Travelling— Part 1 Báo cáo
Cuộc hội thoại
Part 1
Giám khảo
Do you look out the window at the scenery when travelling by bus or car?
Thí sinh
Yes, I usually look out of the window when I travel by bus or car because I enjoy watching people and the busy streets. It makes the journey more interesting. I sometimes look at the sky, especially at sunset when the colors are beautiful.
Giám khảo
Do you take photos of the scenery outside the car window?
Thí sinh
Yes, I often take photos, especially when the sky looks beautiful. I sometimes take include buildings in the background to make the photo more interesting. I also try not to include people in the photos.
Giám khảo
Do you prefer the mountains or the sea?
Thí sinh
I prefer the sea because I enjoy watching the horizon and the changing colors of the sky. There's something coming about being near the ocean and it makes me feel relaxed even though I don't like getting tanned.
Đánh giá
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Part 1
Do you look out the window at the scenery when travelling by bus or car?
Điểm: 82.0Gợi ý: 回答は自然で流暢ですが、より効果的にするために主題文を明確にしてから具体例や理由を一つか二つに絞り、接続語（例えば“for example”, “because”, “also”など）を使って論理的につなげてください。また、冗長な表現を避け、文の数を最大5文に保ってください。
Ví dụ: Yes, I usually look out of the window when I travel by bus or car because I enjoy observing people and lively street scenes. For example, I like watching market stalls and commuters because they show everyday life. I also sometimes focus on the sky at sunset, when the colors are especially vivid.
Do you take photos of the scenery outside the car window?
Điểm: 76.0Gợi ý: 内容は分かりやすいですが、文法ミスや不自然な語順（“take include”など）を訂正し、理由や具体例を1つ加えて説得力を高めてください。接続語（“especially”, “because”, “for example”）を正しく使い、語彙は文脈に合う単語を選んでください。
Ví dụ: Yes, I often take photos, especially when the sky looks dramatic because light and color are beautiful. For example, I include interesting buildings in the background to add depth. I usually avoid photographing people to respect their privacy.
Do you prefer the mountains or the sea?
Điểm: 70.0Gợi ý: 主旨は伝わりますが、一部不自然な表現（“There's something coming about”）を修正し、理由を明確に述べたうえで具体的な描写や比較を加えてください。また否定情報（“I don't like getting tanned”）は接続語で自然につなげてください。語彙の幅を少し広げるとより良くなります。
Ví dụ: I prefer the sea because I find the horizon and the changing sky very calming. For instance, watching the waves and sunset helps me relax after a busy week. Although I dislike getting tanned, I still enjoy short walks along the shore.
Ngữ pháp
× I sometimes take include buildings in the background to make the photo more interesting.
✓ I sometimes include buildings in the background to make the photo more interesting.
The verb phrase 'take include' is incorrect because two verbs are placed together without proper structure. Use a single verb that fits the meaning. Here 'include' alone correctly expresses adding buildings to the composition. Suggestion: remove 'take' and use 'include' or rephrase as 'take photos that include buildings'.
× There's something coming about being near the ocean and it makes me feel relaxed even though I don't like getting tanned.
✓ There's something comforting about being near the ocean, and it makes me feel relaxed even though I don't like getting tanned.
The phrase 'coming about' is incorrect in this context and creates a sentence structure problem. The intended adjective is likely 'comforting' to describe the feeling. Use a participial adjective 'comforting' or a noun phrase 'something comforting' to fix the structure. Also add a comma before 'and' to join two independent clauses. Suggestion: replace 'coming about' with 'comforting' or rephrase as 'Being near the ocean feels comforting.'
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