Part 1
Giám khảo
Do you look out the window at the scenery when travelling by bus or car?
Thí sinh
Of course, I like to look out the window at the Santa Ray because I always enjoy the travel and that the travel, umm, gives me back, you know?
Giám khảo
Do you take photos of the scenery outside the car window?
Thí sinh
Absolutely, because I am totally, uh, good grapefruit, you know, I very like to take a photo, especially I see the beautiful scenery or people.
Giám khảo
Do you prefer the mountains or the sea?
Thí sinh
I very like, see, I think she's very beautiful and full of mysterious.
Do you look out the window at the scenery when travelling by bus or car?
Điểm: 58.0Gợi ý: 回答要更直接并且语言更自然,避免重复与无意义的填充词。先用一句主题句回应问题,然后用1–2句具体细节支持,比如说明看风景让你感到放松或能看到什么。注意语法(例如地点名称或名词的正确形式)与连贯性。
Ví dụ: Yes, I usually look out of the window when I travel by bus or car. It helps me relax and pass the time, and I enjoy spotting interesting buildings, parks and street scenes as we go.
Do you take photos of the scenery outside the car window?
Điểm: 46.0Gợi ý: 回答要清晰表达原因并使用恰当的词汇,避免不相关或错误的词(如“grapefruit”)。给出具体例子说明你什么时候拍照以及拍什么,使用连接词使句子更连贯。
Ví dụ: Yes, I often take photos from the car window, especially when I see interesting landscapes or local people. For example, I like to capture colourful markets and dramatic sunsets when we drive past them.
Do you prefer the mountains or the sea?
Điểm: 40.0Gợi ý: 先直接回答偏好(山或海),然后用一两句具体原因支持你的选择,避免含糊或用人称代词指代自然景观(如用“she”)。尽量用更准确的词汇描述感受(例如“peaceful”, “majestic”, “mysterious”),并使用连接词使表达流畅。
Ví dụ: I prefer the mountains because I find them peaceful and majestic. For instance, I enjoy hiking and the quiet atmosphere there, which helps me unwind and enjoy nature.
× Of course, I like to look out the window at the Santa Ray because I always enjoy the travel and that the travel, umm, gives me back, you know?
✓ Of course, I like to look out the window at the scenery because I always enjoy travelling and the trip gives me a sense of refreshment, you know.
原句中多处词类和词汇使用不当:1) “the Santa Ray” 用法不明且不是正确的景物表达,应使用“the scenery”。2) “the travel” 在英语中更常用作“travel”或“the trip”,这里使用“travelling”更自然。3) “gives me back” 表达不规范,意图应为“gives me a sense of refreshment/relaxation”(使我放松/恢复精神)。建议:注意名词与动名词的选择(travel vs travelling vs trip),避免直译;把意思用地道的短语表达,如“gives me a sense of refreshment/relaxation”。
× Absolutely, because I am totally, uh, good grapefruit, you know, I very like to take a photo, especially I see the beautiful scenery or people.
✓ Absolutely, because I totally enjoy taking photos; I really like to take photos, especially when I see beautiful scenery or interesting people.
原句存在多处错误:1) “good grapefruit” 无意义,应删除或替换为表示喜好的词组,如“enjoy”。2) “I very like” 是中文式表达,正确应为“I really like”或“I very much like”。3) 在描述习惯动作时用动名词“taking photos”更合适(动词+ -ing)。4) 在条件从句中应使用“when I see...”。建议:用“enjoy taking photos”或“I really like taking photos”,并使用“when”引导时间状语。
× I very like, see, I think she's very beautiful and full of mysterious.
✓ I really like the sea. I think it's very beautiful and full of mystery.
错误点:1) “I very like” 是语序和用法错误,应为“I really like”或“I like ... very much”。2) “see” 放在句中无意义,应直接说“I really like the sea.” 3) “she's” 若指代海,英语中常用“it”而非“she”。4) “full of mysterious” 形容词/名词使用错误,正确为“full of mystery”。建议:注意程度副词的位置(really before like),物品用it,不要用形容词形式错误的搭配,使用名词“mystery”。