Part 1
Giám khảo
Are there tall buildings near your home?
Thí sinh
No they are because I'm live in Tokyo but I also live in part of countryside I think, so they are not tall buildings near my house.
Giám khảo
Do you take photos of buildings?
Thí sinh
Yes I do, because in Tokyo there are lot of beautiful buildings such as Tokyo Tower and Skytree and there is so tall and also the architecture is absolutely beautiful.
Giám khảo
Is there a building that you would like to visit?
Thí sinh
I would like to go to mosque and I visited mosque last year in Tokyo, but I would like to go to the local ones and I love to feel like.
Giám khảo
Do you want to live in a tall building?
Thí sinh
No I don't because I prefer live in countryside because countryside is more quiet and also like there has a chill vibes and I love it and but tall buildings it's kinda get tired for me.
Are there tall buildings near your home?
Điểm: 45.0Gợi ý: 質問に直接答えた後、理由を論理的に簡潔に述べる練習をしましょう。文法ミス(主語・動詞の一致、時制)と語順を直し、不要な語("I think" を多用する等)を減らして答えを簡潔に保つことが必要です。また「東京に住んでいるが郊外(田舎寄り)のエリアにも住んでいる」という意味を正確に表現するためのフレーズを覚えましょう。具体的には短いトピック文→理由→短い補足の構成(最大5文)に整える練習をしてください。
Ví dụ: No, there are not many tall buildings near my home. Although I live in Tokyo, I actually live in a more suburban area, so most houses are low-rise. The neighborhood feels quiet and spacious compared with central Tokyo.
Do you take photos of buildings?
Điểm: 60.0Gợi ý: 答えは肯定して具体例を挙げていますが、文法(冠詞、複数形、形容詞の順序)と語彙の正確さを改善しましょう。例を列挙するときはコンマや接続詞でつなぎ、理由を簡潔に述べる構成にします。また"so tall"のような口語表現は良いですが、より自然に"very tall"や"impressively tall"を使うと良いです。5文以内でまとまるように練習してください。
Ví dụ: Yes, I often photograph buildings in Tokyo because many of them are architecturally interesting. For example, Tokyo Tower and the Skytree are very tall and look stunning at night. I enjoy capturing their shapes and the way lights illuminate the city.
Is there a building that you would like to visit?
Điểm: 50.0Gợi ý: 意図は伝わりますが、表現が不正確で文が途中で切れている部分があります。(冠詞の欠如、意味の明確化、文の完結)まずは一文目で訪れたい建物を明確にし、二文目で過去の経験と現在の希望を分けて述べましょう。理由も具体的に(建物の雰囲気や文化的興味)述べると良いです。日本語での改善点は、冠詞の使い方と話の流れを明確にすることです。
Ví dụ: I'd like to visit a mosque outside Tokyo. I visited a mosque in Tokyo last year, which I enjoyed, but I'd love to experience local mosques in other regions to learn more about their architecture and community.
Do you want to live in a tall building?
Điểm: 40.0Gợi ý: 否定の理由を述べていますが、文法と語順、冗長表現が多く、論理のつながりが弱いです。まず明確なトピック文(No, I don't.)を置き、その後に理由を2つ程度に絞って順序立てて述べましょう。口語的な表現("kinda get tired")は避け、より自然な表現("I prefer the quiet country life")を使います。語彙を整理して簡潔に答える練習をしてください。
Ví dụ: No, I wouldn't like to live in a tall building. I prefer living in the countryside because it's much quieter and has a more relaxed atmosphere. High-rise living feels crowded and stressful to me.
× No they are because I'm live in Tokyo but I also live in part of countryside I think, so they are not tall buildings near my house.
✓ No, they are not, because I live in Tokyo but also in a part of the countryside, so there are no tall buildings near my house.
The original sentence misuses pronouns and has unclear subjects. Use 'they are not' alone is unnatural; better to use 'No, they are not' or restructure. 'I'm live' is incorrect verb form; use 'I live'. 'part of countryside' needs articles: 'a part of the countryside'. Also 'they are not tall buildings near my house' has wrong word order and subject; use 'there are no tall buildings near my house'. Suggestions: use correct subject-verb order, correct verb form 'I live', add articles where needed.
× Yes I do, because in Tokyo there are lot of beautiful buildings such as Tokyo Tower and Skytree and there is so tall and also the architecture is absolutely beautiful.
✓ Yes, I do, because in Tokyo there are a lot of beautiful buildings such as Tokyo Tower and Skytree; they are very tall, and the architecture is absolutely beautiful.
Missing article 'a' before 'lot of'. 'there is so tall' is incorrect: use plural subject 'they' and adjective order 'very tall'. Use a semicolon or conjunction to connect clauses. Suggestions: add 'a' before 'lot of', match plural subject and verb, and use 'very' instead of 'so' for standard emphasis.
× I would like to go to mosque and I visited mosque last year in Tokyo, but I would like to go to the local ones and I love to feel like.
✓ I would like to go to a mosque; I visited a mosque last year in Tokyo, but I would like to visit local ones because I love the atmosphere.
The noun 'mosque' needs an article: 'a mosque' for a non-specific singular. Repetition 'go to mosque' should be 'go to a mosque' or 'visit mosques'. 'I love to feel like' is ungrammatical; clarify to 'I love the atmosphere' or 'I like the feeling'. Suggestions: use appropriate articles before singular countable nouns and complete the idea with a noun phrase like 'the atmosphere'.
× No I don't because I prefer live in countryside because countryside is more quiet and also like there has a chill vibes and I love it and but tall buildings it's kinda get tired for me.
✓ No, I don't, because I prefer to live in the countryside; the countryside is quieter and has a relaxed vibe that I love, but tall buildings make me feel a bit tired.
Missing 'to' in the infinitive 'prefer to live'. 'countryside' as a general place should use 'the countryside' and 'more quiet' should be comparative 'quieter'. 'there has a chill vibes' is incorrect subject-verb agreement and count: use 'it has a relaxed vibe' or 'there are chill vibes'. 'tall buildings it's kinda get tired for me' is ungrammatical; express feeling with 'tall buildings make me feel a bit tired'. Suggestions: use 'prefer to + verb', use 'the' with 'countryside', use comparative 'quieter', ensure subject-verb agreement and use natural expressions for feelings.