Travelling— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Be clearer and more concise. Start with a direct topic sentence, avoid repetition and incorrect words (e.g. "funeral" should be "window" or "journey"), and keep to 2–4 coherent supporting sentences. Use linking words (e.g. "when," "because," "and") appropriately and give one specific example or feeling. Pronunciation and grammar errors (tense and article use) reduce clarity—fix simple verb forms and articles.

Ví dụ: Yes, I often look out of the window when I travel by bus or car. When I was a child I used to get very excited because it felt like the trees were moving backward as the car moved forward. That motion still makes me feel curious and relaxed, so I enjoy watching the passing scenery.

Gợi ý: Be more precise and avoid vague or incomplete statements. Begin with a clear topic sentence saying whether you take photos. Follow with 1–2 detailed reasons and one specific example. Remove awkward phrasing like "it makes it make fast" and finish incomplete sentences. Use linking words ("because", "so", "for example") to create coherence.

Ví dụ: Yes, I often take photos of the scenery from the car window because I enjoy capturing interesting light and landscapes. For example, last month I photographed a golden sunset over a field, and when I look at that photo later it reminds me of the peaceful feeling I had during the trip.

Gợi ý: Give a clear direct preference or say you like both and explain with concise, specific reasons. Use linking words ("when", "but", "because") and avoid imprecise phrases like "on the other side" and inaccurate details ("calming sound of the whales" is odd unless you mean waves). Keep to 2–4 sentences and include one concrete example or comparison.

Ví dụ: I enjoy both, but if I have to choose I prefer the mountains for hiking because they make me feel energetic and healthy. However, I also like the sea when I want to relax; for example, listening to the sound of the waves on a quiet beach helps me unwind after a busy week.

× Yes, I love, I love looking at the out the window at the funeral when I'm travelling by bus or by car.

✓ Yes, I love looking out of the window when I'm travelling by a bus or a car.

The original sentence has multiple issues but per instructions we only correct those matching the provided list. 'Looking at the out the window' mixes prepositions and word order; correct preposition is 'looking out of the window' or 'looking out the window'. Also 'at the funeral' is likely a miswording; assuming intended 'window' only. Use articles 'a bus or a car' for general vehicles. Suggestion: simplify to 'I love looking out of the window when I'm travelling by bus or car.'

× When I was a kid, I used to tell my mom when I was being told that we are traveling, I was excited because of the the thought that I was moving the car forward and the trees are going backward.

✓ When I was a kid, I used to tell my mom that whenever we were travelling I was excited because I thought the car was moving forward and the trees were moving backward.

This sentence contains complex structure problems: redundant clauses and incorrect tense sequence. According to list, correct under sentence structure errors. Use 'whenever we were travelling' to link habitual past action, and 'I thought' plus past continuous 'were moving' keeps tense consistent. Remove repetition and unnecessary passive 'being told'.

× Yes, I love taking pictures outside of the car window when I'm traveling and it makes it make fast.

✓ Yes, I love taking pictures out of the car window when I'm travelling; it makes time pass quickly.

Original has awkward phrase 'it makes it make fast' which is ungrammatical. Fixing verb+ing usage: 'taking pictures' is fine; change unclear clause to 'it makes time pass quickly' to convey intended meaning. Also 'outside of the car window' simplified to 'out of the car window'.

× It makes me feel like a photographer.

✓ It makes me feel like a photographer.

This sentence is already correct in structure and tense; no change needed. Included here to confirm no error of the listed types.

× And that picture, when I come back to see it, it looks.

✓ When I look at those pictures later, they look great and give me a refreshing feeling.

Original sentence is incomplete ('it looks' what?). Corrected to complete the thought and maintain present habit: 'when I look at those pictures later' and 'they look great and give me a refreshing feeling.' This addresses sentence structure error by providing an object and clearer meaning.

× It gives me the refreshing idea that feels good.

✓ It gives me a refreshing feeling that feels good.

'Refreshing idea' is awkward; 'refreshing feeling' is a more natural collocation. This fixes adjective-noun usage and clarity.

× It depends on what I'm feeling for mountains.

✓ It depends on how I'm feeling about the mountains.

Preposition and verb-noun collocation need adjustment. Use 'how I'm feeling about' to express preference depending on mood; this fits present tense context.

× I love mountains when I want to go hiking and it makes me feel more energetic and fit.

✓ I love the mountains when I want to go hiking because they make me feel more energetic and fit.

Add definite article 'the mountains' for specific reference and change 'it makes me' to 'they make me' to agree with plural 'mountains' (subject-verb agreement). Also 'because' clarifies cause.

× But on the other side, I love being at the sea for relaxing and enjoying.

✓ But on the other hand, I love being at the sea to relax and enjoy myself.

Use correct conjunctional phrase 'on the other hand' not 'on the other side'. 'For relaxing and enjoying' is awkward; use infinitives 'to relax and enjoy myself.' This fits the intended contrast.

× I love the calming sound of the whales.

✓ I love the calming sound of the waves.

Likely misuse: 'whales' produce sounds but context (sea calming sound) normally refers to 'waves'. This corrects the noun for natural collocation. If the student meant whales, it's grammatically fine, but collocation suggests 'waves'.