Travelling— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Be direct and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid odd word choices and filler sounds, and give one or two concise supporting details. Use linking words for coherence and keep answers under five sentences.

Ví dụ: Yes, I usually look out of the window when I travel by bus or car because the scenery inspires my writing. For example, seeing people and buildings often gives me ideas for characters and settings, so I prefer to sit by the window to observe and take notes.

Gợi ý: Be precise and grammatically correct: remove hesitations and incorrect phrases, use clear time references, and connect sentences with linking words. Give a specific example and explain why you take photos in two concise sentences.

Ví dụ: Yes, I often take photos from the car window, especially on long journeys. For instance, when I drive across grasslands I photograph animals like zebras or giraffes because their movements and patterns give me a strong sense of freedom and creative ideas.

Gợi ý: Give a clear preference with reasons: state your choice in the first sentence, then give one or two specific reasons using linking words. Avoid vague phrases, wrong pronouns, and filler words.

Ví dụ: I prefer the sea because its openness inspires my imagination and makes me feel relaxed. For example, watching waves and the changing light helps me think of new story ideas, while the mountains feel more quiet and reflective, which I also enjoy but less for creative energy.

× Yes, of course, watching the window outside can give me inspiration for my creation of the novels.

✓ Yes, of course, looking out of the window can give me inspiration for my novel writing.

The original uses 'watching the window outside' which is an unnatural collocation; 'looking out of the window' is the correct verb + -ing form and prepositional usage. Also 'my creation of the novels' is awkward; use 'my novel writing' or 'creating novels'. Use 'out of' not just 'outside' for this phrase. Suggested improvement: replace 'watching the window outside' with 'looking out of the window' and 'my creation of the novels' with 'my novel writing'.

× I'm the righteous, so I will choose the seats, uh, beside the window, umm, to fulfill my exploration.

✓ I prefer the window seat, so I will choose the seat beside the window to satisfy my curiosity.

'I'm the righteous' is incorrect adjective use and irrelevant here. 'Righteous' means morally correct, not a preference. 'Choose the seats beside the window' has number and article issues; use 'the seat' or 'a seat' and singular. 'Fulfill my exploration' is unnatural; 'satisfy my curiosity' is clearer. Suggested improvement: use natural adjectives and correct article/number with nouns.

× Absolutely. I often take photos of scenery outside a window when an ending a car.

✓ Absolutely. I often take photos of the scenery outside the window when ending a car journey.

'When an ending a car' is ungrammatical: the verb form and article are wrong. Use a noun phrase like 'ending a car journey' or better 'when the car is stopping' depending on meaning. Also add the definite article 'the' before 'scenery' and 'window'. Suggested improvement: use clear noun phrases like 'ending a car journey' or restructure to 'when the car is stopping'.

× In traveling, especially UMM, if I go across the grassland, I would take photos of the wild animals like zebras, horses or giraffes.

✓ When I travel, especially across grasslands, I take photos of wild animals like zebras, horses, or giraffes.

Awkward structure 'In traveling, especially UMM' and incorrect modal 'would' for habitual action. Use simple present 'I take' for habitual actions. 'Go across the grassland' can be pluralized to 'across grasslands'. Remove fillers like 'UMM'. Suggested improvement: use simple present for habits and correct word order: 'When I travel... I take photos'.

× They can give me a sense of freedom.

✓ They give me a sense of freedom.

Use of modal 'can' is acceptable but unnecessary here; simple present is stronger for general truth/habit. No pronoun error beyond style; simplified sentence improves clarity. Suggested improvement: use 'They give me' for habitual feeling.

× Honestly, it's difficult to choose which of them is my preference because the both of them, including the mountains and sea can give me your sense of freedom.

✓ Honestly, it's difficult to choose because both the mountains and the sea give me a sense of freedom.

Problems: 'the both of them' is incorrect—use 'both of them' or 'both the mountains and the sea'. 'Including' is unnecessary. 'Can give me your sense of freedom' mixes pronouns incorrectly—'your' should be 'a' or 'me'. Use simple present 'give' for general truth. Suggested improvement: remove 'including' and fix pronoun to 'a' or 'me'.

× However, maybe sea can give me a more flexible and creation inspiration because uh, I can explore the boundaries between the world.

✓ However, the sea might give me more creative inspiration because I can explore the boundaries between worlds.

Multiple issues: article use ('sea' needs 'the sea'), adjective order and choice ('more flexible and creation inspiration' is incorrect—use 'more creative inspiration'), modal choice ('maybe' + 'can' awkward; use 'might'), and pluralization/idiom ('boundaries between the world' should be 'boundaries between worlds' or 'the world and...'). Remove filler 'uh'. Suggested improvement: use 'the sea might give me more creative inspiration' and clarify the intended boundary phrase.