Travelling— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: 回答基本自然，但存在语法和表达不准确（如省略主语“I”在“When take a train”处），有重复内容，且信息不够具体。建议：1) 注意完整句子和主语，例如说“If I take a train or a bus, I usually look out of the window.”2) 减少泛泛而谈的重复（如“You do so and I guess a lot of people do the same thing”），直接给出个人习惯并补充一到两个具体细节。3) 控制长度不超过5句，使用连词使语义连贯，如“because”或“so”。

Ví dụ: Yes, I usually look out of the window when I travel by bus or train because I enjoy watching the changing landscape. For example, on my commute I often notice local markets and old houses, which helps me feel connected to the city.

Gợi ý: 回答表达了意思但有多处语法和逻辑问题（如混用时态和人称“You're on the bus”片段不合适），且有重复、啰嗦。建议：1) 使用一致时态和清晰主语，例如“I often take photos when I travel by train.”2) 用一两个具体例子说明拍照的原因或频率，例如拍日出、古建筑或路边风景。3) 合理使用连接词（so, because, for example）使句子更连贯并控制在5句以内。

Ví dụ: Yes, I often take photos from the window, especially during sunrise or sunset because the light looks beautiful. For instance, last month I photographed an orange sunrise over rice fields and later used the picture as my phone background.

Gợi ý: 回答尝试表达偏好但有用词及表达不当（“how narrow I am”不合逻辑），且缺乏具体比较细节。建议：1) 明确表达偏好或说都喜欢并解释原因，避免使用错误的形容词，改用合适表达如“insignificant”或“humble”来描述在山前的感受。2) 提供具体感受或活动差异（如山上徒步 vs 海边放松）来丰富内容。3) 使用连接词（for example、while）使对比更清晰。

Ví dụ: I like both, but if pressed I would choose the mountains because I enjoy hiking and the quiet atmosphere. While the sea is relaxing and great for swimming, the mountains make me feel humble and peaceful when I reach the summit.

× I do so and I guess a lot of people do the same thing.

✓ I do, and I guess a lot of people do the same thing.

句子需要在并列动词短语之间加逗号以连接两部分，使读起来更自然。建议在“I do”和后面的并列分句之间加逗号，或使用“and then”来更明确地连接。

× When take a train or take a bus, it's very common for people to look out of the window to admire the passing scenery.

✓ When taking a train or a bus, it's very common for people to look out of the window to admire the passing scenery.

中文解释：在表示“当……时”的状语从句中，英语常用动名词（taking）或完整的从句（when people take）。缺少主语和正确形式导致结构不完整。建议用“When taking...”或“When people take...”来表达。

× Yes I do. I often snap a lot of photos when I take a train or a bus.

✓ Yes, I do. I often snap a lot of photos when I take a train or ride a bus.

中文解释：第一句需在Yes后加逗号。第二句中常用搭配是“take a train”但“ride a bus”更自然，也可用“take a bus”。同时“snap a lot of photos”可以保留。建议注意标点和常用搭配。

× For example, sometimes when I am on the train, we're on the bus, I look out of the window and I happened to catch the sunrise or the sunset.

✓ For example, sometimes when I am on the train or on the bus, I look out of the window and I happen to catch the sunrise or the sunset.

中文解释：原句把“we're on the bus”写错且时态不一致。应使用并列短语“on the train or on the bus”。此外“happened”是过去式，但句子描述的是一般或偶发事件，应使用现在时“happen”。建议统一主语和时态。

× I take out my phone to shoot.

✓ I take out my phone to take pictures.

中文解释：短语“to shoot”在拍照语境中不够自然，英语更常用“take pictures”或“take photos”。建议使用常用表达以避免歧义。

× Personally, I prefer both mountains and the sea because they give me totally different senses.

✓ Personally, I prefer both the mountains and the sea because they give me totally different feelings.

中文解释：“sense”在此语境不太自然，表示情感应使用“feelings”或“sensations”。同时在表示具体名词时常加定冠词“the”。建议使用“the mountains and the sea”以及“feelings”。

× For example, mountains often make me feel how small I am, and when I look at the sea I often feel how narrow I am.

✓ For example, mountains often make me feel how small I am, and when I look at the sea I often feel how insignificant I am.

中文解释：原句“feel how narrow I am”不符合英语表达习惯，描述渺小感应使用“insignificant”或“small”。建议用“insignificant”表达“感到渺小”。