Travelling— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Be more concise and correct word choice; start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition, correct plural/singular and article use, and add one specific detail using a linking word. Keep to fewer than five sentences.

Ví dụ: Yes, I usually look out the window when I travel by bus or car. For example, I enjoy watching green fields and old houses because they give me a sense of the local life.

Gợi ý: Give a clear, direct response and correct vocabulary; avoid unclear words (e.g. ‘Sindri’ unless it is intentional), reduce filler phrases, and use linking words to explain why you take photos. Provide one specific example of what you photograph.

Ví dụ: Yes, I often take photos from the car window because I want to remember bright scenes. For instance, I always photograph colorful roadside flowers and dramatic fields to keep on my phone.

Gợi ý: Start with a direct preference sentence, then give two specific reasons using linking words. Fix grammar (avoid repetition, use nouns correctly) and keep to two or three supporting sentences.

Ví dụ: I prefer the mountains. Firstly, I enjoy the green hills and peaceful scenery, and secondly, I like the snowy views in cold weather because they feel refreshing and calm.

× I mostly look out the window whenever I go by bus or car because I need to explore the different different kinds of sceneries like grass and having some flowers and having a old houses.

✓ I mostly look out the window whenever I go by bus or car because I like to explore different kinds of scenery, such as grass, flowers, and old houses.

'Scenery' is an uncountable noun, so use singular form; remove duplicate 'different'. Use parallel noun phrases ('grass, flowers, and old houses') rather than gerunds like 'having'. Change 'a old houses' to 'old houses' (plural) and remove the incorrect article.

× I mostly look out the window whenever I go by bus or car because I need to explore the different different kinds of sceneries like grass and having some flowers and having a old houses.

✓ I mostly look out the window whenever I go by bus or car because I like exploring different kinds of scenery, such as grass, flowers, and old houses.

If using verb+ing to express preference, use 'like exploring' rather than 'need to explore' for naturalness; avoid mixing 'having' with nouns. Use gerund form consistently and correct noun forms.

× Yes, I take photos of the Sindri because I have to take the pictures like of the colorful flowers and the sceneries and the landscapes by seeing it and it is my memorable things which I can store in my phone.

✓ Yes, I take photos of the scenery because I like to photograph colorful flowers, landscapes, and other views that I can keep on my phone as memories.

Use 'scenery' (uncountable) instead of 'Sindri' and 'sceneries'. 'Pictures' is fine but simplify to 'photograph'. 'Memorable things' is awkward; use 'memories'. Ensure noun forms are correct and natural.

× Yes, I take photos of the Sindri because I have to take the pictures like of the colorful flowers and the sceneries and the landscapes by seeing it and it is my memorable things which I can store in my phone.

✓ Yes, I take photos of the scenery because I like to photograph colorful flowers and landscapes to keep as memories on my phone.

Original sentence is wordy and ungrammatical. Reorder and simplify: state the action ('I take photos'), the objects ('colorful flowers and landscapes'), and the purpose ('to keep as memories on my phone'). Remove unnecessary fillers like 'by seeing it' and 'like of'.

× Well, I prefer the mountains because in the mountains there are lots of things which I can usually watch like the I mostly like the hills and mountains, their greenery of the mountains.

✓ Well, I prefer the mountains because there is a lot to see there, such as hills and the greenery of the mountains.

Use 'there is' for uncountable/general statements and simplify redundancy ('I mostly like the hills and mountains' repeated). Use 'a lot to see' rather than 'lots of things which I can usually watch'. 'Watch' is incorrect; use 'see' or 'view'.

× Like whenever we can go in the cold, there are lots of snow over the mountains.

✓ When we go there in the cold, there is a lot of snow on the mountains.

Use 'on the mountains' rather than 'over the mountains'. Use 'there is a lot of snow' (uncountable) instead of 'lots of snow' with 'there are'. Also change 'whenever we can go in the cold' to 'when we go there in the cold' for clarity.