Travelling— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition, and finish the thought about sharing photos. Use one or two linking words to add a brief reason or example. Keep it under five sentences.

Ví dụ: Yes, I often look out of the window when I travel by bus or car to enjoy the scenery. For example, I like to watch mountains or the coastline, and I sometimes take photos which I then share with my family.

Gợi ý: Provide a clear topic sentence then one or two concise supporting details. Correct small grammar errors (picture(s) agreement, tense). Use a linking phrase like 'so' or 'therefore' to show purpose. Keep sentences compact and avoid redundancy.

Ví dụ: Yes, I often take photos from the car window so I can share them with my family. This way they can see where I am travelling and keep the images as memories.

Gợi ý: Begin with a direct answer, then give one clear reason with correct grammar and a concrete example. Fix tense and article errors (e.g., 'where I grew up', 'those kinds of lifestyles', 'the Himalayas'). Avoid trailing fragments.

Ví dụ: I prefer the mountains because I grew up in a mountainous area and am used to that way of life. For instance, I enjoy visiting hill stations like the Himalayas because I feel comfortable and relaxed there.

× Yes, very often when I'm traveling by bus or car, I look out to I look out of the window to enjoy the landscapes, for example mountains or a coastline. And when I click the pictures, I often share it with my.

✓ Yes, very often when I'm travelling by bus or car, I look out of the window to enjoy the landscape, for example mountains or a coastline. And when I take pictures, I often share them with my family.

Errors: 'traveling' inconsistent spelling (use 'travelling' British or keep 'traveling' American), redundant phrase 'I look out to I look out of', incorrect verb 'click the pictures' (non-native; use 'take pictures'), incorrect pronoun 'it' for plural 'pictures', incomplete phrase 'with my' missing noun. Suggestion: remove redundancy, use 'look out of the window', use 'take pictures' for photographing, use plural pronoun 'them', and complete the phrase 'my family'. Maintain present continuous for travelling and simple present for habitual actions.

× Yes I do. I take pictures of the scenery outside of my car window because I know that if my family is not travelling with me, at least I can share this pictures and they can use this picture to create a memory and see where I'm traveling right now.

✓ Yes, I do. I take pictures of the scenery outside my car window because I know that if my family is not travelling with me, at least I can share these pictures and they can use them to create memories and see where I'm travelling.

Errors: unnecessary 'of' after 'outside' ('outside my car window' is correct), article and number errors: 'this pictures' should be 'these pictures' (plural demonstrative), inconsistent pronoun 'this picture' should be 'them' or 'these pictures', awkward phrase 'create a memory' better as 'create memories', tense/time adverb 'right now' clashes with habitual sharing — use present continuous 'travelling' or simple present consistently. Suggestion: remove extra preposition, match demonstratives to plural nouns, use plural 'memories', and keep consistent tense.

× I prefer mountains because the place where I have been grew up is usually a mountainous area and I have been acclimated to those kind of lifestyle. I so whenever I visit a hilly station or something like Himalaya.

✓ I prefer mountains because the place where I grew up is usually a mountainous area and I am accustomed to that kind of lifestyle, so whenever I visit a hill station or a place like the Himalayas, ...

Errors: wrong verb tense and word order: 'where I have been grew up' mixes perfect and past — use simple past 'where I grew up'. 'I have been acclimated to' is awkward; use 'I am accustomed to' or 'I have become accustomed to'. 'those kind of lifestyle' has number disagreement — use 'that kind of lifestyle' or 'those kinds of lifestyles'. Connector 'I so' is incorrect order; use 'so' before clause. 'hilly station' incorrect collocation; correct is 'hill station'. 'Himalaya' should be 'the Himalayas' and preceded by 'a place like'. Suggestion: use simple past for upbringing, use 'accustomed to', correct determiners and noun forms, and fix word order for conjunctions.