Part 1
Giám khảo
Do you look out the window at the scenery when travelling by bus or car?
Thí sinh
Of course, I like to look out the window at the scenery when traveling by bus or car, it doesn't matter. I'm really like, uh, to be comfortable when I was traveling. Umm, so I used to sit on the window side.
Giám khảo
Do you take photos of the scenery outside the car window?
Thí sinh
Actually it depends on the time and place, but usually I take photos of the scenery outside the window because I like the wheel and I like to be that moment in like infinite. So taking photos is.
Giám khảo
Do you prefer the mountains or the sea?
Thí sinh
Of course I prefer the sea because I mean the view is much more passionate and more vibe in there. Like when I look into the sea I feel so calm and chill and actually it helps my mental health to refresh.
Do you look out the window at the scenery when travelling by bus or car?
Điểm: 62.0Gợi ý: Be more concise and tense-consistent. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid filler words (uh, um), correct tense and pronoun use, and add one specific supporting detail using a linking word. Aim for 2–3 sentences total.
Ví dụ: Yes, I usually look out of the window when I travel by bus or car. For example, I prefer to sit by the window because I enjoy watching changing landscapes and it helps me relax during long journeys.
Do you take photos of the scenery outside the car window?
Điểm: 58.0Gợi ý: Clarify your idea and avoid vague phrases. Give a direct answer, then explain with a specific reason and one brief example. Remove unfinished sentences and unclear expressions like "I like the wheel" and "infinite."
Ví dụ: Sometimes I take photos of the scenery outside the window, especially if the view is unusual or beautiful. For instance, I often photograph mountain ranges or sunsets to remember the moment and share it with friends.
Do you prefer the mountains or the sea?
Điểm: 70.0Gợi ý: Use precise language and avoid informal filler phrases. Start with a clear preference, then give two concise, specific reasons connected by a linking word (for example, because/so). Keep it natural but more formal than casual speech.
Ví dụ: I prefer the sea because its wide views and rhythmic waves help me feel calm. For example, sitting by the shore reduces my stress and refreshes my mind after a busy week.
× Of course, I like to look out the window at the scenery when traveling by bus or car, it doesn't matter.
✓ Of course, I like to look out the window at the scenery when traveling by bus or car; it doesn't matter.
This sentence contains a run-on comma splice linking two independent clauses with a comma. Use a semicolon, conjunction, or split into two sentences. The verb tenses (present simple) are correct for habitual actions.
× I'm really like, uh, to be comfortable when I was traveling.
✓ I really like to be comfortable when I travel.
The original mixes 'I'm really like' (incorrect) and shifts to past tense 'was traveling' though context is habitual. Replace with present simple 'I really like' and 'when I travel'. Also remove filler 'uh' in formal answer.
× Umm, so I used to sit on the window side.
✓ So I usually sit on the window side.
'Used to' implies a past habit no longer true; the question asks about usual behavior, so use present habitual 'usually sit'. This fixes tense mismatch.
× Actually it depends on the time and place, but usually I take photos of the scenery outside the window because I like the wheel and I like to be that moment in like infinite.
✓ Actually, it depends on the time and place, but usually I take photos of the scenery outside the window because I like the view and I like to keep that moment forever.
Several issues: 'the wheel' is incorrect; likely 'view' is intended. 'Like to be that moment in like infinite' is ungrammatical and mixes ideas — replace with 'keep that moment forever'. Present tense 'depends' and 'take' are correct. Added comma after 'Actually'.
× So taking photos is.
✓ So I take photos to capture it.
Fragment 'So taking photos is.' has no clear predicate or object. Replace with a complete sentence explaining purpose: 'I take photos to capture it.' This corrects sentence structure.
× Of course I prefer the sea because I mean the view is much more passionate and more vibe in there.
✓ Of course I prefer the sea because the view is much more inspiring and has a better vibe.
'Passionate' and 'more vibe' are incorrect collocations. Use 'inspiring' or 'more beautiful' for views and 'better vibe' for atmosphere. Removed filler 'I mean' for clarity.
× Like when I look into the sea I feel so calm and chill and actually it helps my mental health to refresh.
✓ When I look at the sea, I feel calm and relaxed, and it actually helps refresh my mental health.
Use 'look at the sea' rather than 'look into the sea'. 'Chill' is informal; 'relaxed' is more appropriate. 'Helps my mental health to refresh' is unidiomatic — use 'helps refresh my mental health' or 'helps me feel refreshed'. Adjusted comma placement for clarity.