Travelling— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Your answer is relevant and shows personal feeling, but it is too long, slightly repetitive and has some grammar issues ("looking out of the scenery", repeated phrase "can give me can give me"). To improve: 1) Start with a clear topic sentence. 2) Use one or two supporting details with linking words (for example, 'because' or 'so') and avoid repetition. 3) Fix prepositions and reduce sentence length to under five sentences. Also use a varied vocabulary (e.g., "landmarks" -> "local landmarks" or "scenery").

Ví dụ: I do. I enjoy looking at the scenery when I travel by bus or car because it helps me relax and notice local landmarks. For example, I often spot old buildings and parks that tell me about the area's history, which makes the journey more interesting.

Gợi ý: Good idea and personal habit are mentioned, but the answer contains awkward phrasing ("outside of the car window", "that was so popular") and a run-on sentence. To improve: 1) Open with a direct topic sentence. 2) Use one clear reason and one brief example. 3) Use correct tense and concise wording. 4) Add a linking word (e.g., 'so' or 'so I').

Ví dụ: Yes, I often take photos through the car window because it frames the scene like a picture. For example, last month I photographed a coastal sunset and then shared it on my social media so friends could see the view.

Gợi ý: Your answer directly addresses the question and gives personal reasons, which is good. However, filler words ("uh") reduce fluency, and some phrases are slightly awkward ("playing the water", "sounds of the wave"). To improve: 1) Remove fillers and give two concise supporting reasons using linking words like 'because' and 'also'. 2) Use more natural collocations ("playing in the water", "sound of the waves").

Ví dụ: I prefer the sea because I enjoy swimming and relaxing by the shore. Also, the sound of the waves and the fresh sea air help me unwind after a busy week.

× Yes, I really enjoy looking out of the scenery and the beautiful views when taking a bus trip or a car trip because it helps me relax and feel the breeze on my face and looking out of the landmarks can give me can give me information about the way of the area.

✓ Yes, I really enjoy looking at the scenery and the beautiful views when taking a bus or car trip because it helps me relax, lets me feel the breeze on my face, and looking at the landmarks can give me information about the area.

Error: incorrect preposition with 'looking' and repeated phrase; also awkward verb forms. 'Looking out of the scenery' is ungrammatical; the correct collocation is 'look at the scenery' or 'look out at the scenery'. 'Taking a bus trip or a car trip' is wordy; 'taking a bus or car trip' is clearer. 'Helps me relax and feel the breeze' needed parallel structure; use 'lets me feel' for clarity. Remove duplicate 'can give me can give me'. Suggestion: use correct collocations and maintain parallel verb forms when listing actions.

× Yes, I really like taking photos of the scenery outside of the car window because I think that the car window is like a viewfinder which can capture the precious moments of the beautiful views.

✓ Yes, I really like taking photos of the scenery outside the car window because I think the car window is like a viewfinder that can capture precious moments of the beautiful views.

Error: unnecessary 'of' in 'outside of the car window' (American English can omit 'of' here). Also use 'that' instead of 'which' in restrictive clauses. 'The precious moments' is wordy; 'precious moments' is natural. Suggestion: remove unnecessary prepositions and use 'that' for essential clauses.

× And I always share the photos on the social media that was so popular.

✓ And I always share the photos on social media, which is very popular.

Error: tense and article problems. 'That was so popular' uses past tense 'was' although the popularity is ongoing; use present tense 'is'. 'The social media' is incorrect - 'social media' generally takes no article. Also use 'which' to add non-essential information. Suggestion: use present tense for current facts and correct article usage for 'social media'.

× I think, uh, it's a difficult choice, but I choose to prefer the sea because I like playing the water and I think the, uh, sounds of the wave and the fresh air make me comfortable and relaxed.

✓ I think it's a difficult choice, but I prefer the sea because I like playing in the water, and I think the sound of the waves and the fresh air make me feel comfortable and relaxed.

Errors: 'I choose to prefer' is redundant; use 'I prefer'. 'Playing the water' requires preposition 'in'. 'Sounds of the wave' should be 'sound of the waves' (plural) or 'the sound of the waves' for natural expression. 'Make me comfortable and relaxed' is acceptable but 'make me feel comfortable and relaxed' is more natural. Suggestion: remove redundancy, use correct prepositions, and use plural for repeated natural phenomena like waves.