Travelling— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid filler sounds (uh, um), and use proper verb forms and articles. Add one or two specific supporting details using a linking word (for example, because or so) to explain why you enjoy looking out the window.

Ví dụ: Yes. I always look out of the window when I travel because the scenery relaxes me and clears my mind. For example, watching trees and houses pass by helps me forget about work and makes the journey feel shorter.

Gợi ý: Clarify your meaning and remove unclear or awkward phrases (e.g. 'God's window'). Give a direct yes/no then a reason and a brief specific example. Avoid trailing off mid-sentence and reduce fillers.

Ví dụ: Yes, I often take photos from the car window, especially during sunrise or sunset because the light is beautiful. For instance, last month I photographed a red-orange sunrise over the hills and later shared it with my friends.

Gợi ý: Begin with a clear direct answer and then support it with concise reasons using linking words (for example, because or while). Fix grammar (singular/plural, articles) and avoid repeating the same idea. Keep to two to three sentences maximum.

Ví dụ: I prefer both because they offer different benefits: for example, I go to the mountains for hiking and fresh air, while the sea helps me relax and recharge. While hiking I enjoy physical activity, but at the beach I can unwind and sleep better.

× I love watching at the scenery while I'm driving by any mode of transport, uh, which gives me a Peace of Mind and calm feeling and really relaxing to looking out of window.

✓ I love watching the scenery while I'm travelling by any mode of transport, which gives me peace of mind and a calm feeling; it is really relaxing to look out of the window.

Errors: unnecessary preposition 'at' after 'watching' (Verb + -ing form and incorrect preposition), incorrect phrase 'really relaxing to looking' (wrong form after 'to'), missing articles and awkward wording. Suggestions: remove 'at' after 'watching', use 'travelling' or 'driving' consistently, change 'to looking' to 'to look', add 'a' before 'calm feeling' and 'the' before 'window', and use lower-case for 'peace of mind'. Grammar types involved: #8 Verb + -ing form; #11 Incorrect use of prepositions; #22 Article errors.

× Uh, even I am stressed out about anything.

✓ Even when I am stressed out about something.

Errors: awkward word order 'Even I am stressed out about anything' and inappropriate use of 'anything' in affirmative context. Suggestions: use 'even when' to introduce the condition and 'something' for an affirmative statement; ensure natural word order. Grammar types involved: #26 Sentence structure errors; #14 Incorrect use of quantifiers (inappropriate 'anything').

× I love to see scenery outside.

✓ I love to see the scenery outside.

Error: 'scenery' is an uncountable noun that usually takes 'the' when referring to a specific view. Suggestion: add the definite article 'the' to indicate the particular scenery seen from the window. Grammar type: #1 Singular and plural issue (also #17 Incorrect use of the definite article).

× I guess I take photos when I look outside from God's window, umm, especially when it's cloudy outside.

✓ I guess I take photos when I look out of the car window, especially when it's cloudy.

Errors: odd phrase 'from God's window' and incorrect preposition 'look outside from...'; redundant 'outside'. Suggestions: say 'look out of the car window' or 'look out the window' and remove redundant 'outside' at the end. Grammar type: #11 Incorrect use of prepositions.

× Little bit bright, uh, and I love taking photos of a sunset or sunrise.

✓ When it's a little bright, I love taking photos of the sunset or the sunrise.

Errors: sentence fragment 'Little bit bright' and missing articles before 'sunset' and 'sunrise'. Suggestions: make a full clause 'When it's a little bright' and use 'the' for specific times of day. Grammar type: #26 Sentence structure errors; #22 Article errors.

× Apart from that, I take photos of.

✓ Apart from that, I take photos of other scenes.

Error: sentence fragment ending with a preposition and no object or verb phrase completing the thought. Suggestion: add the object 'other scenes' or specify what you photograph. Grammar type: #23 Sentence without a verb.

× Both places have their own specialities.

✓ Both places have their own specialties.

Error: 'specialities' is a variant spelling but 'specialties' is more common in American English; however 'their own' is fine. Suggestion: use 'specialties' or 'specialities' consistently and choose standard spelling. Grammar type: #14 Incorrect use of quantifiers (minor) and spelling note.

× I like to go visit both because sometime I like to go to mountains for hiking and at the same time water of sea gives me relaxation and Peace of Mind which breaks my monotonous life schedule and give me.

✓ I like to visit both because sometimes I go to the mountains for hiking, and at the same time the sea's water gives me relaxation and peace of mind, which breaks my monotonous life schedule and gives me energy.

Errors: 'sometime' should be 'sometimes' (adverb), missing articles 'the mountains' and 'the sea', awkward phrase 'water of sea', missing third-person singular verb agreement 'give' should be 'gives', and sentence ending incomplete. Suggestions: use 'visit' instead of 'go visit' (or keep but be consistent), use 'sometimes', add 'the' before geographic nouns, change 'water of sea' to 'the sea's water' or 'the sea', ensure subject-verb agreement 'gives', and finish the idea by specifying what it 'gives me' (e.g., 'energy'). Grammar types: #8 Verb + -ing form; #6 Present tense issue; #17 Incorrect use of the definite article; #27 Subject-verb agreement errors.