Travelling— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and incorrect verb forms (e.g., use present simple consistently).

Ví dụ: Yes, I always look out of the window when I travel by car. For example, when I ride with my father I watch the city lights or quiet countryside because I find changing scenery calming and interesting.

Gợi ý: Reduce hesitation words and improve sentence structure. Provide one clear reason and a brief example, using linking words to connect ideas. Choose precise vocabulary (e.g., 'surroundings', 'nature', 'sunrises').

Ví dụ: Yes, I often take photos from the car window because I love nature’s colors. For instance, I frequently photograph sunrises and sunsets while travelling since the light makes ordinary scenes look beautiful.

Gợi ý: Give a clear preference or explain why you like both with smoother grammar and linking phrases. Use correct verb forms and clearer adjectives. Keep it within 2–3 sentences with specific details or examples.

Ví dụ: I like both, but if I had to choose I would pick the mountains because their peaceful, dramatic views inspire me to take photos. However, I also enjoy the sea because the sound of waves helps me relax and forget my worries.

× Definitely, I will say it's my the habit that I can never change that.

✓ Definitely, I would say it's my habit that I can never change.

The sentence contains an extra definite article 'the' before 'habit' which is incorrect. Remove 'the' and change 'will say' to 'would say' for a more natural modal choice in this context. Suggestion: use 'my habit' and 'I would say' for natural phrasing.

× Whenever I'm in the car with my father, I always just looked around the window and wandering through the scenery of the lights or or just a peaceful environment.

✓ Whenever I'm in the car with my father, I always just look out of the window and wander through the scenery of lights or a peaceful environment.

Mixed tenses and incorrect verb forms: 'I'm' (present) conflicts with 'looked' (past); 'wandering' is a present participle not matched properly. Use simple present verbs 'look' and 'wander' to match habitual action. Also change 'around the window' to 'out of the window' and remove duplicate 'or'. Add article 'a' before 'peaceful environment'.

× It doesn't matter. I just love to just go around and laugh.

✓ It doesn't matter. I just love to go around and laugh.

Redundant adverb 'just' is used twice; remove the extra 'just' to avoid repetition. 'Go around and laugh' is acceptable; ensure concise wording.

× Definitely. I'm the kind of person that enjoys photographing, umm, those surrounding because I feel like everything in this world is very beautiful and the nature is it just the awesome thing that we can ever see.

✓ Definitely. I'm the kind of person who enjoys photographing my surroundings because I feel like everything in this world is very beautiful and nature is an amazing thing to see.

Use 'who' for people rather than 'that'. 'Those surrounding' is incorrect; use 'my surroundings' or 'the surroundings'. The phrase 'the nature is it just the awesome thing that we can ever see' is ungrammatical; rephrase to 'nature is an amazing thing to see' and use 'an' before 'amazing'.

× So I just like to take, uh, photographs of sunset, sunrise and everything just from the window of the car.

✓ So I just like to take photographs of the sunset, the sunrise and everything from the window of the car.

When speaking of specific events like 'sunset' and 'sunrise' in this context, use the definite article 'the' before each. Remove filler 'uh' and redundant 'just'.

× I would say both because mountains just makes me very exciting because it has a lot of peaceful views, cinematic which is makes me take much more photograph of that.

✓ I would say both because mountains just make me very excited; they have a lot of peaceful, cinematic views, which makes me take many more photographs of them.

Subject-verb agreement: 'mountains' is plural so use 'make' not 'makes'. 'Makes me very exciting' is wrong; use 'make me very excited'. 'It has' should be 'they have' to refer to 'mountains'. 'Cinematic which is makes' is ungrammatical; rephrase 'cinematic views, which makes me take many more photographs of them'. Use plural 'photographs' and 'many more' instead of 'much more'.

× But at the same time in the sea I enjoy how you just wander around flows without caring about the world, so it just makes me feel relaxed.

✓ But at the same time, at sea I enjoy how you can just wander as the water flows without caring about the world, so it makes me feel relaxed.

Preposition and pronoun issues: use 'at sea' rather than 'in the sea' for general experience. 'You just wander around flows' is ungrammatical; rephrase to 'you can just wander as the water flows'. Remove redundant 'just'. Ensure modal 'can' for ability/possibility.