Travelling— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Be more concise and fluent. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and filler sounds, and correct grammar (e.g., singular/plural and verb forms).

Ví dụ: Yes — I often look out of the window when I travel by car because I enjoy the changing scenery. For example, I like seeing new birds and different landscapes, which relaxes me and refreshes my mind during long trips.

Gợi ý: Improve grammatical accuracy and reduce hesitation. Give a direct topic sentence, then one specific reason and an example. Use correct verb tenses and smoother phrasing.

Ví dụ: Yes, I often take photos of scenery while travelling. For example, I photograph mountains, birds and unusual landscapes to keep memories of the trip, and later looking at these photos helps me remember how I felt.

Gợi ý: Give a clear preference sentence and support it with specific reasons and one concrete example. Eliminate repetition and filler words, and vary vocabulary (e.g., 'prefer', 'enjoy', 'scenery', 'summit').

Ví dụ: I prefer the mountains to the sea because I enjoy hiking and panoramic views. For instance, from a mountain summit I can see the city and surrounding valleys, which I find more peaceful and interesting than a crowded beach.

× Yes, I usually like to look out of the window when I am travelling in my car because I want to enjoy the view, the nature because when we are travelling in the bus or car, that's the best view that we can enjoy while traveling and it help us to feel relaxed.

✓ Yes, I usually like to look out of the window when I am travelling in my car because I want to enjoy the view and nature. When we are travelling by bus or car, that is the best time to enjoy the scenery, and it helps us to feel relaxed.

Error type relates to inconsistent verb forms and gerund/participle usage (present participle). Problems: 'travelling' used correctly but 'traveling' mixed spelling; repetition and sentence fragments cause awkward structure; 'it help' uses incorrect verb form (should be 'helps'). Suggestion: simplify clauses, use parallel structure ('enjoy the view and nature'), use consistent verb agreement ('it helps'), and keep consistent spelling (either travelling or traveling). Use 'by bus or car' rather than 'in the bus or car'.

× Uh, it fresh our mind and we like we can see a new animals, new birds.

✓ It refreshes our minds, and we can see new animals and new birds.

Errors: incorrect verb form 'fresh' should be present simple 'refreshes' to agree with subject; 'mind' should be plural 'minds' when referring to people collectively; unnecessary filler 'we like we'; article usage and plural errors 'a new animals' incorrect. Suggestion: use correct third-person singular verb 'refreshes', plural 'minds', remove fillers, and make nouns plural without 'a' when plural.

× Yes, yes, I usually like to take a picture whenever I is I am I am doing traveling and I used to take the picture of the new views, the mountains, the birds and of the nature for to keep them in my memories.

✓ Yes, I usually like to take pictures whenever I am travelling, and I take pictures of new views, mountains, birds and nature to keep them in my memory.

Errors: subject-verb agreement and extra filler 'I is I am I am'; 'used to' incorrectly implies past habit; inconsistent noun number ('a picture' vs multiple). Suggestion: remove fillers, use present continuous 'am travelling' and simple present 'take pictures' for habitual action, use 'to keep them in my memory' (memory singular) or 'keep them in my memories' depending on preference.

× So whenever I whenever I want to remember the trip, so I have that memories that can help me to feel good.

✓ So whenever I want to remember the trip, I have those memories that can help me feel good.

Errors: repetition 'whenever I whenever I', unnecessary 'so'; article and number agreement 'that memories' should be 'those memories'; unnecessary 'to' before 'feel good'. Suggestion: remove repetition and filler words, use demonstrative 'those' for plural, and correct verb placement 'help me feel good'.

× I will always prefer mountains instead of the sea because, uh, I usually like to visit mountains because I like the like, because I like the hills, the nature at the mountains.

✓ I always prefer the mountains to the sea because I like visiting mountains, their hills and nature.

Errors: 'I will always prefer' implies future rather than general preference; use simple present 'I always prefer' for habitual preference. Redundancy 'because I like the like, because I like' and awkward phrase 'nature at the mountains'. Suggestion: use simple present for general preferences, remove repetitions, and use concise phrasing 'visiting mountains, their hills and nature'.

× I usually like to enjoy the view of the city or the desert from the peak of the mountains.

✓ I usually enjoy the view of the city or the desert from the mountain peaks.

Errors: unnecessary 'to' after 'like' (style), 'the peak of the mountains' is awkward; use plural 'peaks' or 'a mountain peak'. Suggestion: streamline: 'I usually enjoy' (or 'like to enjoy') and use 'mountain peaks' or 'a mountain peak' for natural phrasing.

× Uh, whenever I visit, uh, visit in, uh, visit, I like the mountains.

✓ Whenever I visit, I like going to the mountains.

Errors: repeated filler 'visit' and incorrect preposition 'visit in'; sentence is disfluent. Suggestion: remove fillers and use 'go to the mountains' or 'visit the mountains' for clear, grammatical expression.