I am the owner of the tallest building which is a luxury hotel and visits them every day.
Giám khảo
Do you want to live in a tall building?
Thí sinh
Yeah, I would definitely like to live in a tall building because it offers excellent views and more privacy compared to low rise housing. For example, a high rise floor apartment can provide quieter surroundings away from street noise.
Are there tall buildings near your home?
Điểm: 60.0Gợi ý: 你的回答能传达主要意思,但存在语法和用词错误,句子结构不够清晰,且有些词不自然(如“gas wipers”)。建议:1) 使用完整且正确的句子(避免碎片句);2) 修正词汇错误并用更具体的描述;3) 用连接词使句子更连贯(例如because, so, therefore);4) 控制在最多5句内。示例练习:用两到三句说明高楼的存在、带来的影响,并提供一两个具体细节(噪音来源、通风/采光问题)。
Ví dụ: Yes. I live in a busy area with many high-rise apartments and office buildings. Because of the traffic and commercial activity, there is a lot of noise and limited fresh air and natural sunlight.
Do you take photos of buildings?
Điểm: 65.0Gợi ý: 回答简短但有信息,需更自然和具体:1) 使用更自然的表达(例如“I sometimes do”);2) 说明什么是“unusual”并举例;3) 使用连接词使观点更流畅;4) 避免自相矛盾的表达(先说有时拍,又说大多数时候不拍,应明确频率)。
Ví dụ: I sometimes take photos, especially when I see unusual or quirky houses with interesting shapes or colors. However, I usually don’t photograph ordinary buildings.
Is there a building that you would like to visit?
Điểm: 55.0Gợi ý: 回答语法和逻辑混乱,含义不清晰:1) 开头直接回答问题并给出具体建筑(例如a famous skyscraper or historic building);2) 修正语法错误,使用正确时态和主谓一致;3) 提供一两个具体原因或童年联想作为支持细节;4) 保持句子简短清晰。
Ví dụ: Yes. I would like to visit the tallest skyscraper in the city because I used to imagine, as a child, owning a luxury hotel there. Visiting it now would let me see the view and remember those childhood dreams.
Do you want to live in a tall building?
Điểm: 80.0Gợi ý: 这是最好的回答:结构清晰、理由明确并有例子。可以通过更丰富的词汇和一个额外细节(如设施、安全性或通风)进一步提升:1) 用更高级但自然的词汇(e.g., panoramic views, seclusion);2) 加一两句具体例子或对比;3) 保持简洁不超过5句。
Ví dụ: Yes, I would. Living in a tall building offers panoramic views and greater privacy than low-rise housing. For example, an apartment on a higher floor is usually quieter and feels more secure, and it often gets better natural light.
× I live in a very busy area where hundreds apartments and office gas wipers are all around.
✓ I live in a very busy area where hundreds of apartments and office gas wipers are all around.
名词复数和数量词搭配错误。英语中表达“数百个公寓”应该用“hundreds of + 复数名词”。建议记住“hundreds of + 可数复数”。
× I exposed to a lot of noise because of that and it's hard to get any fresh air or natural sunlight so.
✓ I am exposed to a lot of noise because of that, and it's hard to get any fresh air or natural sunlight.
句子缺少被动语态的助动词,原句“I exposed to...”结构错误,正确为“be exposed to”。此外句末多余连词“so”,应该用连接词并用逗号连接两个并列分句。建议学习被动结构“be + past participle”和并列句的连接方式。
× Yes, sometimes because I like to take photos of unusual things like strange houses, but mostly the building does not make me take photo.
✓ Yes, sometimes because I like to take photos of unusual things like strange houses, but mostly buildings do not make me take photos.
“the building”不合语境,应使用复数“buildings”表示一般情况;“take photo”需要复数形式“take photos”。此外主谓一致也随之改变。建议注意可数名词单复数和固定搭配“take photos”。
× Oh this question admire me of my childhood where was little.
✓ Oh, this question reminds me of when I was little.
原句“admire me of”用法错误,应为“remind someone of something”;“where was little”语序和从句结构错误,正确用法是“when I was little”。建议记住动词“remind”的固定搭配“remind someone of something”以及时间状语从句结构。
× I always imagine I am the owner of the tallest building which is a luxury hotel and visits them every day.
✓ I always imagine I am the owner of the tallest building, which is a luxury hotel, and I visit it every day.
动词形式和代词使用不当:主句中“imagine I am”是正确的,但后半句“visits them”主语应为“I”,动词不应加-s;代词应指单数“building”,用“it”。建议注意主语一致,动词形式随主语变化,代词要与先行词在人称和数上保持一致。
× For example, a high rise floor apartment can provide quieter surroundings away from street noise.
✓ For example, a high-rise apartment on a higher floor can provide quieter surroundings away from street noise.
“high rise floor apartment”结构不自然且缺少连字符,应改为“high-rise apartment”并说明“on a higher floor”以表达楼层更高的意思。建议注意复合形容词的连字符用法和短语顺序以确保清晰表达。