Travelling— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Improve grammar and fluency, reduce hesitations, and be more concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct verb forms (e.g., 'I don't usually look out...'), and avoid filler words like 'umm' and 'uh'. Provide one supporting detail using a linking word (e.g., 'however' or 'but') and a specific example about what you enjoy seeing from trains.

Ví dụ: I don't usually look out the window when I'm travelling by car or bus because I prefer to focus on my phone or rest. However, when I travel by train I love watching the changing landscape, especially fields and small villages, because it feels relaxing and interesting.

Gợi ý: Clarify phrasing and use more natural collocations. Replace awkward expressions ('pattern of mind', 'relieve the moments') with clear language like 'habit' and 'relive the moments'. Keep answer within 3–4 sentences and add a brief reason or example. Use a linking word such as 'because' to connect ideas.

Ví dụ: Yes, I often take photos of the scenery because I'm a social media manager and I enjoy documenting my trips. I don't only post these pictures online; I also take them to relive the memories later, for example, photos of sunrise over the countryside.

Gợi ý: Fix grammar and complete sentences. Start with a direct topic sentence (e.g., 'I prefer the mountains'). Use linking words ('because', 'for example') and provide a specific supporting detail or short anecdote. Correct phrases like 'a very refreshing' to 'very refreshing' and 'many often' to 'very often' or 'often'.

Ví dụ: I prefer the mountains because I enjoy the peaceful atmosphere and fresh air. For example, I often went camping there when I was younger, and I like hiking and being away from city noise.

× I'm not usually look out the window at the scenery when I'm traveling by car or bus because I like to grow umm, until I reach my destination.

✓ I'm not usually looking out the window at the scenery when I'm traveling by car or bus because I like to sleep until I reach my destination.

The original sentence uses 'I'm not usually look' which mixes auxiliary 'am' with base verb 'look' incorrectly. Use the present continuous 'I'm not usually looking' or simple present 'I don't usually look'. Also 'grow umm' is nonsensical in context; likely the speaker meant 'sleep' or 'doze'. Suggest replacing with 'sleep'. Maintain tense consistency by using present continuous 'I'm traveling' and 'I'm not usually looking'.

× But when I am traveling by train, for example, I really love to watch the landscape, uh, change in sport than usual structures or buildings outside.

✓ But when I am traveling by train, for example, I really love to watch the landscape change, especially the countryside rather than urban structures or buildings outside.

The phrase 'change in sport than usual structures' is ungrammatical. 'Change' should follow directly as the verb: 'watch the landscape change'. 'In sport' is incorrect; likely intended 'especially' or 'in contrast to'. Replace 'usual structures' with 'urban structures' for clarity. Keep present continuous 'am traveling' and present infinitive 'watch the landscape change'.

× Photography is a pattern of mind and I'm also a social media manager, so I always like to have pictures of my trips and not only to post online, but I really love to relieve the moments and have those memories again.

✓ Photography is a state of mind and I'm also a social media manager, so I always like to have pictures of my trips not only to post online, but also to relive the moments and remember them.

'Pattern of mind' is incorrect collocation; 'state of mind' is the correct expression. The sentence has redundancy and awkward coordination: 'not only to post online, but I really love to relieve the moments' should be 'not only to post online, but also to relive the moments'. 'Relieve' is incorrect verb choice; use 'relive'. Use 'remember them' or 'have those memories' for clarity. This corrects collocation, verb choice, and coordination.

× I really love both, but if I had to choose I would pick the mountains because I really enjoy the peaceful atmosphere and I think it's a very refreshing to go outdoors once in a while.

✓ I really love both, but if I had to choose I would pick the mountains because I really enjoy the peaceful atmosphere and I think it's very refreshing to go outdoors once in a while.

The phrase 'it's a very refreshing' incorrectly uses the article 'a' before an adjective used predicatively. Remove 'a' to form 'it's very refreshing'. Also ensure 'go outdoors' fits the infinitive phrase. No tense change needed.

× I used to go camping many often when I was.

✓ I used to go camping very often when I was younger.

The original is ungrammatical: 'many often' is incorrect; use 'very often' or 'a lot'. The clause 'when I was' is incomplete and needs a complement such as 'younger' or an age. 'Used to' correctly indicates a past habit, so complete the time clause to make the sentence grammatical.