Travelling— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Be more concise and natural: begin with a clear topic sentence, avoid hesitations and repeated filler words, correct grammar (e.g. "interest in nature", "when I travel"). Use one or two specific details and a linking word. Keep it to 2–3 sentences.

Ví dụ: Yes. I always try to get a window seat because I’m very interested in nature. For example, when I travel by bus I watch the changing landscape and trees, which helps me relax during the journey.

Gợi ý: Reduce fillers and give a clear, specific answer with one supporting detail. Fix phrasing ("on my phone", "I have about 3,000 photos"). Avoid incomplete sentences. Use a linking word to connect idea and example.

Ví dụ: Yes. I have about 3,000 photos of landscapes on my phone because I like to capture interesting scenes. For instance, last month I took several pictures of a sunset over a lake and later shared my favorites with friends.

Gợi ý: Start with a direct topic sentence stating your preference (or that you have no preference). Improve grammar ("I don't have a strong preference", "I just enjoy being in nature"). Give one clear specific example and use a linking word to compare or explain.

Ví dụ: I don’t have a strong preference; I enjoy both mountains and the sea because they offer different experiences. For example, Dundas Valley is peaceful and green, while Burlington Beach is great for relaxing by the water.

× I'm quite fond of these things because I have a keen interest towards the nature.

✓ I'm quite fond of these things because I have a keen interest in nature.

Use 'interest in' rather than 'interest towards'; also do not use the definite article with the uncountable noun 'nature' in this context. Suggestion: say 'interest in nature.'

× So whenever I had a time to like travel on the bus, I usually try to have a window seat so I can look outside and see how beautiful nature is.

✓ So whenever I have time to travel by bus, I usually try to get a window seat so I can look outside and see how beautiful nature is.

Tense and word choice: 'had a time' is unnatural; use present simple 'have time' for habitual actions. Use 'by bus' rather than 'on the bus' for the general mode of travel, and use 'get a window seat' instead of 'have a window seat.' Suggestion: use present simple for habitual routines and common collocations ('have time', 'travel by bus', 'get a window seat').

× And also also I want to like raise my hand in the air and enjoy the whole that travel time.

✓ Also, I like to raise my hands in the air and enjoy the whole travel time.

Pronoun and phrasing errors: 'want to like' is filler language—use 'like to' or 'want to.' 'Raise my hand' singular is odd for a general action; 'hands' fits better. 'The whole that travel time' is ungrammatical—use 'the whole travel time.' Suggestion: remove fillers and use clear phrases ('I like to', 'the whole travel time').

× In my mobile, I think I have uh, around like 3000 photos of the nature.

✓ On my phone, I think I have around 3,000 photos of nature.

Preposition and article/pronoun use: say 'on my phone' or 'in my phone' depending on dialect; 'on my phone' is common. Do not use 'the' before 'nature' when speaking generally. Also remove filler words and use numerals or a clear number format. Suggestion: 'On my phone, I have around 3,000 photos of nature.'

× So that really shows that how interested I am in these things.

✓ So that really shows how interested I am in these things.

Extra 'that' is unnecessary when using 'shows how...'. Remove redundant words. Suggestion: use 'shows how interested I am.'

× Uh, I always, uh, while traveling, I keep my phone in my hands and whenever I see any beautiful thing, I just take a picture and keep with him and put that in like on a.

✓ While traveling, I always keep my phone in my hand, and whenever I see something beautiful, I take a picture and save it on my phone.

Multiple issues: remove filler words 'uh', incorrect pronoun 'keep with him' and unclear ending 'put that in like on a.' Use singular 'hand' for holding a phone, 'something beautiful' rather than 'any beautiful thing,' and correct verbs 'take a picture and save it on my phone.' Suggestion: simplify the sentence, remove fillers and use clear object references ('save it on my phone').

× I didn't have any specific preference among these things because I just want to like be in a nature.

✓ I don't have any specific preference because I just want to be in nature.

Tense mismatch: question asks general preference, so use present simple 'don't have' and 'want to be.' Remove 'a' before 'nature' and filler 'like.' Suggestion: use present tense for general preferences and remove unnecessary articles and fillers.

× It doesn't matter if you see your mountain.

✓ It doesn't matter whether it's the mountains or the sea.

Original sentence is unclear and uses 'you' and 'your' inappropriately. The speaker should contrast 'mountains' and 'sea.' Suggestion: rephrase to explicitly compare options ('whether it's the mountains or the sea').

× Umm, there's a lot of places such as uh, uh, Dundas Valley where all mountains are too beautiful and there's a seas like Burlington Beach.

✓ There are a lot of places, such as Dundas Valley, where the hills are very beautiful, and there are seasides like Burlington Beach.

Subject-verb agreement and article use: use 'There are a lot of places' not 'there's.' 'All mountains are too beautiful' is awkward; 'the hills are very beautiful' or 'the mountains are beautiful' is better. 'There's a seas' is ungrammatical—use 'there are seaside areas' or 'there is a beach.' Suggestion: ensure subject-verb agreement and correct countable/uncountable noun forms ('there are places', 'a beach').

× May be the scenery is too cool.

✓ Maybe the scenery is nice.

'May be' should be 'maybe' as an adverb. 'Too cool' implies excessive coolness or slang; use 'nice', 'lovely', or 'beautiful' to describe scenery. Suggestion: use 'Maybe the scenery is beautiful' for a natural description.