Travelling— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Be more natural and grammatically correct: start with a clear topic sentence, correct verb forms and word choice, reduce redundancy, and add one specific supporting detail using a linking word. Keep it under five sentences.

Ví dụ: Yes, I usually look out of the window when I travel because using my phone makes me feel nauseous. For example, on long bus trips I focus on passing fields and towns rather than scrolling. Also, I often notice other passengers reading or using phones, but I prefer watching the scenery to relax.

Gợi ý: Make the response more concise and correct collocations (e.g., 'I love taking nature photos', 'seek the best views'), use linking words to explain frequency and reason, and give one specific example or detail to support your statement.

Ví dụ: Yes, I love taking nature photos, so I often look for good views from the car window. For instance, last weekend I captured a bright orange sunset over the fields; thus, most photos in my gallery are landscapes. Because I enjoy photography, I sometimes snap pictures without even planning to.

Gợi ý: Begin with a direct topic sentence stating your preference, correct phrasing and sentence structure, use linking words to contrast reasons, and provide one clear specific example or short explanation. Keep it concise and avoid awkward phrasing like 'having fun with myself.'

Ví dụ: I prefer the sea because I enjoy relaxing on the beach and watching sunsets, which I find very calming. In contrast, mountains are better for long hikes, and since I dislike walking long distances, the coast suits me better. For example, a sunset walk along the shore is my ideal way to unwind.

× When I travel to somewhere, I'm used to watch through the window instead of looking at my phone because I feel uncomfortable and nauseous if I do extra things.

✓ When I travel somewhere, I'm used to watching through the window instead of looking at my phone because I feel uncomfortable and nauseous if I do extra things.

The phrase 'be used to' should be followed by a noun or verb in -ing form. 'Watch' is incorrect; it must be 'watching'. Also 'to somewhere' is unnatural; use 'travel somewhere'. Suggestion: use 'used to watching' and 'travel somewhere' for natural phrasing.

× When I travel to somewhere, I'm used to watch through the window instead of looking at my phone because I feel uncomfortable and nauseous if I do extra things.

✓ When I travel somewhere, I'm used to watching through the window instead of looking at my phone because I feel uncomfortable and nauseous if I do extra things.

The preposition 'to' is not needed with 'travel' when followed by an indefinite place; say 'travel somewhere'. Also 'through the window' is acceptable but 'out the window' is more natural. Suggestion: 'When I travel somewhere, I'm used to watching out the window...'.

× However, I look at other people.

✓ However, I look at other people instead.

The original sentence is grammatically correct but feels incomplete or abrupt in context. Adding 'instead' clarifies contrast with previous clause. Suggestion: add words to clarify the intended meaning.

× They enjoy reading books or scrolling their phone, but I don't feel the same.

✓ They enjoy reading books or scrolling their phones, but I don't feel the same.

With plural subject 'they', the possessed noun should be plural: 'their phones' (or 'their phone' is acceptable if referring each to own phone, but plural is more natural). Suggestion: use 'their phones' for clarity.

× Even so, I prefer enjoying nature more.

✓ Even so, I prefer enjoying nature.

'Prefer' already indicates comparison; adding 'more' is redundant without a comparison object. Remove 'more' or provide comparison (e.g., 'prefer enjoying nature more than looking at my phone'). Suggestion: remove 'more' or complete the comparison.

× As I'm a lover of taking nature pictures, I always seek for the best scenery and if you go to my gallery, most of them are related to nature.

✓ As I love taking nature pictures, I always seek the best scenery, and if you go to my gallery, most of the photos are of nature.

'Seek' is not followed by 'for' here; use 'seek the best scenery' or 'look for the best scenery'. 'A lover of taking' is awkward; 'I love taking' is natural. 'Most of them are related to nature' is vague for photos; 'most of the photos are of nature' is clearer. Suggestion: use 'love taking', 'seek' (without 'for') or 'look for', and specify 'photos'.

× Therefore, when I'm in car, I look for many different views or I take the best moment even without realizing it.

✓ Therefore, when I'm in the car, I look for many different views or I capture the best moments without even realizing it.

Use the definite article 'the' with 'car' in this context: 'in the car'. 'Look for many different views' is okay but 'capture the best moments' is more natural than 'take the best moment'. Also 'without even realizing it' reads better than 'even without realizing it'. Suggestion: use 'in the car' and 'capture the best moments'.

× It's a bit difficult to choose, however I would say the sea because although watching the scenery while having fun with myself or someone and the sea with the sunset looks amazing.

✓ It's a bit difficult to choose; however, I would say the sea because watching the scenery, whether alone or with someone, and the sea at sunset look amazing.

The original sentence has run-on structure and awkward phrasing. 'Although' is incorrectly used and the clause order is confusing. Rephrase into clearer clauses: use '; however,' to join sentences and 'whether alone or with someone' to express choice. Also use 'the sea at sunset' and ensure subject-verb agreement: 'scenery... and the sea... look amazing' (plural subject -> 'look'). Suggestion: separate ideas and use clearer comparative phrases.

× It's a bit difficult to choose, however I would say the sea because although watching the scenery while having fun with myself or someone and the sea with the sunset looks amazing.

✓ It's a bit difficult to choose; however, I would say the sea because watching the scenery, whether I'm alone or with someone, and the sea at sunset look amazing.

'Having fun with myself or someone' is unnatural; use 'whether I'm alone or with someone'. This clarifies the subject and improves pronoun use. Suggestion: replace informal phrasing with 'whether I'm alone or with someone'.

× In addition, I don't like walking too long and I think mountains are better for hiking.

✓ In addition, I don't like walking for too long, and I think the mountains are better for hiking.

Add 'for' in 'walking for too long' to indicate duration. Also use the definite article 'the' with 'mountains' when speaking generally about that terrain: 'the mountains are better for hiking'. Suggestion: use 'walking for too long' and 'the mountains'. They are acceptable alternatives: 'I don't like walking long distances'.