Travelling— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Be more concise and fluent. Start with a clear topic sentence that directly answers the question, avoid repetition and filler words (e.g. "umm"), correct grammar (use "when I travel by bus or car"), and add one short specific detail with a linking word. Keep it to 2–3 sentences.

Ví dụ: Yes, I do. When I travel by bus or car I often watch the scenery outside because the countryside and city views are very beautiful. For example, I like seeing rivers and fields, which helps me relax during long journeys.

Gợi ý: Give a direct answer, correct word choice and structure, and provide a specific example of what you photograph and why. Remove repeated words and awkward phrasing. Use a linking phrase (e.g. "for instance") to introduce specifics. Keep response within 2–3 sentences.

Ví dụ: Yes, I often take photos of scenery from the car window. For instance, I like to photograph hills, lakes and sunsets because they look dramatic from the road and I want to keep those memories.

Gợi ý: Answer directly, use correct grammar, and give one clear reason with a specific example. Avoid listing too many similar items; instead choose one or two details and explain briefly why you like them. Use a linking word (e.g. "because" or "for example"). Keep it to 2–3 sentences.

Ví dụ: I prefer the sea because I love marine life. For example, I find coral reefs and colorful fish fascinating to see, and visiting the coast makes me feel relaxed and curious about underwater ecosystems.

× Yes, I do look out the window at the scenery when traveling by bus car, because when a traveling through this umm this, these vehicles, I, I affected the scenery outside.

✓ Yes, I look out of the window at the scenery when traveling by bus or car, because when I travel in these vehicles I am affected by the scenery outside.

Errors: incorrect verb forms and tense usage (present continuous vs simple present), word order, missing prepositions, and wrong adjective/pronoun choice. Suggestions: Use simple present 'I look' for habitual actions; use 'traveling by bus or car' or 'travel in these vehicles'; use 'affected by the scenery' not 'affected the scenery'; include necessary prepositions 'out of' and 'in'. Keep sentences concise and avoid filler words.

× Yes, I do take photos of the scenery outside the call window, the hills and lakes and sometimes the sunsets, the sun, sunrise.

✓ Yes, I take photos of the scenery outside the car window: the hills, lakes, and sometimes sunrises and sunsets.

Errors: wrong word 'call' instead of 'car' and inconsistent noun forms; incorrect preposition usage 'outside the car window' is correct after fixing 'call'. Suggestions: Use plural 'sunrises' if referring to multiple events; list items with commas and keep prepositions correct.

× It's it's those beautiful sceneries are are deserved to be captured, deserve to be right down capture down for my memory.

✓ Those beautiful scenes deserve to be captured and recorded for my memory.

Errors: redundant words, incorrect passive/active structure, wrong verb forms 'are deserved', 'to be right down capture down'. Suggestions: Use clear active voice 'deserve to be captured' or 'deserve capturing'; choose correct nouns 'scenes' or 'views' instead of 'sceneries'; avoid repetition.

× I prefer the sea because I like the sea creatures such as clown fish, squids, sharks and more like corals and more creatures undersea and those are so beautiful, so attractive and interesting too, so I love to see more.

✓ I prefer the sea because I like sea creatures such as clownfish, squid, sharks, and corals; the creatures underwater are beautiful, attractive, and interesting, so I love to see them.

Errors: article and noun form issues ('the sea creatures' can be 'sea creatures'; 'clown fish' should be 'clownfish'; 'squids' usually 'squid' as uncountable or plural 'squid' but 'squid' preferred), awkward phrase 'undersea'. Suggestions: Use 'underwater' or 'under the sea'; use consistent noun forms and remove unnecessary 'more'; replace vague 'see more' with 'see them' or 'see more of them'.