Travelling— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Be more concise and avoid repetition; start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using a linking word. Correct small grammar slips (e.g., "time moves quite quicker" should be "time passes more quickly").

Ví dụ: Yes — I often look out the window when I travel by bus or car because I enjoy the changing scenery. For example, I like watching the trees and mountains go by, and it makes the journey feel shorter when I observe people commuting and local neighbourhoods.

Gợi ý: Good content and coherence; tighten phrasing and avoid small tense/style inconsistencies (use present simple consistently: "I sometimes use a digital camera"). Use one linking phrase to connect reason and example.

Ví dụ: Yes, I often take photos of the scenery with my phone, and sometimes I use a digital camera. This helps me remember beautiful moments; for instance, I edit a few shots and share them with friends to show my artistic vision.

Gợi ý: Be accurate and specific with details and avoid contradictions or unlikely claims (e.g., lions are not common in mountains in most contexts). Begin with a clear topic sentence, then give two concise, realistic reasons linked by a connector. Correct small errors (remove extra 'it').

Ví dụ: I prefer the mountains because I enjoy hiking and seeing wildlife like goats and birds. Also, I feel more comfortable on land since I have a fear of deep water, so coastal activities make me anxious.

× I also like watching other people commute to their different destinations and also the time moves quite quicker when I look at the window.

✓ I also like watching other people commute to their different destinations, and time passes more quickly when I look out of the window.

The original uses 'the time moves quite quicker' which is unnatural. Use present simple 'time passes' to match habitual action and 'more quickly' as correct comparative adverb form. Also replace 'look at the window' with 'look out of the window' for correct preposition.

× Sometimes I would use a digital camera to take photos.

✓ Sometimes I use a digital camera to take photos.

Using 'would' suggests a conditional or habitual past; for a present habit the simple present 'use' is correct. Keep tense consistent with the surrounding present-tense narration.

× I find this helps me remember the beautiful scenes I've seen along the commute, and it also helps me display my artistic vision, such as when I edit the photos and show it to my friends.

✓ I find this helps me remember the beautiful scenes I've seen along the commute, and it also helps me display my artistic vision, such as when I edit the photos and show them to my friends.

The pronoun 'it' is incorrect referring to 'the photos' (plural); use 'them'. This is a pronoun reference error categorized under incorrect use of pronouns but corrected here as past participle context for 'I've seen' is fine. Ensure pronoun agrees in number with its antecedent.

× But the sea, I find it quite intimidating because I have a fear of water.

✓ But the sea I find quite intimidating because I have a fear of water.

The phrase 'the sea, I find it' has an unnecessary extra pronoun 'it' causing redundancy. Remove 'it' to make the sentence concise and grammatically correct. Also commas can be simplified for smoother flow.

× I prefer the mountains because it I love to hike and I like to see the different animals that are in the mountains such as the goats, the mountain goats and the lions.

✓ I prefer the mountains because I love to hike and I like to see the different animals that live there, such as goats, mountain goats and even lions.

Original has 'it I' which looks like a typing error; remove the extraneous 'it'. Use 'live there' instead of 'are in the mountains' for natural phrasing. Articles before plural animal names are unnecessary; use 'goats' not 'the goats'. Also 'even lions' sounds more natural and concise.