Travelling— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Your answer is natural and relevant, with a clear topic sentence and supporting details. To improve, remove minor redundancy and tighten phrasing, and add a linking phrase to connect ideas smoothly. Also avoid a slightly awkward fragment (“pleasing to my eyes”) by using more idiomatic expressions.

Ví dụ: Yes, I always look out the window when I travel by bus or car because watching the scenery relaxes me and makes the journey feel shorter. For instance, I enjoy seeing changing landscapes and local architecture, and these views often give me ideas for places I’d like to visit later.

Gợi ý: Good content and specific examples, but there are small grammatical errors and an awkward repetition (“the trip I trip”). Improve cohesion by using linking words and correcting mistakes. Keep sentences concise and avoid starting with “And.”

Ví dụ: Yes, I often photograph scenery outside the window, especially on mountain or coastal drives, because I like capturing fleeting moments such as sunlight on a field or dramatic cloud formations. Later, I use these photos to remember the trip or to share them with friends.

Gợi ý: Very good answer: clear preference, reasons, and specific examples. To reach an even higher score, add a short linking phrase for flow and vary vocabulary slightly (e.g., use ‘tranquil’ or ‘serenity’). Keep answers within four sentences maximum which you already do.

Ví dụ: I prefer the mountains because I enjoy the fresh air, tranquil atmosphere and scenic hiking trails. For example, weekend treks help me relax and get exercise away from city noise. Moreover, unlike crowded beaches, mountain areas offer solitude and chances to observe wildlife, which I find especially refreshing.

× Yes, I definitely do look out the window and traveling by bus or car because watching the passing scenery helps me to relax and makes the journey feel shorter.

✓ Yes, I definitely do look out the window when traveling by bus or car because watching the passing scenery helps me to relax and makes the journey feel shorter.

The original sentence mixes parallel structures incorrectly: 'do look out the window and traveling' joins a full verb phrase ('do look') with a gerund phrase ('traveling') without a conjunction or correct form. Use 'when traveling' to link the action of looking out the window to the circumstance of traveling, keeping grammatical parallelism and clarity.

× It's really pleasing to my eyes.

✓ It really pleases my eyes.

'Pleasing' is a present participle used as an adjective, which is not the clearest choice here. The natural expression is to use the verb 'pleases' (simple present) with subject 'It' to describe a general truth. This fixes subject-verb usage and makes the sentence more idiomatic.

× For example, I enjoy observing changing landscapes and local architecture, which also gives me ideas for places to visit later.

✓ For example, I enjoy observing changing landscapes and local architecture, which also give me ideas for places to visit later.

The relative clause 'which also gives' refers to the plural noun phrase 'changing landscapes and local architecture', so the verb should be plural 'give' to agree with the plural antecedent (subject-verb agreement).

× I enjoy capturing fleeting moments, sunlight hitting a field or an interesting cloud formation as souvenirs.

✓ I enjoy capturing fleeting moments, such as sunlight hitting a field or an interesting cloud formation, as souvenirs.

The original sentence lists items without a clear connector; adding 'such as' clarifies that the examples (sunlight hitting a field, an interesting cloud formation) illustrate 'fleeting moments'. This improves sentence structure and parallelism.

× And later I use them to remember the trip I trip or share.

✓ Later I use them to remember the trip or to share with others.

The original contains a repeated word 'trip I trip' and an unclear structure. Removing the repetition and making the parallel infinitive phrases 'to remember the trip' and 'to share with others' clarifies the meaning and corrects the sentence structure.

× Also, unlike the crowded beaches, mountain areas offer solitude and opportunities to see wildlife, which I find more refreshing.

✓ Also, unlike crowded beaches, mountain areas offer solitude and opportunities to see wildlife, which I find more refreshing.

The definite article 'the' before 'crowded beaches' is unnecessary when speaking generically about beaches. Removing 'the' makes the sentence more natural when expressing a general comparison.