Part 1
Giám khảo
Do you look out the window at the scenery when travelling by bus or car?
Thí sinh
Yes, fluke fluently every time I take the bus or the car. I don't want to watch my phones, but if I don't want to then I'll feel boring. So looking out the window is a good choice for them to appreciate. Appreciate the landscape. It can make me have relaxation and give me a fresh feeling.
Giám khảo
Do you take photos of the scenery outside the car window?
Thí sinh
Of course, every time when I see some beautiful sceneries, I'll use my phone to record this kind of grand landscape and later, maybe sometime, I'll look them and carry on my memory about that day. I feel enjoyment and it's made me happy.
Giám khảo
Do you prefer the mountains or the sea?
Thí sinh
I pray for the mountains because I have my hometown is mountainous so when I was young I always went to have claimed to the mountains and there are many public servants that I can have such as infrastructures which can keep my body health and I can have fun on the.
Do you look out the window at the scenery when travelling by bus or car?
Điểm: 58.0Gợi ý: 句子不够连贯且有许多语法和用词错误。建议:1) 回答时先用一句主题句直接回应(肯定或否定),然后用1–2句具体原因或例子;2) 注意代词和主谓一致,例如不要用“them”指代景色,避免重复表达;3) 控制长度在最多5句内并使用连接词(because, so, when)使逻辑更清晰;4) 改善词汇搭配(watch my phone 而不是 watch my phones; feel bored 而不是 feel boring)。
Ví dụ: Yes, I usually look out of the window when I travel by bus or car. I prefer watching the scenery because it helps me relax and keeps me from feeling bored. For example, I like watching passing fields and buildings because they give me a fresh feeling during long trips.
Do you take photos of the scenery outside the car window?
Điểm: 62.0Gợi ý: 表达较为清楚但有语法和用词问题。建议:1) 回答直接开门见山(Yes/No),随后给出具体原因或频率;2) 注意名词不可数与复数(scenery通常不可数),以及时态一致(I feel -> it makes me feel);3) 简化句子,避免冗长重复,可用linkers如 because, so, later等;4) 提供具体例子提高内容具体性(什么时候、拍什么)。
Ví dụ: Yes, I often take photos of the scenery outside the window. When I see particularly beautiful views like mountains or sunsets, I use my phone to capture them so I can remember the trip later. Looking at those photos always makes me happy.
Do you prefer the mountains or the sea?
Điểm: 48.0Gợi ý: 回答含混且多数句子不通顺,有较多词汇与结构错误。建议:1) 先用一句直接的偏好句(I prefer the mountains/the sea),再用1–2句解释原因;2) 避免直译或错误搭配(pray for the mountains 应为prefer; public servants/infrastructures 使用错误,改为 facilities or hiking trails);3) 提供具体细节(例如童年经历、活动如 hiking, fresh air)以增强说服力;4) 注意语法(过去习惯用used to)并控制在5句内。
Ví dụ: I prefer the mountains because I grew up in a mountainous hometown. When I was a child I often went hiking there, and I enjoy the fresh air and quiet environment. The mountains offer good hiking trails and natural scenery, which help me relax and stay healthy.
× Yes, fluke fluently every time I take the bus or the car.
✓ Yes, I do — I look out frequently every time I take the bus or the car.
句子结构混乱:原句 'fluke fluently' 无意义,且缺主语和正确的动词短语。应补上主语 'I' 和正确表达频率的副词或短语(如 'frequently' 或 'every time'),并使用动词短语 'look out'。建议:用简洁常见的搭配,如 'I often look out of the window when I travel by bus or car.'
× I don't want to watch my phones, but if I don't want to then I'll feel boring.
✓ I don't want to look at my phone, but if I don't, then I'll feel bored.
代词和形容词使用不当:'my phones' 不符合语境,应为单数 'my phone' 或泛指 'my phone';'watch' 用于观看视频等,观察手机一般用 'look at';'feel boring' 错误,'boring' 描述事物,表示人感到无聊应使用 'bored'。建议:区分表示事物的形容词和表示人的感受的过去分词形容词 ('boring' vs 'bored'),并用正确动词短语 'look at my phone'。
× So looking out the window is a good choice for them to appreciate.
✓ So looking out of the window is a good way for me to appreciate the view.
句子结构和代词参照问题:原句中 'for them to appreciate' 与说话人不一致且表达不自然。应明确主语 'me' 并用自然表达 'a good way to appreciate the view'。建议:保持主语一致,用 'way' 或 'choice' 并直接接不定式或动名词短语。
× Appreciate the landscape.
✓ It helps me appreciate the landscape.
不完整句(缺主语和谓语):单独的祈使或动词不构成完整陈述。应补全主语和谓语,使其成为完整句子。建议:使用 'It helps me...' 或 'I can appreciate...' 等完整结构。
× It can make me have relaxation and give me a fresh feeling.
✓ It helps me relax and gives me a refreshing feeling.
时态和搭配问题:'make me have relaxation' 是字面翻译,不地道;应使用动词 'help' + 动词原形或直接 'relax'。主语单数时谓语要一致,故 'gives'。建议:用自然搭配 'helps me relax','gives me a refreshing feeling'。
× Of course, every time when I see some beautiful sceneries, I'll use my phone to record this kind of grand landscape and later, maybe sometime, I'll look them and carry on my memory about that day.
✓ Of course. Whenever I see some beautiful scenery, I'll use my phone to record the landscape, and later I may look at the photos to remember that day.
句子结构、词汇和介词错误:'every time when' 冗余,常用 'whenever' 或 'every time I'; 'sceneries' 应用不可数名词 'scenery' 或 'scenes';'record this kind of grand landscape' 表达不自然,改为 'record the landscape';'look them' 应为 'look at them' 或更明确 'look at the photos';'carry on my memory' 错用搭配,正确应为 'remember' 或 'keep the memory of'。建议:避免冗余连词,使用不可数名词 'scenery',并用正确介词 'look at' 和常见动词 'remember'。
× I feel enjoyment and it's made me happy.
✓ I feel happy, and it makes me happy.
形容词/副词和时态使用不当:'I feel enjoyment' 用法生硬,通常用 'I feel happy' 或 'I enjoy it'。'it's made me happy' 时态不当且结构重复,若表示一般情况应使用现在时 'it makes me happy'。建议:用地道短语 'I enjoy it' 或 'It makes me happy',避免重复表述。
× I pray for the mountains because I have my hometown is mountainous so when I was young I always went to have claimed to the mountains and there are many public servants that I can have such as infrastructures which can keep my body health and I can have fun on the.
✓ I prefer the mountains because my hometown is mountainous. When I was young I always went to the mountains, and there are many public facilities such as infrastructure that help keep me healthy and allow me to have fun there.
该长句存在多种问题,主要为句子结构、动词搭配和名词使用错误:'I pray for the mountains' 用词错误,应为 'I prefer';'I have my hometown is mountainous' 结构错误,应直接 'my hometown is mountainous';'went to have claimed to the mountains' 非自然表达,应为 'went to the mountains';'public servants' 用错词,应为 'public facilities' 或 'public services'; 'that I can have' 冗余且不自然;'infrastructures which can keep my body health' 用法错误,改为 'infrastructure that help keep me healthy';句尾 'and I can have fun on the.' 不完整,改为 'have fun there'。建议:用简单句分开表达原因和经历,选用正确词汇 'prefer', 'facilities', 'infrastructure', 并注意主谓一致(第三人称单数谓语如 'helps' 与复数 'help' 的选择)。