Travelling— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Cần trả lời rõ ràng, ngắn gọn và tự nhiên hơn. Tránh lỗi ngữ pháp (ví dụ: "one of the most activities on is" không đúng), và nối các câu bằng liên từ phù hợp. Thêm chi tiết cụ thể về cảm nhận nhưng giới hạn trong tối đa 5 câu. Ví dụ cải thiện: bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề, sau đó giải thích cảm xúc và kết thúc bằng một ví dụ ngắn.

Ví dụ: Yes, I often look out of the window when I travel by bus or car because I enjoy seeing changing landscapes. It relaxes me and helps me forget daily stress. For example, I like watching green fields and rivers pass by, which makes me feel refreshed.

Gợi ý: Cần giảm tiếng ấp úng (uh) và diễn đạt rõ hơn mục đích chụp ảnh. Dùng từ vựng chính xác như "capture" và "preserve" là tốt nhưng câu nên mạch lạc hơn bằng cách nối ý với liên từ. Thêm một chi tiết cụ thể về cách hoặc tình huống chụp ảnh sẽ tăng điểm nội dung.

Ví dụ: Yes, I often take photos through the window to capture and keep beautiful views. I usually use my phone camera quickly when I see a striking mountain or the sea, so I can remember the trip later.

Gợi ý: Cần tránh lặp từ như "I was had a very memorable memory" và sửa ngữ pháp. Trả lời trực tiếp (I prefer the mountains) rồi giải thích bằng lý do cụ thể và kết thúc bằng ví dụ ngắn gọn. Giữ dưới 5 câu, sử dụng liên từ để mạch lạc.

Ví dụ: I prefer the mountains because I enjoy the cool weather and peaceful atmosphere. My hometown is in a mountainous area, so I feel comfortable there. For example, visiting Sa Pa was unforgettable because of the stunning views and fresh air.

× one of the most activities on is looking out the window or to see the scenery.

✓ one of the main activities is looking out the window to see the scenery.

The phrase 'one of the most activities on' is ungrammatical. Use 'one of the main activities' or 'one of the most popular activities' and follow with a gerund phrase 'is looking' not infinitive 'to see' (use 'to see' or 'seeing' consistently). Suggestion: simplify to 'one of the main activities is looking out the window to see the scenery.'

× Because I can see the scenery very beautifully.

✓ Because I can see the scenery very clearly/beautifully.

Adverb placement and choice: 'see the scenery very beautifully' sounds odd because 'see' typically takes adverb 'clearly' or describe the scenery as 'very beautiful.' Use either 'I can see the scenery very clearly' or 'the scenery is very beautiful.'

× It will make my soul to be fresh or be powerful.

✓ It makes my spirit feel refreshed and energized.

Unnatural collocation and unnecessary infinitive 'to be'. 'Soul' in this context is better as 'spirit'; 'make ... feel refreshed and energized' is natural. Also tense: present simple suits general statement. Suggest: 'It makes my spirit feel refreshed and energized.'

× I want to capture the view of and preserve the beautiful scenery.

✓ I want to capture and preserve the beautiful scenery.

Extra preposition 'of' is unnecessary and interrupts the verb phrase. Use two verbs in parallel 'capture and preserve' followed by the object 'the beautiful scenery.'

× For example, uh, when I see a beautiful mountain or sea, I will uh, use the camera to take photos of it.

✓ For example, when I see a beautiful mountain or the sea, I will use my camera to take photos of it.

Article and word choice: add 'the' before 'sea' when referring to a general landscape; 'my camera' is more natural than 'the camera.' Remove filler 'uh' in formal responses.

× Yes, I prefer the mountains, uh, because I love the cool weather and my hometown is also in the mountains.

✓ Yes, I prefer the mountains because I love the cool weather and my hometown is also in the mountains.

Remove filler 'uh'. Sentence otherwise correct. No grammatical change besides style.

× Furthermore, when I travel to Zapa, a mountainous area in Vietnam, I was very excited because of the beautiful sceneries and I was had a very memorable memory.

✓ Furthermore, when I traveled to Zapa, a mountainous area in Vietnam, I was very excited because of the beautiful scenery and I had a very memorable experience.

Multiple issues: 'sceneries' is incorrect — use uncountable 'scenery.' 'I was had' is ungrammatical (auxiliary error) and should be simply 'I had.' Use past tense 'traveled' to match 'was very excited.' 'Memorable memory' is redundant; use 'memorable experience.'