Travelling— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Improve grammar, clarity and coherence. Start with a clear topic sentence answering directly, then give one or two concise supporting details using linking words. Correct verb tenses (use past for childhood) and avoid filler words (uh, um). Use specific details (what you saw) to make the answer more vivid.

Ví dụ: Yes, I often looked out of the window when I travelled by bus as a child. For example, I liked watching people going about their daily lives and the changing shops and houses along the road, which made the journeys interesting.

Gợi ý: Make the answer more concise and correct grammar and vocabulary. Give a clear reason and one specific example of when or what you photograph. Reduce repetition and remove hesitation words. Use linking words like 'because' or 'so' to connect ideas.

Ví dụ: Yes, I often take photos of the scenery outside the car window because I want to keep memories of trips. For example, on a recent road trip I photographed the countryside and small villages so I could remember the colours and atmosphere later.

Gợi ý: Good clear preference and reasons. Improve grammar (use 'fresh air', 'a quieter atmosphere' etc.), refine linking phrases ('because', 'also', 'for example') and avoid small hesitations. Add one specific detail about a memorable mountain experience to strengthen the answer, and keep it within 3–4 sentences.

Ví dụ: I prefer the mountains because they offer fresh air and a much quieter atmosphere than busy beaches. Also, hiking in the hills helps me unwind and provides beautiful views for photographs. For example, last autumn I climbed a nearby ridge and watched the sun set over the valleys, which was very peaceful.

× Yes, when I was child, I have in, I travel by you, uh, by bus and I have interest to see the, uh, view around the around, uh, around me and see a lot of things.

✓ Yes, when I was a child, I used to travel by bus and I was interested in seeing the view around me and seeing many things.

Original contains tense inconsistencies and incorrect verb forms: 'when I was child' needs the article 'a'; 'I have in, I travel by you' is garbled and should be 'I used to travel by bus' to indicate past habitual action; 'I have interest to see' should be 'I was interested in seeing' using correct adjective + preposition and gerund. Suggestion: use 'used to' for past habits, include articles, and use 'interested in' + verb-ing.

× Uh, yes, definitely. I take a lot of, take a lot of pics of the sceneries outside the car window, uh, because I want to catch up a memory for one.

✓ Yes, definitely. I take a lot of photos of the scenery outside the car window because I want to capture memories.

Problems: 'pics' is informal—use 'photos'; 'sceneries' is uncountable here—use 'scenery'; 'catch up a memory' is incorrect collocation—use 'capture memories'. Tense 'I take' is acceptable for habitual present. Suggestion: use correct nouns and collocations and avoid slang in formal responses.

× I was, uh, when I was become a adult and I want to see how I enjoy my memorable time.

✓ I was, uh, when I became an adult I wanted to look back and see how I had enjoyed those memorable times.

Issues: 'when I was become a adult' mixes auxiliary with past participle—should be 'when I became an adult'; tense sequence: looking back requires past perfect 'had enjoyed' to show an earlier past. Also 'an' article before 'adult'. Suggestion: use 'became' for past change of state and past perfect for earlier actions when reflecting.

× Well, I prefer the mountains because I find there are fresh air and a peaceful atmosphere, moreover less than the busy and wise beach.

✓ Well, I prefer the mountains because I find there is fresh air and a peaceful atmosphere; they are quieter than the busy beach.

Errors: 'there are fresh air'—'air' is uncountable and takes singular verb 'is'; 'moreover less than the busy and wise beach' is ungrammatical and 'wise' is incorrect word choice. Use comparative 'quieter than' and plural reference 'they' for mountains. Suggestion: treat uncountable nouns properly, use suitable adjectives and clear comparative structure.

× For example, hiking in the hills help me, uh, unwind and gives me a great view for photographs, which I really enjoy.

✓ For example, hiking in the hills helps me unwind and gives me a great view for photographs, which I really enjoy.

Subject-verb agreement error with present tense: 'hiking' as a singular gerund subject requires 'helps' not 'help'; 'unwind and gives' should parallel 'helps' and 'gives' is correct after subject. Suggestion: ensure the verb agrees with the gerund subject; maintain parallel structure for coordinated verbs.