Travelling— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid hesitation sounds (uh, umm), and fix tense/word-choice errors (e.g. 'I would prefer' not 'I would thought I prefer'). Add one specific detail to support your preference and use a linking word for contrast (e.g. 'however').

Ví dụ: Yes, I usually look out of the window when I travel because I enjoy seeing green fields and trees. However, if the landscape is uninteresting, like a desert, I usually use my mobile to pass the time.

Gợi ý: Give a direct answer, remove fillers, correct grammar (e.g. 'I take photos' and 'the photos are often blurry'). Explain briefly why photos are blurry and offer one detail about what you do instead or how you try to improve.

Ví dụ: Yes, I sometimes take photos when the view is especially beautiful, but the pictures often turn out blurry because the car is moving. So now I try to wait for a stop or use a faster shutter setting on my phone to get clearer shots.

Gợi ý: Answer directly with correct word choice ('sea' not 'see'), remove hesitations, and include one supporting reason with a linking word (e.g. 'because' or 'and'). Keep it to one or two sentences and add a specific detail about what you enjoy at the sea.

Ví dụ: I prefer the sea because I love the relaxed atmosphere on the beach; for example, I enjoy sunbathing, walking along the shoreline, and listening to the waves.

× But if uh, it is like a desert, I would thought I prefer to use my mobile.

✓ But if it is like a desert, I would prefer to use my mobile.

The student used 'would thought' which incorrectly mixes a past tense verb 'thought' with the conditional modal 'would'. According to the Past tense issue (ID 5), 'thought' is a past form that does not belong after 'would' in this context. The intended meaning is a present conditional preference, so use 'would prefer' (base verb) after 'would'. Suggestion: use 'would prefer' or simply 'I prefer' depending on meaning.

× Well, if the scenery is really gorgeous and stunning, umm I take photos.

✓ Well, if the scenery is really gorgeous and stunning, I take photos.

The original sentence includes filler 'umm' which interrupts flow but is not a grammatical error. The main issue is redundancy and informal filler; however under the provided list the closest is Verb in the present participle form (ID 10) is not strictly applicable. Instead, no verb form change is required; remove filler for clarity. Suggestion: say 'I take photos' or 'I will take photos' depending on habitual or conditional meaning.

× Most of the photos are will be blurry.

✓ Most of the photos will be blurry.

The sentence incorrectly combines the passive verb 'are' with the future 'will be', producing an ungrammatical sequence. This fits Verb in the past participle form (ID 9) in the sense that auxiliary verbs are misused. Remove the extra auxiliary 'are' and keep the future modal: 'will be blurry'. Suggestion: use 'will be' for future prediction or 'are blurry' for general statements.

× I would say see, uh, because I really like the atmosphere when I'm on a beach and I'm sunbathing or I'm walking, uh, near the sea and I, I'm enjoying the scenery and the view.

✓ I would say the sea, because I really like the atmosphere when I'm on the beach, sunbathing or walking near the sea, and I'm enjoying the scenery and the view.

Several pronoun/word choice and article issues appear: 'say see' is a mispronunciation/confusion of 'sea', and 'on a beach' should be 'on the beach' for a typical experience; repetition of subjects ('I, I'm') is redundant. This matches Incorrect use of pronouns (ID 12) and Article errors (ID 22) but per instructions focus on listed types—here we report ID 12. Suggestion: use 'the sea' and 'the beach' and avoid redundant pronoun fragments; streamline clauses for fluency.