Travelling— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Be more concise and correct grammar: start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid filler words and repetitions (e.g., remove extra 'the' and 'I'). Also replace awkward phrases like 'nature sensory' with 'natural scenery' or 'the landscape'.

Ví dụ: I usually sit by the window when I travel because I enjoy watching the natural scenery. For example, looking at trees and the sky helps me feel peaceful, and I find it reduces my stress when I have a busy day.

Gợi ý: Good direct response and clear opinion. Improve by tightening language, correcting small errors (‘living in the moment’), and adding a brief reason or a short example with a linking phrase like 'because' or 'so'.

Ví dụ: No, I don't usually take photos from the car window because I prefer to enjoy the view with my eyes. For example, when I'm on a scenic drive I focus on the landscape so I can remember it clearly later.

Gợi ý: Begin with a clear topic sentence stating your preference, then provide one specific supporting detail and avoid repetitions and vague phrases. Correct tense and phrasing (e.g., 'since childhood', 'two years ago I visited Saudi Arabia'). Use linking words like 'for example' to add a concrete detail (height, activity).

Ví dụ: I prefer the mountains because I've loved them since childhood. For example, two years ago I visited mountains in Saudi Arabia that were about 2,000 metres high, and I enjoyed driving through them and admiring the views.

× Yes, well sometimes I like to sit by the window and look everything outside, especially the nature sensory.

✓ Yes, well sometimes I like to sit by the window and look at everything outside, especially the natural scenery.

The verb 'look' requires the preposition 'at' when followed by an object (look at everything). 'Nature sensory' is incorrect collocation and word form; the correct noun phrase is 'natural scenery'. Use 'natural' (adjective) to modify 'scenery'.

× It's I enjoy it because watching trees and the the sky or people walking give me a sense of peace and calm.

✓ I enjoy it because watching trees and the sky or people walking gives me a sense of peace and calm.

Remove the extraneous 'It's'. There is a subject-verb agreement issue: the compound subject 'watching trees and the sky or people walking' functions as a singular activity, so use 'gives' rather than 'give'. Also remove the duplicated 'the'.

× It helps me relax and reduce my stress there.

✓ It helps me relax and reduce my stress.

The adverb 'there' is unnecessary and unclear in this context. 'Reduce my stress' is sufficient. Remove redundant words to improve clarity.

× No, I'm not a big fan of taking pictures from the car window.

✓ No, I'm not a big fan of taking pictures from the car window.

This sentence is grammatically acceptable and matches the present preference, so no change is needed. (Included to indicate no error from the provided list.)

× I prefer to enjoy the view with my eyes and keep the memory inside my mind because I like living the in the moment rather than photographing and everything.

✓ I prefer to enjoy the view with my eyes and keep the memory in my mind because I like living in the moment rather than photographing everything.

Use 'in my mind' not 'inside my mind' for natural phrasing. Remove the extra 'the' before 'in the moment'. 'Photographing and everything' is ungrammatical; use 'photographing everything' or 'taking photos'.

× Yeah, I like mountains from childhood.

✓ Yeah, I have liked mountains since childhood.

When expressing a preference that began in the past and continues to the present, use the present perfect 'have liked' and the preposition 'since' rather than 'from'. 'From childhood' is less natural than 'since childhood' here.

× I I enjoy like driving by by my car and like and before two years ago I went to say Arabia, I went to many mountains and the the height it was 2000 meter above the sea.

✓ I enjoy driving in my car, and about two years ago I went to Saudi Arabia; I visited many mountains that reached about 2000 meters above sea level.

Remove repeated words ('I I', 'by by', extra 'like'). Use 'driving in my car' rather than 'driving by my car'. Replace 'before two years ago' with 'about two years ago' or 'two years ago'. Correct country name to 'Saudi Arabia'. Use 'visited' for past action. Use 'that reached about 2000 meters above sea level' for clear measurement; use 'meters' plural and 'above sea level' rather than 'above the sea'. Also fix duplicated 'the'.

× Yeah, I enjoy it so much.

✓ Yeah, I enjoyed it so much.

If referring to the experience in Saudi Arabia two years ago, use past tense 'enjoyed'. If referring to a general ongoing enjoyment, present 'enjoy' is fine; given the prior sentence describes a past trip, past tense is more consistent.