Travelling— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details linked with simple connectors. Correct grammar (verb forms, articles, singular/plural) and avoid repetition. Aim for 2–4 sentences, e.g. say why you enjoy looking out (mood, sights) and give one specific example.

Ví dụ: Yes, I often look out the window when I travel because it helps me relax and recharge. For example, on the way home I enjoy watching people and buildings change, which distracts me from a busy day and makes the journey pleasant.

Gợi ý: Answer directly and clearly. Explain one reason with a coherent example. Avoid unclear or irrelevant words (e.g. “Doritos”) and fillers. Use linking words like “because” or “so” correctly. Keep to 2–3 sentences and finish the thought.

Ví dụ: Not usually, because photos taken through a moving car window often look blurry or include reflections. Instead, I prefer to enjoy the view with my eyes so I can remember the atmosphere more clearly.

Gợi ý: Give a clear topic sentence stating your preference, then add one or two specific reasons with linking words. Correct grammar (remove redundant words, finish sentences) and use precise vocabulary (e.g. “peaceful”, “relaxing”) rather than vague phrases. Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

Ví dụ: I prefer the sea because I live near the coast and find the beach atmosphere very relaxing. The warm sunshine and gentle waves create a peaceful place for meditation, and the salty air helps me feel refreshed and less stressed.

× Yes, I think it is a good place for recharging my mood.

✓ Yes, I think it is a good way to recharge my mood.

'Place' is incorrect here because you mean a method or means; 'way' fits. 'For recharging my mood' uses a gerund phrase after 'for' but a full infinitive 'to recharge' sounds more natural. Use 'way to recharge' for idiomatic English.

× It can support, it can make me feel unwind, I can see the sight things along the way and it can allows me to escape from hustle and bustle in city.

✓ It can support me; it can make me feel relaxed; I can see sights along the way; and it allows me to escape from the hustle and bustle of the city.

Several errors: 'make me feel unwind' mixes verb forms — use adjective 'relaxed'. 'Sight things' is incorrect word order and choice; use plural noun 'sights'. 'It can allows' mixes modal 'can' with incorrect verb form — after 'can' use base form 'allow' or drop 'can' and use 'allows'. Article and preposition needed: 'the hustle and bustle of the city.' Also add punctuation for clarity.

× It is our valuable time for me for relaxing.

✓ It is valuable time for me to relax.

Redundant and awkward phrasing: 'our' conflicts with 'for me'. Choose one; here 'for me' is appropriate. 'Time for relaxing' is less natural than 'time to relax.' Use singular 'time' without 'our' to match 'me.'

× Not really because, uh, some Doritos will hinder your size of the camera.

✓ Not really, because, uh, things like Doritos can get in the way of your camera view.

'Some Doritos will hinder your size of the camera' is ungrammatical and unclear. 'Some' plus brand is odd; 'things like Doritos' clarifies. 'Hinder your size of the camera' is incorrect; use 'get in the way of your camera view' or 'block the camera.'

× So if you bring up the pictures you will ultimately see that's not gonna, uh, reflect the beautiful scenes.

✓ So if you take pictures, you will ultimately see that they do not reflect the beautiful scenes.

'Bring up the pictures' is wrong collocation; use 'take pictures.' Colloquial 'gonna' should be 'will' in formal correction. 'That's not gonna reflect' requires subject agreement: 'they do not reflect.' Remove filler 'uh' in corrected sentence.

× So I prefer use I to immense yourself and just.

✓ So I prefer to immerse myself and just enjoy the view.

Original has wrong pronoun order and wrong verbs: 'prefer use I' is ungrammatical. Use 'prefer to immerse myself' (correct reflexive pronoun) and add 'enjoy the view' to complete the thought. 'Immense' is incorrect word; correct is 'immerse.'

× Well, since I am living in a coastal city so I prefer travelling to a place near the sea.

✓ Well, since I live in a coastal city, I prefer travelling to places near the sea.

Use simple present 'I live' rather than 'I am living' for general fact. Remove redundant 'so' when starting with 'since' and match plurality: 'places near the sea' or 'a place near the sea.' Add comma after the clause.

× So I think it's humidity and the sunshine is very nice and kind.

✓ I think the humidity and the sunshine are very pleasant.

'It's humidity and the sunshine is very nice and kind' is ungrammatical. 'Humidity and sunshine' are plural subjects — use 'are.' 'Nice and kind' is incorrect collocation for weather; use 'pleasant.'

× It has a a better quiet places for me to do meditations.

✓ It has better, quieter places for me to meditate.

Remove duplicated 'a a.' 'Better quiet places' should use comparative 'better' with 'quieter' (adjective order), and 'places' plural matches. 'Do meditations' is awkward; use 'meditate.'

× It allows me to temporarily escape from the.

✓ It allows me to temporarily escape from it all.

Original sentence is incomplete ('from the.'), missing object. 'Escape from it all' is a natural way to finish the thought. Alternatively 'escape from the city' if intended.