Travelling— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: ・もっと自然でまとまりのある一文で答え、不要な断片的な文を避けてください。例えば、主題文→理由→具体例の順に構成し、接続詞（so, because, whenなど）を使って文をつなげると流暢に聞こえます。 ・具体性を高めるために、どのような景色が好きか（田園風景、都市の高層ビル、山並みなど）や、景色を見ることでどんな感情になるかを一つ追加してください。 ・語彙は簡潔で適切な単語を使い、冗長な表現（“by watching the transformation of the outside”）は簡潔に言い換えましょう。

Ví dụ: Yes, I always look out of the window when I travel by bus or car because I enjoy watching how the landscape changes. For example, I like seeing the gradual shift from busy city streets to quiet countryside, which makes me feel relaxed and excited as we get closer to our destination.

Gợi ý: ・語彙ミス（kernel? Sal Soto?）や文法の誤りを避け、明確で正しい単語を使ってください（“window”や“subtle”など）。 ・理由を示す場合は一文で簡潔にまとめ、条件節は正しい語順で提示しましょう（If I try to take pictures, I might miss subtle changes in the scenery. のように）。 ・Supporting detailとして、いつ写真を撮るか、どのタイプの景色なら撮るかなど具体例を一つ加えると説得力が増します。

Ví dụ: I rarely take photos of the scenery outside the window because I prefer to enjoy it with my own eyes. If I try to photograph everything, I often miss the subtle changes in light and colour. However, I will sometimes take a picture if there is an unusual view, like a dramatic sunset.

Gợi ý: ・主題文で答えた後、理由を自然な表現で接続詞（because, as）を使って説明し、文を簡潔にまとめてください。 ・“bottom muscle such as legs”は不自然なので、適切な語彙（leg muscles, lower-body muscles）に直してください。 ・具体性を出すために、山での好きな活動（登山、トレッキング、景色を楽しむ等）や頻度を一つ付け加えてください。

Ví dụ: I prefer the mountains because I enjoy hiking and it helps strengthen my leg muscles. For instance, I often go on weekend hikes to challenging trails, which is a great way to keep fit and enjoy nature.

× I always look at the window, at the scenery when traveling by bus or car. By watching the transformation of the outside.

✓ I always look out the window at the scenery when traveling by bus or car because I like watching how the view changes outside.

The original contains a sentence fragment 'By watching the transformation of the outside.' which is not a complete sentence and awkward phrasing. Combine ideas into one complete sentence and use natural expressions: 'look out the window' is more common, 'how the view changes' is clearer than 'transformation of the outside.' Use a conjunction to link reason to action.

× I rarely take photos of the scenery outside the kernel because I just enjoy the landscape by watching by my eyes.

✓ I rarely take photos of the scenery outside the car window because I just enjoy the landscape with my eyes.

'kernel' is incorrect; the intended word is 'car window.' 'by watching by my eyes' is ungrammatical: use 'with my eyes' or simply 'watching.' Correct preposition 'outside the car window' and use natural collocation 'enjoy the landscape with my eyes.'

× If I try to take some pictures, I may miss Sal Soto change all the landscape.

✓ If I try to take some pictures, I might miss sudden changes in the landscape.

The original has garbled words 'Sal Soto change all the landscape' which appears to aim for 'sudden changes in the landscape.' Replace with the correct phrase and use 'might' for a likely but uncertain outcome; ensure plural 'changes' matches meaning.

× I prefer the mountains because it will be very effective training for me to go hiking.

✓ I prefer the mountains because hiking there would be very effective training for me.

Using 'it will be' is awkward; use 'hiking there would be' to match preference and hypothetical benefit. This keeps tense and modality appropriate for expressing a personal preference and potential result.

× I would like to strengthen my bottom muscle such as legs so the hiking is suitable for it.

✓ I would like to strengthen my lower-body muscles, such as my legs, so hiking is suitable for that.

'bottom muscle' is unnatural; use 'lower-body muscles.' 'such as legs' needs article and possessive 'my legs.' 'suitable for it' is vague; use 'suitable for that' or rephrase to 'so hiking is suitable.' Improve adjective/noun choices and pronoun reference.