Travelling— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Be more concise and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence, then briefly explain the reason with one specific detail and a linking word. Avoid repetition and informal contractions like "gonna."

Ví dụ: No, I usually avoid looking out the window when I travel because I get motion sickness. For example, if I don't take my medication I feel dizzy and may vomit, which is uncomfortable for me and other passengers.

Gợi ý: Good content and clear opinion. Make it more concise and vary vocabulary. Use one linking word to connect reason and consequence, and give a brief specific example to strengthen your answer.

Ví dụ: No, I rarely take photos through the car window because I prefer to enjoy the moment. For instance, when I focus on the scenery I feel more connected to nature, whereas taking photos would distract me from that experience.

Gợi ý: Begin with a clear topic sentence and reduce filler words (uh, um). Give two concise supporting details (mood and activities) and link them with a connective. Use slightly more precise vocabulary (e.g., "uplifts my mood", "water sports").

Ví dụ: I definitely prefer the sea. The sunny beach uplifts my mood and I enjoy summer activities there, such as swimming and kayaking, which I can't do in the mountains.

× No, I don't usually watch window, look at the window when I'm traveling because give me motion sickness so I can really get sick and if I don't have my medicine, I'm gonna throw up.

✓ No, I don't usually look out of the window when I'm traveling because it gives me motion sickness, so I can really get sick and if I don't have my medicine, I'm going to throw up.

The student omitted the correct verb pattern and prepositions. 'Look out of the window' is the correct phrase (preposition use: out of). The clause needed a subject 'it' and the verb should be 'gives' (third person singular present) to agree with 'it' and match present tense. 'Gonna' is informal; 'going to' is appropriate. Use commas to separate clauses for clarity.

× No, I don't usually watch window, look at the window when I'm traveling because give me motion sickness so I can really get sick and if I don't have my medicine, I'm gonna throw up.

✓ No, I don't usually look out of the window when I'm traveling because it gives me motion sickness, so I can really get sick and if I don't have my medicine, I'm going to throw up.

The original used 'watch window' which is incorrect collocation. The correct prepositional phrase is 'look out of the window' or 'look out the window.' Using the preposition clarifies direction and relationship between looking and the window.

× I don't take photos of the landscape outside of the car window because I feel like I need to enjoy the moment.

✓ I don't take photos of the landscape outside the car window because I feel like I need to enjoy the moment.

The sentence is mostly correct, but 'outside of the car window' is wordy; 'outside the car window' is more natural. No verb agreement error here; kept present simple for habits.

× I need to feel connected to nature and if I have something in my hand trying to get distracted I will miss the main point, like reconnect with nature.

✓ I need to feel connected to nature, and if I have something in my hand and get distracted, I will miss the main point, like reconnecting with nature.

Use a clear clause structure: add 'and' and change 'trying to get distracted' (awkward) to 'and get distracted' or 'and end up getting distracted.' 'Reconnect' after 'like' should be the -ing form 'reconnecting' because it follows 'miss the main point, like...' indicating an example/activity.

× I definitely prefer the sea, the beach, uh, the beach area with the sun, like lift up my mood.

✓ I definitely prefer the sea and the beach area with the sun because it lifts my mood.

The original is a run-on with fillers and a non-finite clause 'like lift up my mood' without subject or correct verb form. Use 'because' to show reason and 'it lifts my mood' with third person singular 'lifts.' Remove fillers for clarity.

× Umm, and also, uh, I like the hot, uh, weather like summer time is the best time of, of the year for me.

✓ I like hot weather; summer is the best time of the year for me.

Remove fillers and extra commas. 'Summer time' should be 'summer' or 'summertime.' Use noun phrase 'hot weather' without an article. The repetition 'time of, of the year' is corrected to 'time of the year.'

× And it's also good for like water sports as well.

✓ It's also good for water sports.

'Good for like water sports as well' is redundant and informal. Remove 'like' and 'as well' together; keep 'good for water sports.' This is clearer and grammatically correct.