Travelling— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Cải thiện rõ ràng và mạch lạc: Tránh tiếng lắp, từ thừa và lặp ý. Bắt đầu bằng một câu chủ đề rõ ràng, sau đó thêm một hoặc hai chi tiết cụ thể (ví dụ: loại cảnh vật bạn thích, cảm xúc bạn có). Sử dụng từ nối đơn giản để liên kết ý (for example, because, so). Giữ độ dài tối đa 4–5 câu.

Ví dụ: Yes, I usually look out the window when I travel by bus or car because I enjoy observing the landscape. For example, I like seeing green rice fields and small villages because they feel peaceful and different from my hometown. This helps me relax and notice local life as we pass by.

Gợi ý: Giảm lặp từ và sửa ngữ pháp: Tránh lặp cấu trúc “I want to”. Dùng thì và cấu trúc đúng (I usually take photos). Thêm chi tiết cụ thể về cách chụp hoặc mục đích (e.g., for memories, to share with friends). Dùng từ nối như because hoặc so để kết nối ý.

Ví dụ: Yes, I usually take photos of the scenery outside the car window because they help me remember places I visit. For instance, I often photograph sunsets or traditional houses to share with my family later. Taking pictures also lets me notice small details I would otherwise miss.

Gợi ý: Cần trả lời trực tiếp và hoàn chỉnh: Nêu rõ sở thích (prefer mountains, the sea, or both) ở câu chủ đề. Tránh chữ lặp, lỗi phát âm viết và câu bỏ dở. Thêm 1–2 lý do cụ thể cho mỗi lựa chọn bằng cách sử dụng từ nối (for example, because). Giữ câu ngắn gọn và mạch lạc.

Ví dụ: I prefer both the mountains and the sea because each gives me a different feeling. For example, mountains make me feel excited and adventurous because I can hike and enjoy fresh air. On the other hand, the sea relaxes me with its sound and wide views, so I enjoy visiting beaches to unwind.

× Yes, umm, usually look out the window at the scenery when traveling by bus or car because I want to, uh, I want to immerse myself in stunning, in stunning landscape and I want to see, I want to see something to something different that in my hometown doesn't have.

✓ Yes, umm, I usually look out of the window at the scenery when traveling by bus or car because I want to immerse myself in the stunning landscape and see things that are different from what my hometown has.

The sentence is missing the subject 'I' before 'usually look' and uses inconsistent prepositions and articles. 'Look out the window' should be 'look out of the window'. 'In stunning landscape' needs the article 'the' and 'in' is unnecessary before 'stunning landscape' when using 'immerse myself in the stunning landscape' is correct. The clause 'something to something different that in my hometown doesn't have' is ungrammatical; it should be rephrased as 'see things that are different from what my hometown has'. Suggestions: always include the subject, use correct prepositions ('out of'), use definite article 'the' for specific landscape, and restructure comparative clauses as 'different from what X has.'

× Umm, yes, I'm usually take photos of the scenery outside the car windows because I want to immerse myself in each photograph and I want to uh, I want to record my memory about the place that I have visited.

✓ Umm, yes, I usually take photos of the scenery outside the car window because I want to immerse myself in each photograph and I want to record my memories of the places that I have visited.

'I'm usually take' mixes contraction 'I'm' (I am) with simple present 'take'; remove contraction and use simple present 'I usually take'. 'Car windows' is plural but context prefers singular 'the car window' or 'car windows' consistently; 'outside the car window' is fine. 'Record my memory about the place' is awkward; use plural 'memories' and 'of the places' or 'of a place'. Suggestions: use correct verb form for simple present (I usually take), choose consistent singular/plural for nouns, and use 'memories of' rather than 'memory about.'

× I'm I'm unbrofer both because each place give me different sense of belonging LA A for instance, mountains make me feels very excited and I want to and.

✓ I'm unsure/prefer both because each place gives me a different sense of belonging. For instance, mountains make me feel very excited.

Several problems: 'unbrofer' is not an English word — likely intended 'undecided' or 'prefer both.' 'Each place give' has subject-verb agreement issue; it should be 'each place gives'. 'Different sense of belonging LA A' contains extraneous characters; should be 'a different sense of belonging.' 'Mountains make me feels' has incorrect verb form 'feels'; after 'make' use base verb 'feel'. The trailing 'and I want to and' is incomplete and should be removed or completed. Suggestions: use a clear word ('prefer both' or 'am undecided'), ensure subject-verb agreement ('gives'), use correct article 'a', after 'make' use base verb, and avoid leaving sentences unfinished.