Part 1
Giám khảo
Are there tall buildings near your home?
Thí sinh
Yes, there are several tall buildings near my home because I live in the center of our city, so I you know, you can see a lot of tall buildings in the center of the city.
Giám khảo
Do you take photos of buildings?
Thí sinh
Yes, of course. I always do that because I think taking photos is meaningful. It's useful. When I go outside with my friends or with my parents. I always take out my mobile phones to take some pictures and after I getting home I always check them.
Giám khảo
Is there a building that you would like to visit?
Thí sinh
Yes, of course, I really want to go to the Guangzhou tower because you, you know that that is a symbol of that city and it, it is shining when, uh, the sky is dark. So I really like it. If I have the opportunity, I would like to go there.
Giám khảo
Do you want to live in a tall building?
Thí sinh
Well, about this question, actually, I don't want to live in a tall building because I'm worried about my safety. Or once I write some news that, uh, some people who live in the tall buildings, when there is a earthquake, they can't go outside out at all.
Are there tall buildings near your home?
Điểm: 68.0Gợi ý: 回答要更简洁并直接回应问题,避免重复和口头填充词(如 "you know")。第一句应明确肯定或否定,然后用一两句具体细节支持(例如数量、距离或类型)。注意语法(如时态和人称)和句子连贯性。
Ví dụ: Yes, there are several tall buildings near my home because I live in the city centre. For example, there are two office towers and a residential high-rise within a five-minute walk from my apartment, so the skyline is dominated by tall structures.
Do you take photos of buildings?
Điểm: 62.0Gợi ý: 避免断断续续的短句,连贯地组织想法并使用连接词(例如 "because", "so", "after")。提供更具体的细节(例如拍摄目的、风格或频率),同时修正语法错误(如 "after I getting home" 应为 "after I get home")。回答保持在最多五句内。
Ví dụ: Yes, I often take photos of interesting buildings because I enjoy architecture and want to remember places I visit. For instance, when I go out with friends I usually take pictures of modern facades and historic details with my phone, then I review and edit them after I get home.
Is there a building that you would like to visit?
Điểm: 72.0Gợi ý: 回答要更流畅,减少重复和填充词(如 "you know", 多次停顿)。开头直接给出要访的建筑,然后说明具体原因(例如风景、亮灯、观景台等),并可加入条件句表达愿望。保持句子清晰且不超过五句。
Ví dụ: Yes, I'd like to visit the Guangzhou Tower because it's an iconic landmark and it looks spectacular when it's illuminated at night. If I have the chance, I'd go up to the observation deck to enjoy panoramic views of the city.
Do you want to live in a tall building?
Điểm: 58.0Gợi ý: 回答要更精确并避免含糊的表达(例如 “once I write some news” 意义不明)。先给出明确立场,然后用具体理由支持(例如安全、疏散困难、风大或高层生活不便),并可举例或对比来增强说服力。注意语法和连贯性。
Ví dụ: No, I wouldn't like to live in a tall building because I'm concerned about safety and evacuation during emergencies. For example, in an earthquake or fire it might be hard to get out quickly from a high floor, so I prefer a low-rise house where exiting would be easier.
× Yes, there are several tall buildings near my home because I live in the center of our city, so I you know, you can see a lot of tall buildings in the center of the city.
✓ Yes, there are several tall buildings near my home because I live in the center of our city, so you can see a lot of tall buildings there.
句子中有冗余与口语填充("I you know, you can")导致结构混乱。改善方法:去掉多余的主语与填充语,用明确的指示词(there)代替重复的短语,使句子结构简洁流畅。
× When I go outside with my friends or with my parents. I always take out my mobile phones to take some pictures and after I getting home I always check them.
✓ When I go outside with my friends or with my parents, I always take out my mobile phone to take some pictures, and after I get home I always check them.
句中存在断句问题与动词形式错误:1)原句将从属时间状语作为独立句,应改为与主句连成一句;2)"mobile phones" 与说话者通常只拿一部手机,改为单数更自然;3)"after I getting home" 中的 getting 是现在分词,需用一般现在时的主语+动词原形(get)构成时间状语从句。建议:注意从句与主句衔接并使用正确的动词形式。
× Yes, of course. I always do that because I think taking photos is meaningful. It's useful. When I go outside with my friends or with my parents. I always take out my mobile phones to take some pictures and after I getting home I always check them.
✓ Yes, of course. I always do that because I think taking photos is meaningful and useful. When I go out with my friends or my parents, I always take out my mobile phone to take some pictures, and after I get home I always check them.
原句有重复断句和表达分散问题("meaningful. It's useful." 与时间状语断开)。将相关短句合并,使用更自然的短语("go out"、"my parents")以及修正动词形式,使表达连贯。
× If I have the opportunity, I would like to go there.
✓ If I have the opportunity, I would like to go there.
该句为虚拟客气表达,结构和动词形式正确,无需修改。此处列出以表明已检查并确认符合语法规则。
× Or once I write some news that, uh, some people who live in the tall buildings, when there is a earthquake, they can't go outside out at all.
✓ Once I read some news that said some people who lived in tall buildings couldn't go outside at all when there was an earthquake.
原句时态混用与词序不当:1)"Once I write some news" 不合语境,应用过去时描述过去看到的新闻(read/said);2)从句中因描述过去发生的情形,应使用过去时(lived / couldn't / was);3)有多余重复词("outside out")应删除;4)冠词错误("a earthquake" 应为 "an earthquake")。建议:根据上下文统一时态,注意冠词使用和避免词语重复。
× ...that that is a symbol of that city and it, it is shining when, uh, the sky is dark.
✓ ...that it is a symbol of the city, and it shines when the sky is dark.
原句中"that that"重复且口语填充过多;"it is shining when the sky is dark" 用一般现在时更自然(描述事实或特征),且去掉多余逗号和填充词。建议:避免重复指示词,使用一般现在时描述常态事实。
× So I really like it. If I have the opportunity, I would like to go there.
✓ So I really like it. If I have the opportunity, I would like to go there.
句子语法正确,动词与主语一致,为礼貌和假设表达,保持原样。此处列出以表明已检查并确认符合语法规则。