Travelling— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Be clearer and more coherent. Start with a direct topic sentence (Yes or No plus brief reason), avoid filler sounds (umm, uh, repetition), and keep to 2–3 supporting sentences. Use linking words (for example, however) and give one specific detail or short example to illustrate your point.

Ví dụ: Yes, I do look out of the window when I travel by car or bus because it helps me relax. For example, if I return to a place I haven't visited for years, I enjoy watching how the landscape or new buildings have changed. This always makes the journey more interesting.

Gợi ý: Reduce hesitation and correct tense errors. Give a clear topic sentence (Yes, sometimes) then one reason and one concise example. Use simple past for specific past actions and present simple for habits. Avoid long, rambling phrases.

Ví dụ: Yes, sometimes I take photos and videos of the scenery when I travel abroad because the landscapes are often very beautiful. For instance, on my last trip to Switzerland I took several photos of the Alps from the train to remember the view.

Gợi ý: Make a clear preference statement then support it with 1–2 specific reasons using linking words (because, whereas, for example). Avoid vague or awkward phrases and reduce fillers. Use precise vocabulary (wildlife, vegetation) and a concise contrast with the sea.

Ví dụ: I prefer the mountains to the sea because they offer more variety in wildlife and vegetation. For example, I enjoy seeing birds, forests and different plants while hiking, whereas the sea often feels less varied to me.

× MMM, yes, I do.

✓ Yes, I do.

The filler 'MMM' is spoken hesitation and not grammatical content; remove it for a written answer. Keep the simple present 'I do' to answer the question.

× I, I, I don't look out the window, uh, when I'm traveling by bus because I need to wear, umm, going or it's just so refreshing.

✓ I don't look out the window when I'm travelling by bus because I need to rest or because it is more refreshing to relax.

This sentence has repetition and unclear phrases ('need to wear, umm, going') and poor sentence structure. Replace filler repetitions and unclear verbs with clear verbs that fit the meaning (e.g. 'rest' or 'relax') and use 'because' to link clauses. Maintain present continuous 'I'm travelling' for the context.

× Uh, when you didn't go that certain area for a long time and you go look outside by the window and you see a, the scenery is.

✓ When you haven't visited a place for a long time and you look out of the window, the scenery is beautiful.

Tense and pronoun inconsistencies exist: use present perfect 'haven't visited' to indicate a past period continuing to present; use consistent tense and subject 'you look' (simple present) and complete the clause with an adjective. Also use 'look out of the window' and remove incomplete ending.

× OK, umm, sometimes when I'm traveling umm like outside my country like beautiful countries and yeah that this scenery looks so amazing and sometimes when I when I wanna mesmerize that moment I took I take pictures and sometimes videos.

✓ Sometimes when I travel to beautiful countries, the scenery looks amazing, and when I want to remember the moment I take pictures or videos.

Problems include article and tense errors ('traveling outside my country like beautiful countries' is awkward), repetition and incorrect past/present mix ('I took I take'). Use simple present 'I travel' for habitual actions and 'I take' for habitual pastimes. Use articles and prepositions correctly: 'travel to beautiful countries' and 'remember the moment'.

× So yes I do.

✓ So yes, I do.

Add a comma for clarity. The sentence is otherwise grammatically correct as a short answer in the present simple.

× I think I'm gonna look, I, I would like to see mountains rather than sea because, uh, when you look at the wonders you were, so you see a lot of, you can see a lot of birds and trees and other ecosystem.

✓ I think I would like to see mountains rather than the sea because when you look there you can see many birds, trees and other parts of the ecosystem.

Avoid colloquial 'gonna' in formal answers; use 'I think I would like' or 'I prefer'. Remove unclear phrase 'you were' and correct article use 'the sea'. Use 'can see' for general truth and plural 'many birds' and 'parts of the ecosystem' for count/noncount clarity.

× You can see the whole ecosystem there.

✓ You can see the whole ecosystem there.

Sentence is acceptable; keep 'the whole ecosystem' if referring to a particular area. No grammatical change needed.

× But when you just look at the sea, you just see nothing but the weather and that's kind of boring.

✓ But when you look at the sea you often see only the water and the weather, which can be a bit boring.

Reduce repetition of 'just'. 'See nothing but the weather' is unclear; replace with 'only the water and the weather'. Use a relative clause 'which can be' for smoothness and avoid informal 'that's kind of' in formal responses.