Part 1
Giám khảo
Do you look out the window at the scenery when travelling by bus or car?
Thí sinh
Yes, I do. I often look out the window when traveling by bars or car because I find it relaxing and a good way to pass the time. For example, I enjoy watching changing landscapes or open skies. Which gives me ideas for photograph and help.
Giám khảo
Do you take photos of the scenery outside the car window?
Thí sinh
Yes, I do. I often take photos of the screen outside the car window. Especially when traveling through the beautiful landscapes like mountains were coastline, for instance, I. Take a picture.
Giám khảo
Do you prefer the mountains or the sea?
Thí sinh
To be honest, I prefer the sea. I choose this city to finish my academic job. The most major reason is there is a beautiful sea and its coastline. I usually spend my evening with.
Do you look out the window at the scenery when travelling by bus or car?
Điểm: 60.0Gợi ý: 内容方面:回答直接且相关,但有语法和拼写错误(bars→buses, photograph→photographs),句子断裂不完整。建议在首句直接回答后用1–2个完整的支持句(使用连接词)补充具体细节,并注意语法与单词拼写。表达应控制在不超过5句内且连贯。发音/流畅性方面应避免句子中断,练习将短句连接为完整句。
Ví dụ: Yes, I do. I often look out of the window when I travel by bus or car because I find it relaxing and it helps me pass the time. For example, I enjoy watching the changing landscapes and open skies, which often give me ideas for photographs.
Do you take photos of the scenery outside the car window?
Điểm: 50.0Gợi ý: 内容方面:回答简短且重复,有明显语法、拼写和句子结构错误(screen→scenery, were→or, 断句不当)。建议使用一个主题句肯定回答,再用一到两个连贯的支持句说明何时拍照、拍什么、拍照的目的或频率。注意使用连接词如“especially”应与主句连贯连接并保持句子完整。
Ví dụ: Yes, I do. I often take photos of the scenery outside the car window, especially when I travel through beautiful places like mountains or coastlines. I usually take pictures to remember the view and sometimes to share them on social media.
Do you prefer the mountains or the sea?
Điểm: 45.0Gợi ý: 内容方面:回答有明确立场但缺乏连贯支持,句子不完整且有语法问题(‘choose this city to finish my academic job’表达不自然,最后一句未完成)。建议直接给出偏好后,说明1–2个具体理由并举例,使用连接词(because, so, therefore),确保每句完整并在5句以内。修正语法使表达自然。
Ví dụ: To be honest, I prefer the sea because I enjoy the relaxed atmosphere and the beautiful coastline. I chose this city to finish my academic work partly for its seaside environment, and I often spend my evenings walking along the shore to relax.
× I often look out the window when traveling by bars or car because I find it relaxing and a good way to pass the time.
✓ I often look out the window when traveling by bus or car because I find it relaxing and a good way to pass the time.
原句中將“bus”(公共汽车)写成“bars”,属于单复数/单词错误。应使用单数名词“bus”或复数“buses”,但在此处与“car”并列最好用单数“bus”。建议注意常用交通工具单词的拼写和形式。
× For example, I enjoy watching changing landscapes or open skies. Which gives me ideas for photograph and help.
✓ For example, I enjoy watching changing landscapes or open skies, which gives me ideas for photographs and helps me.
原句将关系从句断开(独立使用Which),导致句子结构不完整,应把其并入前一主句;此外“photograph”应为复数或名词形式“photographs”,“help”应为第三人称单数动词“helps me”或改为名词“help”。建议将关系代词引导的从句和主句连成复合句,并注意动词与主语的一致。
× I often take photos of the screen outside the car window.
✓ I often take photos of the scenery outside the car window.
原句用“screen”(屏幕)与语境不符,应为“scenery”(风景)。这是词汇选择错误,属于形容词/副词或用词不当问题。建议核对语境相关词汇以避免意思错误。
× Especially when traveling through the beautiful landscapes like mountains were coastline, for instance, I. Take a picture.
✓ Especially when traveling through beautiful landscapes like mountains or the coastline, for instance, I take a picture.
原句语序混乱、标点错误并有拼写错误(were→or),且“I. Take a picture.”中断句不当。应将片段连成完整句子,并使用正确连词“or”和定冠词“the”用于特定地貌“the coastline”。建议注意连接词、标点和句子连贯性。
× I choose this city to finish my academic job.
✓ I chose this city to finish my academic work.
原句时态与语境不符且用词不当。“choose”是现在时但语境更可能为过去选择(chose);此外“academic job”用法不自然,通常说“academic work”或“academic studies”。按上下文若是过去选择,改为过去时;若是一般事实可保持现在时并改词为“academic work”。建议根据说话时间选择正确时态并使用常见搭配。
× The most major reason is there is a beautiful sea and its coastline.
✓ The main reason is that there is a beautiful sea and coastline.
原句冗余使用“most major”不自然,应使用“main”或“major”;另外在“There is”引导的名词性从句中常加连词“that”使结构更清晰。建议避免冗词并在名词性从句前使用“that”。
× I usually spend my evening with.
✓ I usually spend my evenings there.
原句不完整,缺少宾语或补足语。“spend my evening with”后应接人或事物,或改为“spend my evenings there”表示在海边度过晚上。建议确保动词短语有完整宾语并与时间表达一致(复数 evenings 更常用)。