Building— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: 문장 구조와 문법 오류를 고치고 응답을 더 자연스럽고 간결하게 만드세요. 예를 들어 서두에 직접 질문에 답하는 주제문을 사용하고, 그 다음에 구체적 세부사항(예: 도심 위치, 주변 건물의 유형, 본인 건물의 층수)을 연결어로 덧붙이세요. 불필요한 중복(‘high skyscrapers’, ‘high’ 반복)을 피하고 관사와 전치사 사용에 유의하세요.

Ví dụ: Yes. I live in the city center, so there are many tall buildings near my home. For example, the neighborhood has several office towers and high-rise apartment blocks, and I live in an 18-storey building, which gives me a clear view of the skyline.

Gợi ý: 의견을 더 자연스럽게 표현하고 이유를 구체적으로 설명하세요. 연결어를 사용해 근거와 예시를 분명히 하며, 반복되는 표현(‘something not familiar, something new’)을 하나로 정리하세요.

Ví dụ: Not really. I rarely photograph buildings because they feel ordinary to me; instead, I prefer taking photos of unusual places or things I haven’t seen before, such as street art or historic landmarks when I travel.

Gợi ý: 사실관계와 문장 일관성을 바로잡으세요. 질문은 방문하고 싶은 건물에 관한 것이므로, 아직 방문하지 않은 곳을 말하거나 방문 의도를 분명히 해야 합니다. 장소 이름과 위치를 정확히 표현하고, 이유를 구체적으로 제시하세요. 현재 문장은 모순('have been to' vs 'haven't been there')과 지명 오류('Jamshed')가 있어 혼란을 줍니다.

Ví dụ: Yes. I would like to visit the 63 Building in Seoul because I’ve heard it offers a great observation deck and interesting exhibitions. Although I’ve lived in Seoul for over 15 years, I haven’t had the chance to go there yet, so I’m planning to visit next time I have free time.

Gợi ý: 중복 표현을 줄이고 이유를 추가해 답변을 풍부하게 만드세요. 예를 들어 현재 생활의 장단점(뷰, 소음, 편의시설 등)을 간단히 설명하면 더 설득력 있습니다. 또한 불필요한 단어 반복('apartment apt')를 제거하세요.

Ví dụ: Yes. I already live on the 11th floor of an apartment and I don’t mind tall buildings. I actually like the view and the extra privacy, and the building also has convenient facilities like a gym and a rooftop garden, so I would consider living in a high-rise in the future as well.

× Yes, my neighborhood densely populated since it is the capital city and the center also Hong Kong.

✓ Yes, my neighborhood is densely populated since it is the capital city and the center of Hong Kong.

The sentence is missing the verb 'is' to form a proper clause (Sentence structure errors). Add 'is' after 'neighborhood' and include the preposition 'of' before 'Hong Kong' to show relationship. Suggestion: Use 'is densely populated' and 'center of Hong Kong' for clarity.

× There are many high skyscrapers near my house.

✓ There are many tall skyscrapers near my house.

The adjective 'high' is awkward with 'skyscrapers'; 'tall' is the correct adjective collocated with buildings (Incorrect use of adjectives or adverbs). Suggestion: Use 'tall' when describing building height.

× Also the building I live in is high.

✓ Also, the building I live in is tall.

While grammatically possible, 'is high' is not the natural collocation for buildings; 'is tall' is preferred (Sentence structure errors). Add a comma after 'Also' for fluency.

× No, I don't actually take photos of buildings because buildings are too familiar for me and it is not special.

✓ No, I don't usually take photos of buildings because they are too familiar to me and it's not special.

Use 'usually' instead of 'actually' to express habit and 'they' to refer to buildings (Modal verb usage). 'Too familiar to me' is correct phrasing and use contraction 'it's' for natural speech. Suggestion: Use adverbs that match the intended meaning and correct pronoun reference.

× So I only take pictures of something not familiar, something new.

✓ So I only take pictures of things that are unfamiliar or new.

Countable/plural noun 'things' and relative clause 'that are unfamiliar' are needed for grammaticality and naturalness (Sentence structure errors). Avoid singular 'something' when referring to general categories.

× Yes, actually I have been to 63 building in Seoul, which is located in Jamshed.

✓ Yes, actually I have been to the 63 Building in Seoul, which is located in Yeouido.

Proper noun formatting and correct place name needed; also use article 'the' with named building (Verb in the past participle form). 'Have been to' is correct present perfect; ensure correct proper nouns: '63 Building' and location 'Yeouido'. Suggestion: Check proper names and include 'the' before famous building names.

× Even though I have lived in Seoul for more than 15 years, I haven't been there.

✓ Even though I have lived in Seoul for more than 15 years, I still haven't been there.

Add 'still' to emphasize continuation; tense use is fine but emphasis improves naturalness (Present tense issue). Suggestion: Use discourse markers like 'still' to convey contrast.

× Currently I am living in a tall building on the 11th floor of the apartment apt.

✓ Currently I am living in a tall apartment building on the 11th floor.

Redundant 'apartment apt' should be reduced to 'apartment building' (Present tense issue). Word order 'on the 11th floor' should follow building type. Suggestion: Avoid repetition and use standard collocation 'apartment building'.

× I don't mind living in a tall building and I am planning to live in a tall building in the future as well.

✓ I don't mind living in a tall building, and I plan to live in one in the future as well.

Use 'plan' instead of 'am planning to' for succinctness and 'one' to avoid repetition (Present tense issue). Add a comma before 'and' for clarity. Suggestion: Use pronoun 'one' to refer back to 'a tall building' and prefer simple present for habitual/planned intentions.