Travelling— Part 1 Báo cáo
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Part 1
Giám khảo
Do you look out the window at the scenery when travelling by bus or car?
Thí sinh
Yes I do 'cause I like watching scenery. Also I like taking picture of scenery. Beautiful sceneries make make me relax.
Giám khảo
Do you take photos of the scenery outside the car window?
Thí sinh
Of course I'm collecting photos of scenery because I can look back at photos whenever I want.
Giám khảo
Do you prefer the mountains or the sea?
Thí sinh
I prefer mountains because I can't swimming and I like the scenery of mountains, the beautiful flowers, trees or skies they they make me more relaxed.
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Part 1
Do you look out the window at the scenery when travelling by bus or car?
Điểm: 72.0Gợi ý: 回答は直接的で内容がわかりやすいですが、文法（省略形の使い方や複数形）、語の繰り返し、冗長さを改善する必要があります。具体的には短い文をつなぐ際に接続詞を適切に使い、不要な繰り返し（例：scenery/sceneries を繰り返す）を避け、発音しやすい自然な表現（because → because I, taking pictures の複数形、make me relaxed → make me feel relaxed など）に直しましょう。また文の数は3〜4文にまとめ、情報を明確に整理してください。
Ví dụ: Yes, I do. I enjoy watching the view outside, and I often take pictures of interesting scenes because they help me remember the trip. For example, I usually photograph landscapes and city streets, then look back at them later to relax.
Do you take photos of the scenery outside the car window?
Điểm: 78.0Gợi ý: 答えは明確で理由も述べていますが、表現をより自然で流暢にする余地があります。現在進行形の使い方（I'm collecting）は状況によって適切ですが、習慣を表す場合は現在形（I collect / I often take）を使う方が自然です。さらに具体例（どんな場面やどんな被写体を撮るか）を一つ加えると説得力が増します。接続詞を使って理由を滑らかにつなぎ、語彙を少し広げましょう。
Ví dụ: Yes, I often take photos of the view from the car because I like to keep memories of trips. For instance, I usually photograph interesting buildings or colorful landscapes and look at them later to remind myself of the experience.
Do you prefer the mountains or the sea?
Điểm: 65.0Gợi ý: 回答は理由を述べていますが、文法ミス（I can't swimming → I can't swim）、語の重複（they they）、句の区切り不足が目立ちます。より自然な構造に直し、理由を具体化しましょう。例えば"I prefer the mountains because I find hiking relaxing and I enjoy the scenery such as flowers and forests"のように、活動（hiking）や具体的な景色を挙げると良いです。また接続詞（because, so, which）や句読点を使い、文を2〜3文に分けて明瞭にしてください。
Ví dụ: I prefer the mountains because I enjoy hiking and the peaceful atmosphere. The flowers, trees and wide skies there help me relax more than the busy seaside.
Ngữ pháp
× Yes I do 'cause I like watching scenery.
✓ Yes, I do because I like watching the scenery.
Use of '-ing' is fine but add article 'the' before 'scenery' for specificity and replace informal ' 'cause' with 'because'. Also add a comma after 'Yes' for natural pacing.
× Also I like taking picture of scenery.
✓ Also, I like taking pictures of the scenery.
Use plural 'pictures' instead of singular 'picture' when talking about taking multiple photos; add the definite article 'the' before 'scenery'; include a comma after 'Also'.
× Beautiful sceneries make make me relax.
✓ Beautiful scenery makes me relax.
Use uncountable noun 'scenery' rather than plural 'sceneries'; remove repeated 'make'; use singular verb 'makes' to agree with singular uncountable subject.
× Of course I'm collecting photos of scenery because I can look back at photos whenever I want.
✓ Of course I collect photos of the scenery because I can look back at them whenever I want.
Use simple present 'collect' to state a habitual action instead of present continuous 'I'm collecting'; add 'the' before 'scenery'; replace 'photos' with pronoun 'them' to avoid repetition.
× I prefer mountains because I can't swimming and I like the scenery of mountains, the beautiful flowers, trees or skies they they make me more relaxed.
✓ I prefer the mountains because I can't swim and I like the mountain scenery: the beautiful flowers, trees, and skies; they make me feel more relaxed.
Use 'the' with 'mountains' for a general preference; 'can't swim' requires base verb 'swim' not 'swimming'; use 'mountain scenery' or 'the scenery of mountains'; replace 'or' with 'and' in the list; fix repeated 'they'; add punctuation and 'feel' to make 'more relaxed' grammatically natural.
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