Travelling— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: 回答は意図が伝わりますが、文法や語彙、表現の自然さを改善する必要があります。具体的には：1) 冗長な語句（"I enjoy the I enjoy"など）を避ける、2) 意味が曖昧な表現（"how to simulate, how to scenario changes, lower the load"）を明確にする、3) 接続詞を使って文の流れを滑らかにする、4) 単語の選択（"addisonally"→"occasionally"、"so interesting building"→"very interesting building"）を正すこと。これらを直すと、自然で効果的な答えになります。具体的練習として、トピック文→理由→具体例の順で最大5つの文に収める練習をしてください。

Ví dụ: Yes, I often look out of the window when travelling by bus or car because I enjoy watching how the landscape changes. For example, I like to notice different types of buildings and street scenes, and when I see something interesting I sometimes research it later. Looking outside helps me relax and makes the journey more enjoyable.

Gợi ý: 内容ははっきりしていて良いですが、文法と語彙の精度を上げるとさらに良くなります。改善点：1) 現在形と過去形の一致（"car is moved"→"the car is moving/sometimes moves"）、2) 不自然な形容詞（"bluey"→"blurry"）、3) 接続詞と句読点で文を整理する、4) 単語の選択（"found so interesting in buildings"→"find an interesting building"）。また理由を補足するために短い具体例を加えると説得力が増します。

Ví dụ: I usually don't take photos from a moving car because the pictures often turn out blurry. However, if the car stops or I spot a particularly interesting building, I will take a photo to remember the place.

Gợi ý: 意見は明確ですが、表現の自然さと文法を改善する必要があります。改善点：1) 単数・複数の一致（"mountain shows"→"mountains show"）、2) 自然な表現（"various types of face"は不自然なので"vary a lot"や"change dramatically"にする）、3) 具体例は良いので接続詞でつなぐ（"For example,"→そのまま使用）、4) 最後の文を自然にまとめる（"attract us"→"are always attractive"など）。季節ごとの描写をもう少し具体的な語彙（"frost"、"snow"）に置き換えると効果的です。

Ví dụ: I prefer the mountains because they change a lot throughout the year. For example, in autumn the trees turn yellow and orange, while in winter many slopes are covered with snow and frost. Because of these seasonal differences, I always find the mountains fascinating.

× Yes, I look out the window addisonally one night traveling by bus or car because I enjoy the I enjoy how to simulate, how to scenario changes, lower the load, and also sometimes I can find a so interesting building, so sometimes I research about it to learn more.

✓ Yes, I look out of the window, especially at night when I travel by bus or car, because I enjoy imagining how the scenes change and how the atmosphere becomes calmer, and sometimes I find an interesting building, so I research it to learn more.

The original sentence contains several issues: 'addisonally' is a misspelling and should be 'especially'; 'one night' is incorrect in this context and 'at night' is correct; 'look out the window' needs the preposition 'of' (look out of the window); repetition 'I enjoy the I enjoy' is redundant; 'how to simulate, how to scenario changes' is ungrammatical and should be 'imagining how the scenes change'; 'lower the load' is unclear—replaced with 'how the atmosphere becomes calmer' to match intended meaning; 'a so interesting building' uses incorrect word order and extra 'so' and should be 'an interesting building'; 'research about it' should be 'research it' or 'research it to learn more'. Suggestions: fix spelling, use correct prepositions, remove redundancy, rephrase unclear expressions into natural verbs (imagine, change), and use correct article 'an' before vowel sound words.

× Usually I do not take photos of the scenery outside the car window because car is moved so fast so my picture becomes so bluey.

✓ Usually I do not take photos of the scenery outside the car window because the car moves so fast that my pictures turn out blurry.

Errors: missing definite article 'the' before 'car'; 'is moved so fast' is passive and awkward—use active 'the car moves so fast'; 'my picture becomes so bluey' uses incorrect adjective 'bluey' and awkward phrasing—use 'pictures turn out blurry'. Suggestions: add appropriate articles, use simple present active for general facts, and use correct adjectives (blurry) and plural 'pictures' to match 'photos'.

× But sometimes when car is stopping or I found so interesting in buildings, I try to take photos to remember my trip.

✓ But sometimes when the car stops or when I find a building interesting, I try to take photos to remember my trip.

Errors: missing article 'the' before 'car'; 'car is stopping' should be simple present 'the car stops' for habitual or conditional situations; 'I found so interesting in buildings' is ungrammatical—use 'I find a building interesting' (present) to match habitual action; 'so' is unnecessary. Suggestions: use correct articles, prefer simple present for habitual events, use correct verb forms ('stop', 'find'), and place adjectives properly ('find ... interesting').

× I prefer the mountains because mountain shows that various types of face.

✓ I prefer the mountains because the mountains show different faces.

Errors: inconsistent article use—'the mountains' then 'mountain' singular; 'shows that various types of face' is ungrammatical and awkward. Use plural 'the mountains show' to agree with subject and 'different faces' as a natural expression. Suggestions: keep noun number consistent, ensure subject-verb agreement, and use natural collocations ('different faces').

× For example in autumn the old trees become that yellow or orange, but in winter we can see the tree that is covered by ice.

✓ For example, in autumn the old trees turn yellow or orange, but in winter we can see trees covered in ice.

Errors: 'become that yellow' is incorrect—use 'turn yellow'; unnecessary 'that'; inconsistent singular/plural 'the tree that is covered' should be 'trees covered in ice' to match general statement; 'covered by ice' is acceptable but 'covered in ice' is more natural. Suggestions: use 'turn' for color changes, remove unnecessary words, and keep number consistent for general observations.

× So in every season the mountain attract us.

✓ So in every season the mountains attract us.

Errors: singular 'mountain' conflicts with plural idea and verb; subject-verb agreement—'the mountain attract' should be 'the mountains attract' or 'the mountain attracts'. Suggestions: ensure subject and verb agree in number and use plural if speaking generally about mountains.